A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: The Great Jin Thunder Cultivator

If you don't have a harem, what should I see? Look at you in it, men and women are gay, you are in the framework of the story of a mortal cultivating immortality, and there is another mortal cultivating immortality, then I will just read the original work

Why do mortals like to write about Shuanggan and Han Li? Isn't the most important thing about writing about mortals not their worldview? Isn't it the process of a mortal cultivating immortality? Isn't it a description of the exercises, magic weapons, and copies?

The great advancement at the beginning is before the timeline of the original work. The key is that this is fan fiction. The highlight and selling point is to erase the regrets of the original work and create a chemical reaction with the original characters. If not, why write fan fiction? Just be original, and you don't have to give Wangyu a commission. How nice.

It also makes up for Wei Wuya's regret of not breaking through to become a god. Isn't it a regret to do the old devil? Or is Fang Lao Mo not sorry? Star Palace Twin Saints? Six paths? Wan Sangu? Which is not a step away! Which of the one or two hundred Nascent Souls in the later stage does not regret it? Which of those fusions in the spiritual world doesn't regret it? It's quite boring. Mortals can never break through the Legend of Immortality if they have resources. Wang Chan and Mu Peiling have all the resources, but they can't break through! It's better not to write a heroine who doesn't understand anything.

Fans write original heroines. Where do I get the sense of involvement? Yuan Yao in the original work. Can't Ling Yuling? If it's because of age. Wait until the elixir is formed before looking for Bingfeng. Bai Yaoyi. Red whisk. Nangong Wan. Mrs. Wen can do this. You actually created a nun as the heroine. What do you think? It's the devil who gets good grades. Mortals do not seize opportunities. Collect some beautiful female nuns with original works. Basically, they are all stories of old slaves cultivating immortality.

The biggest pain point is that you were hundreds of years ahead of Han Li in the early stage, but you had to design this place and delay it for decades, and that place was blocked for decades, and this place was blocked for decades 🙂 and then someone overtook you. From being an ant, to a little friend, to finally being a fellow Taoist, what are you waiting for? Are you waiting for Han Li? You might as well be at the same time as Han Li.

The previous chapter is Little Poison, which I can barely read, but the chapter on the birth of a baby is really poisonous! I really don't understand why I don't have a baby in the Jinghuo Sect, but I have to come to the pit of gods to have a baby and reveal my secret opportunity. Even if there is a small tower to save my life, I still have to consider the people close to me, such as the Tianfu Sect, what should the protagonist do if those sects, late-stage Nascent Souls, and even gods are threatened? It's really stupid to have a baby in Shen Shen Pit!

What's the point of wearing a mortal's skin and having nothing to do with the characters?

Mark it before leaving. The plot is too thin. For the sake of plot conflict, the Yinluo Sect was pulled out and escaped countless times within 50 chapters without considering the sect's sphere of influence? Anyway, if there is a need for villains, those two from Yinluo Sect can be in place immediately. The most attractive thing about Mortal fandom is its worldview. It is rare to see a rich worldview that expands. Everyone is anxious to tell a story, and I don't know what they are anxious about. This one is also anxious to tell a story. The plot is too thin. If the mortal background is removed, isn't it just a fantasy academy martial arts contest?!

After reading fifty chapters, the biggest problem is still too cliche. The protagonist always has a deep hatred, but can never fully avenge it, which will make readers feel that the protagonist's combat power is never enough and that he is constantly under pressure. You can look at Mortals, the book Han Li Returns from the Red Dust Immortal. The protagonist is improving himself from beginning to end, and there are basically few villains who suffer from great hatred. You don't have to use revenge to advance the plot. This will make you more tired the more you read.