A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: The Great Jin Thunder Cultivator

If you don't have a harem, what am I supposed to watch? I'm just watching you have all that gay romance in it! You're already using the framework of "A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality," and now you're adding another "A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality"? I might as well just read the original novel.

Why do writers of "A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality" like to emphasize the thrill and the character Han Li? Isn't the most important aspect of writing "A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality" the worldview of ordinary people? Isn't it the process of ordinary people cultivating immortality? Isn't it the description of cultivation techniques, magical treasures, and dungeons?

The story begins in the Jin Dynasty, but before the original timeline. Crucially, this is fan fiction; its appeal and selling point lies in addressing the regrets of the original work and creating chemistry between the characters and the protagonist. Otherwise, why write fan fiction? Just create original content, and you won't have to give Wang Yu a cut—how great is that?

It also makes up for Wei Wuyai's regret of not breaking through to the Nascent Soul stage. Doesn't Qian Laomo regret it? Or Fang Laomo? The Star Palace Twin Saints? The Six Paths? Wan Sangu? Aren't they all just one step away? Which of the one or two hundred late-stage Nascent Soul cultivators doesn't regret it? Which of those Nascent Soul cultivators in the Spirit Realm doesn't regret it?

Fanfiction with an original female lead? Where am I supposed to relate? Yuan Yao from the original work? Wouldn't Ling Yuling work? If it's because of age, wait until she reaches the Core Formation stage before choosing Bing Feng, Bai Yaoyi, Hong Fu, Nangong Wan, or even Lady Wen. You actually created an original nun as the female lead? What were you thinking?

The biggest pain point is that you were originally hundreds of years ahead of Han Li in the early stages, but you deliberately designed things to delay you for decades here, seal you off for decades there, and block your way for decades 🙂, only to be overtaken by others. From an ant, to a little friend, to finally a fellow Daoist, what are you waiting for? Waiting for Han Li? You might as well have been in the same period as Han Li.

What's the point of just wearing the skin of an ordinary person and having no interaction with the characters inside?

The earlier chapters were slightly toxic and barely readable, but the Nascent Soul stage chapter is truly toxic! I really don't understand why he didn't choose to achieve Nascent Soul formation at the Pure Fire Sect, but instead opted for the Trapped God Pit, thus revealing his secret opportunities.

Mark this down before you leave. The plot is too thin. In order to create plot conflict, the Yinluo Sect was brought up countless times within 50 chapters without any consideration for the sect's sphere of influence. Anyway, as long as the two villains of the Yinluo Sect are needed, they can immediately appear.

After reading fifty chapters, the biggest problem is that it's too cliché. The protagonist always has deep-seated hatred, but he can never get revenge, which makes readers feel that the protagonist's combat power is never enough, and that he is always suppressing his combat power. You could check out "A Mortal's Journey to Immortality," a novel by Han Li who returns from the mortal world.