Mortal: I Am an Undercover Cultivator, I Can Repair the Magic Weapon

It can only be said that in order to forcefully suppress the protagonist's combat power, the author ended up writing the protagonist into a waste. For example, in the fight with Brother Fenglinggen Lu, the protagonist had foresight, a talisman, a thunder child, the top magic weapon, the top body and martial arts in the mortal world, and the help of Dong Xuan'er. The result was that he was beaten badly. It was far worse than the original Han Li. It's strange that the results could be good after writing like this.

Don't order it, the main character is useless and poisonous!

The Order of Ascension to Immortality was sold at a low price. I'm crazy.

The eunuch training style, the setting and Golden Finger feel a little bit boring, the description is mediocre, and the plot is too bland.

At first I thought this plug-in was very powerful. As a result, I saw that I had to find materials to repair the magic weapon? And what else needs to be done to change the plot? Really confused.

It's extremely poisonous, and I even killed the Foundation Establishment Pill myself.

Authors who write about mortals are all very courageous. They dare to write about demons if their qualifications are not good. That is, no one dares to write about killing the protagonist to seize opportunities. All kinds of opportunities for the protagonists in his novels end up being the same as the protagonists in the book. Ambiguous and like a slave. It would be strange if it doesn't collapse. Why not just kill them all? What time is Daozu? What is the reincarnation of Dao Master? What is it now! And why can't I be the future time ancestor?

You all can't imagine how Nangong Wan received the news that the protagonist had some kind of string-pulling bug. This bug entered Nangong Wan's sea of ​​knowledge and then subtly influenced Nangong Wan to have a good impression of the protagonist. What is the difference between this and brainwashing? I have never seen a novel where the heroine was obtained through brainwashing. With this method, 1,000 female protagonists will be recruited, and the labor and management will not even look at it. Disgusting, have you never written a novel? Such a big poisonous spot. What are the little bits and bobs in the front that others can tolerate? Subscribe to the first chapter and read this. I said the writing is not bad. How come there are so few comments? It's really outrageous!

I found a probability that as long as Nangong Wan is the heroine in the mortal fanfic, then the book will most likely be a bad book.

Second, there are too many private goods, and the more you look for compensation, the more you collapse. And the author tells you that the protagonist he wrote is firm in his Taoism, decisive in killing, and far-sighted, and will not stand back for any bullshit. But the plot is, oh beauties, please stop blocking the way, oh I am so helpless, oh you have really hurt me~ The characters are separated from the plot.

If you don't know how to write emotional lines, just write them out in one stroke, don't force them to be twisted together.

Good book 🙂 Continuous poisoning is completely unreasonable. The author has no common sense and likes to be stubborn with others.

I have read so many mortal fan fictions. This is the first time that a free prostitute like me can spend a dime to comment. I hope someone can help me find the reason. Why is this novel so depressing and aggrieved? Just like they say, it is both true and true? I don't know, this is the first time I've paid to comment. This novel really disgusts me.

I remember reading a few chapters of this book not long after it was first updated. I found that the logic of each character's actions was too confusing, so I stopped reading it. I happened to read it today and saw that there were so many words and it was still a harem story. I came in again and continued reading, but I was fascinated by the ending of the original character Qin Yan written by the author. The book has been abandoned, why do you want to create a poisonous point for this book, and Qin Yan's character and plot have always been positive to the protagonist. The protagonist in the book doesn't know, don't you, the author, also know, why do you have to write her so miserable and miserable, and have this ending, and design a lot of plots Love enriches the character, she is from the same family as the protagonist, and then various plots depict her fawning over the protagonist and sacrificing herself without asking for anything in return. This really makes her look pitiful, and then it is written that the protagonist never cares about this person, and the euphemistic name is that the enemy is unknown, the Taoist heart is firm, and the heart is cold. This is how I wrote it in the harem novel. I don't know what you want to do. Don't you like money? Author, you have to put some boring literary youth in the harem novel to highlight your point. I said that it is a harem novel for ordinary people no matter how big or small it is. How can it achieve such a result? It turns out that this is what it is. I am a person who picked it up and continued reading for the second time and was forced to leave again. Then there is nothing to say.

No, didn't you realize it was a bit poisonous when you wrote it? You should read it a few times before sending it out. The Foundation Establishment Pill was taken away by Han Li's Immortal Ascension Order. This is a hatred that blocks the way. We are irreconcilable.

The big poisonous point 1: The Immortal Ascension Order is worth at least two to three thousand spirit stones. If you are in a hurry to sell it, you should ask for 1,500. In order to get clues about the Star Soul Stone, you sold two high-grade magic weapons plus 300 spirit stones, which is worth less than 700 spirit stones (the original book clearly states that It is indeed said that the ordinary top-level magic weapon Fire Cloud Sword is worthless even if you buy three hundred spirit stones, and the top-level magic weapon can hold up more than one hundred spirit stones) 2: It took two years without any shortage of elixirs to go from the ninth level to the tenth level of Qi refining. Is it slower than Han Li to cultivate the three spiritual roots? Han Li went from the ninth level to the eleventh level in two years 3: Why can't he practice normally to the thirteenth level of Qi training? The original book didn't mention it (I wanted to take out a screenshot), and I don't know where the second design is still used 4: During the foundation building period, he swallowed five foundation building pills in one breath 5: In the original work, Han Li only spent 32 spirit stones on the high-grade alchemy furnace that can resist the innate true fire and earth lung fire in the foundation building stage. What special functions does your high-grade alchemy furnace have? No matter how strong it is, isn't it only for the foundation building period? You spent 500 spirit stones using the internal price? I'm too lazy to list them if you change them to ordinary top-level qualities 6: The part about saving Yuan Yao Yanli was too cheesy. Saving their lives was not enough. They also gave 20,000 to 30,000 spirit stones, foundation-building elixirs, and top-level magic weapons. I'm wondering if your subordinate Nie Ying doesn't get this kind of treatment? The magical weapon and spiritual stone were not given because they were not written down, so they were given some elixirs? Don't talk nonsense. Giving them spiritual stones is to open a branch and there will be rewards later. There is no core competitiveness. How much money can be made by selling the protagonist's products? Just licking. 7: The first level of the Diamond Art can carry a magical weapon, which is equivalent to the strength of forming a pill. And it only took one year to successfully practice it? Body refining is not so cheap. The seven levels of perfection in the original book are comparable to the early stage of Yuanying 8: The description of the Nascent Soul knotting pill stage and the Gu King is too fragmented, comparable to the spiritual consciousness of the late Yuanying stage. The soul is in severe pain and loses consciousness for several breaths due to an insect that is not in the Yuanying realm. If someone is really so awesome, can't they just hunt down the Nascent Soul? Other Nascent Souls have not practiced physical training 9: The description of distance is too perfunctory. Thousands of miles of yellow sand and thousands of miles of grassland have never been used several times, let alone tens of millions of miles. 10: Biling Island has been ignored and exposed directly like the original work (the protagonist has already reached Yuanzhong at this time). This was so poisonous that the moment I saw it I lost all interest and was too lazy to look behind. In the original work, high-level spiritual stones can be freely circulated and bought among hundreds of Yuanyings in the entire chaotic sea of ​​stars. (The two Yuanchu (Miaohe) can each have hundreds of pieces, and the entire vein of high-level spiritual stones has a base of tens of thousands and an upper limit of hundreds of thousands.) Seeing this, I know that the author has ignored the character setting in order to suppress the protagonist. It is impossible for an individual to trust a vein worth tens to tens of billions of low-level spiritual stones. If the author says that except for top-grade spiritual stones, there are so many spiritual stones of other grades that it doesn't matter to a certain extent, then I can only say that you are happy 👍 I am too lazy to list the other small points. Finally, I emphasize that these problems point to the author's loose plot arrangement and too rough handling of details, which has eliminated too many readers. The results are there too

Since there are multiple female protagonists, the male protagonist should not be serious. For the first time when he met Chen Qiaoqian, the protagonist seemed indifferent on the surface. He acted serious without even thinking about it. How did he accept her later? Could it be that she was raped and mutilated again?

There are too many second guesses, especially the fact that the Spiritual Eye Tree can bear fruit. Han Li uses a small green bottle to water the Spiritual Eye Tree every day. You must know that Han Li can produce 6 ten thousand year old Golden Thunder Bamboo in 20 years, which will bear fruit early. Han Li has stayed in the human world for almost a thousand years, and finally plundered all the treasures in the human world, but he still could not reach the middle stage of divine transformation, so he took the risk of sneaking across. Is it just to get more water for a while by creating so many high-level second designs in the human world? However, according to the author's idea of ​​​​only writing about the human world, it is okay, but the introduction should include an in-depth second design, otherwise fans of the original novel will have trouble with the second design that transcends the original work.

No wonder this book hit the streets at this time. He was not even born yet. To pave the way for the income of the harem, it was too poisonous to write it like this. Moreover, there was no one to protect the young master of the Star Palace when we met on Kuixing Island. The young master of Star Palace was so forced to write like a passerby.

The heroine was not chosen well, and I don't understand what the use of these two is. Adults only look at the benefits. Unknowingly, as I get older, my perspective on the problem has changed.

The protagonist is actually not invincible at the same level! Opened a bunch of hangups 😰😰

You are still tearing your hair out in the human world with more than 1.6 Million words. Why don't you go to the spiritual world and go to the three million after you finish writing?

The characters are poorly drawn and very childish.

It's quite innovative, has good plot, and doesn't copy the mortal map.

Borrowing precious treasures to promote a new book (Mortal: From the Sea of ​​Chaos Stars to Become a True Immortal) I wish the author will achieve platinum enlightenment as soon as possible

Author, did you accept Wen Qing in the end?

I feel like I can give it an 8 or above. The protagonist fits the title of the book, and he goes undercover all the way, which is quite novel. It seems to be a good harem novel, not greasy, and the female characters all have their own ideas, especially the image creation of Yan Ruyan, which I found very interesting (the anime Yan Xiaoyou's new model had not yet been aired at that time). Then comes the most critical part of the plot. The author has added a lot of secondary settings to this book. Many subsequent opportunities, skills, and handling of events are all based on these secondary settings. The advantage is that it is no longer the same as many other people, a poor imitation of the original version, but The disadvantage is that some readers may not buy it, and I saw that the author said that he would not write about the spiritual world. I feel that for example, the repeated reincarnation technique (not practiced by the protagonist, just a technique mentioned in the author's second setting) and the ancient demons are difficult to explain clearly if he does not write about the spiritual world. Of course, the protagonist in the Qin Yan-related plot mentioned in the book review area does have some intellectual problems, but there are not many similar plots. If you can accept the many ambiguities mentioned above, this book still has its flaws.

"Mortal: I Have a Soul Gathering Cauldron" has no harem, no holy mother, only useful women

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