Two Cities: Sons of Zaun

This persona is so messed up. Even without looking at your posts and comments, it can be seen from what you wrote that you started it too long and wanted to finish it as soon as possible. You were too anxious. But seeing as how sincere you are, I won't say anything else.

The most taboo thing about this batch of Twin Cities fan fiction is writing too fast. Most authors will find that there is nothing to write soon. Once separated from the background of the Twin Cities set up by the screenwriter, the big world of lol is simply uncontrollable (the official does not know what the situation is) This book is not rushed. The most important thing is that the contradictions in the Twin Cities must be resolved slowly and stay on this stage long enough. But it shouldn't be too watery, so daily descriptions are very important (this is what everyone reads fanfiction for). There are a lot of characters in this book, and the interactions are quite good. Keep it up, you can't just focus on the protagonist, otherwise it will be finished soon In addition, if you want the book to sell well, you must choose the heroine well. So far, the results of choosing Jinx are pretty good, but the others are also pretty good. But v is probably the worst choice, readers don't like him very much. If you choose multiple heroines, don't choose too many. Two or three is the best number. Too many will affect the author's daily description.

The protagonist, the native, has nothing to see.

This book is the one with the best writing and story logic among the Shuang Cities novels that I have found after watching the anime. Although I have said this three times in total 😁, this book is really good, especially the paragraphs describing the characters in the story are very consistent with my feelings about the characters in the anime. The last book felt so good because it was a trip of three, but it is a pity that the eunuchs and later ones feel a bit too Japanese and always describe some plots that I feel are otaku-like.

I also think this is the best Twin Cities fanfic currently. To me, as long as it's not disgusting, the heroine's problems don't matter. I think the author can control the emotional line. I think the shortcoming of this book is that it is more enjoyable. The protagonist's cheat is only revealed in the last chapter, but the function of the cheat is not explained (is it just that you can see those Olympiad symbols?), And the clues about Feng Nu have not yet been revealed, which is quite bold for a new writer. The bottom line is that there is less.

After reading the latest two updates, I think it's acceptable But I feel sorry for my book stamps and reading coins. It's really useless. It seems that I have written some changes. In fact, I wrote a few changes based on the most popular changes in the animation comment area, and then replaced a certain character in the work with my own. Salo didn't want to write it, so he directly killed the offline——Okay, the result Duan Dare to write - md, the male protagonist also has the mechanical pioneer mode, and he is with Blast. It can be used without writing. The contradiction is completely the same, exactly the same What does the Twin Cities look like under ideal circumstances? It is completely obscene. A character does what the author wants in a certain place. He wants to understand the flaws and want to be three-dimensional, but can the author write like a poet? He jumps left and right, and his political stance is also a mess. He says "I feel sorry for XXX", but there is obviously no need to oppose it, and he insists on adding drama to his own role It seems to have gone beyond the point that everyone criticized, but the twists and procrastination of the character incident in the original Twin Cities have also been learned. (Read friends, think about it, your world is still like this. It is indeed a good thing to sew the character stories of League of Legends into it, but this author simply forgot that there is such a person. Chun Chun is the one who diverted the attention. He said before, "Indeed, I will consider it." ", The md robot was eaten by you, forcibly creating a conflict, woah, there are so many ideas and pictures, you go and replace the main creator of Teliga and sit on it yourself) The author is really invincible, now start to lay the groundwork for stacking the boxes, lean on it, The more I think about it, the better it gets, and the longer it becomes, the more awkward it becomes. (It's not impossible. Can you really think about the outline? I haven't written it yet. It's useless to lay down the so-called foreshadowing.) As long as the author continues to fill in the water, he will either die quickly or suffer from colon excrement. The starting point is There are so many books like this I hope the author can write it well The following is a more personal comment: To put it bluntly, the current shaping of the male protagonist is the author's obscenity, and sometimes he has to create dramatic plots for himself Give way and contradict each other, making this group of people look like retarded people For the sake of going to the city, then you have to do more things Be emotional, and then go their separate ways and start a game The protagonist does not like Jinx's recklessness and killing other people, intensifying the conflict Shield, intensify conflicts by yourself, and also need emotional narration - a code within a code, which cannot be written without the plot. Jinx changes her position as soon as she needs it (when she needs a conflict, she will pull it out and make mistakes, and when she doesn't need it, she will persuade the good girl or just disappear) Another world that has been mentioned for a long time At the end, there is a so-called Ryze plot, and later you join forces to fight Being able to empathize with a complex person does not mean that you can empathize with a speculator who repeatedly jumps around, is politically unstable, and relies entirely on the author for his intelligence This kind of protagonist is just like the kind of person who hates Tang San with his words and actions, but the fan protagonist is another Tang San Obviously it is not a big problem, but it has to focus on the most controversial points and write it all in one go. I really admire it. Today is the real golden chapter.

It's still the same plot as the original one, so no matter what fanfic you write, it would be great to just go watch the original drama.

The protagonist doesn't know the plot, so what's the point?

Recently, I have no desire to read this book. There is nothing attractive that makes me want to read on. The plot development made me bored and complained. A real estate gangster acted like the male protagonist of some Japanese manga Asashi.

Can't it be clear? If it's clear that there are multiple female protagonists in the harem, I can still pursue it and try my best to reward you. If not, don't be so vague. It's not good for anyone. If you want to write a female protagonist, don't give him a female lead. If you really like Ike, why not make him the main character🤫

The starting point doesn't seem to be suitable for abusing the main text.

It's well written, just like what was said in the comment area, don't upgrade your combat power too quickly, and handle the daily routine and details well, because the fanfic has its own original background characters and doesn't need to be too much foreshadowing. Once it unfolds, the author cannot stand up to other heroes, and the perception will decline. By the way, emotional issues must be handled well. Even if Bao Bao is forgiven, her growth must be reflected, and the emotional issues of the protagonist must not be outrageous.

What's the use of this protagonist? It's following the original plot completely, nothing has changed.

This is what I want to watch. The gangsters and Chu Yuxun are here. Come on, the bloody plot is coming to me like a storm. Come on, come on! Come on! I want to see rivers of blood! ! ! !

Now that I have seen it, for now, it is a very good two-city novel, one of the few that makes me want to follow it! Come on, author!

I really want to see the bloody plot after the scene. Write it for me. Recently, the plot has been a bit tired. I feel that the span of the protagonist from a gangster godfather to a college student is a bit long. I am not saying it is bad, but it is not as attractive as the gangster godfather. I have been skipping the plot recently.

I want to see Wei, I want to see a river of blood🙂

Caitlin

Why! Forget it! A sudden turn of events! Can't come back

Good-looking, book-raising. By the way, my personal opinion is that I don't really like VI. It always feels weird for such a woman to fall in love.

The writing is really good. I feel that Shuangcheng's best-written books are this and that mythical story. I feel that the results of this book are not very satisfactory. The author will not enter the palace in the future🤔

I'm too lazy to pay attention anymore. I don't think about anything about the ending. I'll say goodbye.

It was originally written quite well, and it ranks high in my fandom list.

I think this book is already the best among Shuangcheng fans and is worth reading. Although it has been completed, sometimes I can't help but come back to take a look and vote for a monthly vote to support it. I hope the author can produce more fan works 😍😍

It's an indigenous story with a single female protagonist, and it's well written, but the original plot line isn't very pleasing. It's a good thing to respect the original work, but blindly adapting it to the original plot line will give people the feeling of falling behind and not being able to reach the G-spot is very uncomfortable.

Is it the son of Zuan that I thought of? By the way, will Shen Nong come over?

I've finished reading this book. It's very interesting. I look forward to more chapters.