Tokyo Girls Have Big Problems

The male protagonist, four female protagonists, and several female supporting characters are all bad in their own way. The arc and shaping have been more broken than Elden Ring in the long and repeated pull. The male protagonist is naughty and spiritual, he dare not take the initiative, is afraid of responsibility, has obscene thoughts and abstract behavior. Starting from the crow's favorite kendo competition, the protagonist's behavior has been heading towards the abstract road, and there is currently no cure. At present, it seems that the protagonist's way of opening a harem is not to conquer the heroines with his personality charm, nor to make them stick with him through self-sacrifice. It is not even as good as Chen 🐶's calculation, because he actually relied on a mental illness that would lead to a harem to kidnap four girls 😅 Crow, are you awake? Seeing love is the same, waxy and divine, especially in the early stage. He doesn't dare to express his emotions, his behavior is somewhat abstract and clownish, and he thinks that the male protagonist's love for him is inevitable. Late performance was mediocre. Yezi, the only existence in this book with certain personality charm and character creation. The left hand does high damage, and the right hand does high damage. While other female characters are still on their way to becoming a god, Yaeko is already blooming alone. His behavior is impeccable in the early and middle stages, but slightly lacking in the later stages. Sisters group, one roadside, green 🐱 lovers, play the protagonist like a ball, and create opportunities for the elder sister/younger sister in a beautiful name. Treat the protagonist's emotions as a gift and define yourself as a victim😅. In terms of character characteristics, Wu Wu has written the two characters, one cute and one gentle, as ideological stamps, but the way they are created is extremely straightforward and the characters are very vivid! That! Flat and unflattering. The supporting characters are too lazy to talk about, they are all on the side of the road, and I suspect that Crow is not ready to write them at all. There are many problems between the protagonist and the four heroines, but the most critical one is only one: none of these five people seem to have self-respect and respect for others. They neither make demands on their own feelings nor reciprocate the feelings of others. This results in any character's attack being unanswered by the opponent. (The exception is Yaeko, which is why she is the only one that I and many readers can watch.) The attitude of these five people towards relationships seems to be indifferent, their desire for exclusivity is not strong, their desire to attack is not high, and they also have many magical operations. To put it bluntly, the entire story process is tightly tied to the brain-computer interface of the green-haired sisters with a big and stylish hand, and no progress can be made. Why are Kiyono and Watanabe loved by readers? Because they not only have their own personal dignity and charm, but also have relatively normal moral standards and fascinating acting styles. The reason why Qingye is loved by readers is not only because she accepted Watanabe, but more importantly, she declined him for a long time. On this basis, her irresistible charm can attract Watanabe and readers in a series of plots. This is called love but out of reach, but in this book I didn't see how much these people loved each other, nor did I see any real obstacles stopping them. 😅The reason why Watanabe can't be with God is because of the confrontation between the two people's self-esteem. How did it become that four people in a moral vacuum tortured the male protagonist in this book? This book is a parody of your past success, and you have once again let down your regular readers, Crow.

If you want to use one sentence to evaluate Crow's return to the Nikgaru circuit, it would be "the emperor of the light novel circuit has sat on the long-dusted Nikgaru throne." From the peak of love games to the continuous attempts to transition to other categories, it can be seen that Crow is trying to find a writing route that has both performance and comfort zone. Unfortunately, after a few years, the results are still unsatisfactory. I hope that this time I can return to my comfort zone to recreate the glory of love games. The male protagonist is a time traveler whose memory is clouded by fetal transmutation. He is from a single-parent family and both his mothers passed away due to accidents. He lives with the two Qingmei sisters whom he has known since childhood. In terms of setting, it can be said to be the "Heaven Collapse Opening" commonly used in most urban novels here, and Jin The finger "life guidance system" also appeared with the male protagonist recovering his past life memories. Adhering to the idea of ​​creating novels to support his family, the male protagonist returned to high school to accumulate materials for systematic creation, and the beautiful girl classmates he came into contact with one by one continued to change his life. The most important aspect of Nikkei's online novels is the design and emotional lines of the female protagonists (if there are multiple female protagonists, the story of Shura Field must also be included). The first girl the male protagonist comes into contact with at school - Jian Shang Ai, in Crow's writing presents the image of a proud daughter who comes from a wealthy family, and her knowledge and appearance are far beyond her peers. The slightly bad character she showed when discussing with the male protagonist to establish the Athens Philosophy Research Society left a deep impression on me. However, there are some creative flaws in the character design of the male protagonist. There is a feeling that the image of the male protagonist appears to be thin without the system. I hope Crow can maintain his writing state and try his best to show the process of shaping the male protagonist and give this work a perfect presentation.

I don't understand. It's been more than 70 chapters and the relationship between the male and female protagonists is still a mess. I don't know how to fix it? There is also a male protagonist who thinks he is too handsome, and then cuts his hair to look unsightly, which is contrary to nature. He thinks that he is too good and will float, but if you don't have a system, you are an egg. You only have A appearance and B intelligence, and the rest are D and C. Could a truly outstanding girl like you? (Except for face control) The male protagonist simply has no strength and is bragging. Let's put it this way, Watanabe is better off, and the female protagonist is not as good as Kiyono Rin. The heroine feels more proud than Kiyono Rin, but not as good as Kiyono Rin. It makes people feel that the sisters are the main heroines, he is just a supporting role, and then there is Yae, Chun Chun is the clown heroine. What she does, the credit is not hers. If this book has nine prisons, she must be the top of the nine prisons 🙄

The latest chapter of the system's confession is honestly quite uncomfortable for me, because it seems that Aoyama Ai doesn't care what Ai thinks at the moment. For example, he doesn't care at all that she thinks he is hedonistic and has no long-term vision. In this case, you use the system to take over a class and just wander off to confess, which makes people feel very disconnected. Therefore, it is difficult for me to understand that what the author wants to express is that what the system does is the male protagonist's subconscious thoughts. If Crow wants to continue to let the system advance the relationship line like this, why not write more about the emotional progress between Aoyama Ri and the heroine and then use the system to advance it. The system can provide opportunities, but it cannot replace the male protagonist himself. If you write it like this, it will make people feel that you have fallen in love. If you like Aoyama Ri, you actually fall in love with the system. I know the author's thoughts, but the actual effect is different from what Crow thinks. Anyway, I can't read it.

Do I have to write that I love this woman as the heroine? Until Chapter 120, I was disgusted with this woman. I saw Ai as a self-righteous and extremely arrogant person. She is the kind of person who has always been in the sky and has never seen the human world. She thinks she is superior to others and thinks that she is not the same kind of creature as others (just like the Celestial Dragon in One Piece). It is disgusting. What she did is really disgusting. The apology does not come from the heart. The eldest lady, Xiaoba, also gives people a good impression (albeit with a bit of S), she doesn't have that disgusting self-righteous arrogance. Also, why can't the protagonist apply for 10,000 yen from his sister to repay the money after having 100 million? Is this a link to continue the plot?

I saved this book when it was updated to more than 20 chapters and haven't read it. Then I read it when I couldn't find the book recently. I read it for the second time in just 3 days from August 21st to the 24th. I stayed up all night and basically read the novel all day long like I did when I read Lianyou. The first time I read it, I didn't read the comments, so it was quite enjoyable. The second time I read it, I read the comments and read the book. As a result, some of the comments made me feel very bad, and the impression was very bad. Some people always gasped or shouted customization champion when they saw Xiao Ai. Why didn't they shout when they were in love games? Let me briefly talk about my views on this book. How should I put it? Compared to Lianyou, it is indeed a step backwards. It rarely describes some scenery and the like, but more about people. Moreover, there are many similar metaphors in the back that are used too many times, which makes the impression difficult. It's relatively poor. This book rarely contains the kind of shocking worldly words like "Love Travel", but overall it's still the same old style. I think the daily conversations are quite interesting, because I read it as Aoyama's love story from the beginning, so I think many of the plots in it are very interesting. The young lovers are bickering. Of course, everyone has different opinions. This can't be helped. Now I will tell you my own views on the characters From the first chapter of the character Aoyama, I knew that he had a long way to grow. It is longer than Watanabe. Watanabe has been growing since he was a child. With the memory of his previous life and being able to pass the exam from Iwate Prefecture to Kamikawa, he has proven his ability to self-discipline. Coupled with his status as a time traveler, he always has a sense of pride in his heart and moves towards his goal. Until the system appeared, he became more and more confident. Coupled with Kujo's persecution, he Because he grows up very quickly, he is much more decisive in doing things. However, Qingshan, a man whose parents have died and lives with the Ono sisters, only awakened his past life memories when he was a teenager. Those memories are more like dreams to him. It came too late. At this time, Qingshan had to work part-time. Having been severely beaten by society, coupled with the support from the palace and the government to go to school, he actually has a low self-esteem and is sensitive in his heart, and his previous life seemed not to be very good, so he is afraid of the existence of his parents. In addition, he has no goals of his own, so it was only then that Xiao Ai met Qingshan for the first time. You can see the confusion on his face. Later, Qingshan used the novel to get money and a house to solve his sister's problem. He couldn't find a new goal for the time being, and he didn't have to worry about money. He slacked off for a while, just like an ordinary farmer who had worked hard for most of his life and won 100 million and didn't know it. How should I spend it? Should I spend it all or improve myself to make money with money? Even though Aoyama still hasn't found his goal yet, he still feels that he should improve himself first Aoyama and Watanabe actually have many similarities, such as their three views and their requirements for the other half. , They are also good people, and have their own principles, just like Watanabe who beats people in order to prevent those who meet Kujo from being killed, and is willing to suffer misunderstandings, etc., Aoyama is the same, unless it is against someone who threatens the Ono sisters, otherwise Aoyama will do it He is very polite and kind, and is willing to bear the possibility of being rejected by Xiao Ai for dancing and other similar situations. Aoyama's principle is that it is okay to use the system, but not to desecrate the efforts of others. Just because he can't get over that hurdle in his heart, he and Watanabe stopped playing after playing Koshien. Almost like him, a guy like him who has never played baseball a few times can't easily destroy other people's efforts when he goes on the field. Qingshan always says in his heart that the system is one with him, but the novels written by the system are not written by him. On the Jade Dragon Banner, he will worry that he has snatched other people's spots, so he will train hard to improve. Regarding his own abilities, there are always some people who say that using the system directly can solve the problem easily, but it is precisely because he can do this without suffering but still does not choose to use the system that I admire him. Even if he wins by a narrow margin in the end, there are always some people who think that with the system, he can be awesome. But in fact, Aoyama has only practiced for more than a month. There are always some people who say that he has not worked hard. When can those who say that he has not worked hard train according to Aoyama's training method for a month before saying this? Kendo is a method of training the body. Qingshan should do it in the future. He will continue to practice, and because of Elsa's role and the King of Swordsman's foreshadowing, Aoyama will probably participate in another kendo competition later, but he should be crushed by then. I think the biggest use of the plot arrangement of Yulongqi is to build up his self-confidence and change, Qingshan. The willpower to be able to endure that kind of training is not bad. Elsa's high-intensity training can hardly bear that kind of guidance, which shows that Aoyama's will is already very strong. What is missing is his inner self-confidence, because this is what he truly won with his own efforts, rather than relying on the system to do it for him. The reason why Qingshan didn't dare to get close to Xiao Ai and Xiao Ba was because of his low self-esteem. He was not confident in his own will, or maybe those two people were too beautiful for his will to bear easily, so he seemed so awkward, wanting to get close but staying away because he was afraid that he would really fall in love but not There was no result, or he knew that the gap between him and them was too big. He didn't know why they liked him, or he thought it was because he was very good in the system and attracted them. That's why Qingshan said several times why Xiaoba only found him recently, and Xiaoba. The invitation of love is also because of his excellent performance. Not everyone likes him. Deep down in his heart, Qingshan may feel that what they like is not the real him, but the person he is under the performance of the system. Maybe Qingshan wants to be excellent but also wants to be truly worthy of their love. And a big reason is because of the Ono sisters. In his heart, they are the most important and the most in line with his view of love, because they are a family and they are the most familiar with each other. They will not give up on him because he is excellent or not If Qingshan doesn't have a system, then the biggest possibility in this life is to live a stumbling life with the two sisters like ordinary people. Xiaoba is not in power like Meiji, and her family will most likely not let her marry Qingshan. Qingshan himself can't afford it, and Xiao Ai may A little older. After all, even if Qingshan doesn't have the inner performance of the system, he still fits Xiao Ai's views on mate selection, and Xiao Ai's family seems to love her. However, Qingshan may still shrink back due to his inner inferiority in the end. One thing that several characters in this book have in common is frankness. Like Qingshan, you will find that He is actually very honest and tells the truth most of the time (except for his harsh words), but many times others think what he says is fake and nonsense. Aoyama's character is somewhere between Watanabe and Murakami. He is not as sultry as Murakami, but he is not as voluptuous as Watanabe The character Ai Ai is as the name suggests for Aoyama. He fell in love with her as soon as he saw her. However, he is always tough-talking and the Ono sisters refuse to admit it in their hearts. Xiao Ai has an approachable personality and is not like the eldest lady of aristocratic family. She is also very frank and can be frank with Qing Ai. Shan said that she might like him, and would frankly say that he would be responsible if she is not married at the age of 30. She is a bit naughty and likes to tease people sometimes. Even if some words make her shy, she will still say them. She is very cute when she is shy. Her only shortcoming is She is too narcissistic, always thinking that Aoyama likes her, but in a sense she is right, so narcissism is nothing to me, it is their daily flirting Miyayo Yaeko, she has the least roles but is the best at flirting, she can touch people's hearts with just a few words Xian, always takes the initiative, a person who is extremely tolerant of Aoyama, has a good relationship with Xiao Ai, a gentle bad woman, sometimes she is quite naughty, I want to see the bad woman blushing shyly when Aoyama attacks me, I feel she is the one who is most likely to take Aoyama's first blood besides Mika, she Just like a hunter, she always hides behind the scenes and is not noticeable. Maybe she is waiting for the certainty of victory. She feels that something big will come. The key lies in the outcome of Qingshan's second confession to Meihua. If it really fails, Qingshan may really let herself go and Meihua will not treat her as a family member. It's about lovers looking at falling in love with someone else Elsa, I won't say it anymore, quickly give me the role card of the female partner and replace it with the female protagonist. Is such a good girl Aoyama really willing to give up? Not to mention that there seems to be a lot of drama in the future. She keeps attacking with single-minded focus and never gives up. Who wouldn't like a blond girl whose smile is as dazzling as the sun As for Mihua and Miyue, they don't describe too much of the two. The impression of her sister is that she is extremely gentle and tolerant, and she is considerate of her family. But according to the title of the book, girls like this usually have the most contrast. Well, it depends on how she handles her second confession. If she messes up, she will become a loser. The impression of her sister is that she is arrogant and cute. However, she can use less metaphors to describe her cuteness. Too many metaphors in the back are a bit bad. Dialogue should be used to reflect her cuteness. Love is not just relying on empty metaphors. Kuzeko's role also gave me a little more teeth. With the current progress of the theme, I feel that I can write more than 400 chapters. Crow, please keep up the good work and don't let it go unfinished. You have to decide for yourself what words should be heard and what shouldn't be heard Then it's about the system. I don't know anything about the system yet, but the abilities currently provided by the system seem to be similar to those of Qingshan itself. The system is like a human potential amplifier. When the system is controlled, the potential is maximized. Do you still remember the abilities currently provided by the system? He is full of energy. Qingshan is not as good as his previous training. He still studies and exercises every day. He goes to bed at 2 o'clock and wakes up at 4 o'clock. Doesn't he look like an enhanced version of being full of energy? Then there was the accident of the second dimension. Qingshan had already had a lot of benefits before this thing, right? For example, sisters take a shower, see the band changing clothes, Bess Sakurako's selfie, and there are many similar benefits later, and the two-dimensional accident only strengthens the probability of the benefits happening, and then there is the ability to treat me to dinner. Aoyama's system invited Xiaoba and Xiaoai to come to the cafe, and that time they were the guests. And later, because of their relationship, Aoyama really asked them to treat them to dinner, and they could do it with or without this ability, not to mention that it failed to use it on an unknown girl in Yulong Banner. Does this indicate a problem with the system? Then there is bullet time. The essence of this thing is to speed up the thinking process in the brain. Is it similar to Qingshan's ghost brain? Moreover, there were several people with similar abilities during the Jade Dragon Banner. Does this mean that this is part of the human body's potential? There is also the ability of slowness, which slows down the aging of the human body, that is, slows down cell division. Are all the abilities currently provided, including system improvements, related to the inherent abilities of the human body? Things like speed and strength can be trained, and novels about cooking and animal taming can be said to be amplification of certain genetic talents of the human body. Currently, two of the foreign rewards given by the system are to find Hachi. The former can be said to be that Aoyama's own subconscious wanted to go to the place where he originally posted. So how did he know Hachi's location the second time? This is an unsolved mystery. The other one is Kagoshima in the lottery. Other than that, the current abilities of the system are related to the human body itself.

How many tags did you have for the family man you created for the male protagonist in the early stage? In the chapters in the past month. All the characters are like clowns, even the readers are clowns. If you write something like this, you can try to take a leave to adjust it. Instead of stuffing stories made of clown plots into my mouth. 🤔

I only saw it before it was put on the shelves. In order not to make people think it was unreasonable, I still ordered it all. I should have the right to express my own opinions... It is rare to get to know an author because of a book. "Love Travel" is an exception. The last one was my best friend. I didn't continue reading "Love Travel". I read it several times but couldn't get past the part about Mei Ji. After it was finished, I read it because of my daily routine that I couldn't give up. The result was out of control. I read it over and over again a dozen times in the past few years. Every time I read it, I found some flaws and "toxic points" that I couldn't get around. But the book was written by the author, and I am the reader. But I still can't forget to read it many times, because I like it so much that I can indulge in a conversation, a quarrel, and some bright and fantastic daily life. With great anticipation, I read the next few books, and read less and less. Until now, I have completely put down the book I returned to Niqing. It was probably like the reaction of Mai-senpai when she met Koizumi-sensei. Maybe the expectations are too high and the memories are too good. When I read a piece of text, I no longer have the same amazing and aftertaste as when I read Love Travel. There is no irresistible charm of the text, no unconstrained thoughts and actions (Watanabe Toru, your confession to Miki is really cool!), I feel so grateful. I can't stand the aura that danced in the words at that time... Back to this book, of course the author has his own positioning for the work, whether it caters to the market, proves himself, or something else. "The opinions vary from person to person." As a reader, I have my own opinion. Crow seems to want to go back to the past when he was in love and travel. The first few dozen chapters have very deliberate and catering descriptions (directly creating a linkage). Personally, I have no interest in the different world views of online novels, or I don't agree with them. If they don't serve the plot, I can only make people happy. I don't know if it's because he was hit hard after becoming famous. Some daily conversations are not so smooth. There are also the battles that he is obsessed with and the fantasy that he can't let go (there is no need to discuss these)... Compared with these flaws in the plot structure, the following ones don't look that good. How outrageous (using exaggerated complaints) Horror Fitness Superman "is in the same vein. This is a bit outrageous. There seems to be no need to separate rationality and literature. This kind of operation does not have any effect in the plot. Is it just to get into the infirmary? In the minds of people who don't exercise. Isn't it a bit of a whimsical idea? But isn't Lianyou's perception pretty good?" It is suspected that the family who just left the hospital "deposited 100 million yen. The original purpose was to make the family happy, but in the end, the protagonist remained silent and thought that there was something wrong with using money as money? Man-made" What is it to make money... What is a non-blood-related, warm family who makes dirty jokes every day? What kind of family man is this? ..." The protagonist is a bit hypocritical in the author's writing. It seems that he can't figure out his position, and what he says and what he does are not consistent. What does he want to do? ... Maybe there is nothing wrong with it. It may be that the advantages of writing can no longer cover up other shortcomings. If you look closely, you will find that there are more flaws, especially in front of the mirror of "Love Travel". However, no matter how good the performance or income is, it still belongs to the author. I am just a reader who pays for the work. Let me express my opinions and evaluations - I don't like it, this book is not good-looking.

From the beginning of this book to the end, I didn't even skip the kendo chapter. Get three additional bonuses for all Lianyou subscriptions. I think I am qualified to fully evaluate the differences between the male protagonists of these two books. First of all, I have to throw out a premise. This premise comes from a discussion video on Station B about Shinji Ikari's TV version and the new theatrical version. I can't find the specific video, but one of his points impressed me deeply. The male protagonists in artistic works can be divided into perfect male protagonists and growing male protagonists. For example, the TV version of Shinji Ikari is a perfect male protagonist. He believes that the inner wall between people cannot be broken and that people cannot truly understand each other. The personality and concepts of the perfect male protagonist are stereotyped and cannot be changed. In the new theatrical version, Shinji Ikari is a growth-oriented male protagonist. He goes from longing to be needed by others, to building a wall with others, to understanding his responsibilities, and then to reconciling with Ikari Gendo. If you have time, you can also go to the website to look for it. I think the analysis by the up owner is very thorough. With the help of this premise, it can also be applied to Che Watanabe and Ri Aoyama. Obviously we can see that Teru Watanabe is a perfect male protagonist, and he is in line with everyone's understanding of an ideal male protagonist. Humorous but not flattering, self-disciplined but not forcing others, gentle but with a bottom line, neither humble nor overbearing in the face of capital violence, respect those who work hard seriously. From the first ten chapters to the last confession with Rin Kiyono, Che Watanabe has always been Che Watanabe. Miki Kujo and Aina Koizumi may have changed his views and concepts on some things, but inside he will always be the handsome Tokyo boy who wants the world to surrender at his feet.        ，，， In fact, I think Aoyama Ri is exactly the growth-oriented character that Crow wants to create. It can be seen from the extra story that after Ri Aoyama was adopted by a family in another world line (for details, see extra post 311: Seeing a doctor), his character became more like that of a normal high school student, with a lively and a bit mean character. Instead of being so gloomy and depressed like now. Yes, I think the entire character of Aoyama Ri can only be described as repressed. After losing their parents, Aoyama Ri and Ono Mika became the eldest brothers and eldest mothers of the family, and there was also a lovely sister, Ono Mizuki. Only those who really support their families can understand the pressure of tuition fees, living expenses, and rent. Ono Mika and Aoyama Ri have to take care of their studies and work at the same time in order to maintain this family. Therefore, Aoyama Ri had to put away his immature side, hide his childishness and willfulness, and run around in various part-time jobs at the age when he was hanging out with friends. Mika also put away her selfishness and possessiveness, and maintained the daily life of the family of three with superficial fairness and frugality. Ri Aoyama was already deeply shackles before the birth of the system. He was no longer a student, but more like the pillar and support of a family. What home brings him is not a refuge, but a fragile thing that he needs to maintain. If he is not careful, it will fall apart. Ri Aoyama is not as good as Teru Watanabe, who can balance study and work very well. His grades are far inferior to those of Mika Ono and Mitsuki, which will further deepen his inferiority complex. Instead of standing up for himself, the first thing he thinks of when he encounters accusations is to apologize, so Ai Mikami will speak for him and point out that he must learn to love himself. In summary, we can draw the difference between Aoyama Ri and Watanabe Teru. Cheru Watanabe's family may not be wealthy enough, but it also provides enough love and support. Teru Watanabe, who grew up in an environment where there was no shortage of love from his native family and was able to study well enough, is confident and self-loving. He is like a gem in the mining area. Whether you see him or not, he is there, shining with his brilliance. Ri Aoyama lost his parents early. The support he failed to receive from his native family was instead asking for support. His ability to balance work and study was also insufficient, which led to a continuous decline in learning and physical functions. It was difficult to cultivate a sunny and cheerful character under such great pressure. Instead, he became a depressed, troubled boy with low self-esteem who constantly gave himself but did not know what to expect in return. The surface is bright but the heart is empty. This is also the reason for Amakusa's failure. She likes Aoyama's handsome appearance and gentle personality but cannot see the emptiness and heaviness behind it. So the recent plot developments are also obvious to me. As a growing male protagonist, Aoyama Ri must also grow. He must understand that the prerequisite for loving others is to love himself. The rest depends on how the Crows perform. The following is an emotional analysis of each heroine Based on the previous analysis, it can be inferred that the relationship between Ono Mika and Aoyama Ri is unhealthy or incomplete. Although the two of them are siblings, they have long played the role of father and mother in a family of three. The long-term joint efforts made them naturally regard each other as their attachment. This is not like love but more like family affection. So it is obvious that in Ono Mika's view, Aoyama Ri is as important as Ono Mizuki and even encourages Aoyama Ri to pursue Ono Mizuki. However, this possibility does not exist in normal love, because love is often possessive and selfish, and one must be able to distinguish between big and small. On the contrary, only the love of relatives and friends can draw the equal sign. Watanabe Cheru loves Koizumi Aona and Mai-senpai, but he loves Miki and Kiyono Rin even more. Although Aoyama Ri is a human being in two lifetimes, his emotional experience can basically be equated to zero. Therefore, he cannot distinguish the difference between family affection and love, and thus mistakenly equates the support and love between him and Ono Mika. This is an incomplete relationship. The relationship between Miyano Yaeko and Aoyama Ri is also unhealthy or, in other words, an unequal relationship. Because he was saved by Aoyama Ri, Hachi needs Aoyama Ri mentally, but Aoyama Ri does not need Hachi to live a good life, so in this relationship, it seems that Hachi has been on the offensive. In fact, the initiative has always been firmly in Aoyama Ri's hands, and Hachi has retreated and retreated until now. He does not even expect to monopolize Aoyama Ri, but more likely wants to use his love to break the monopoly of the Ono sisters. They may seem like numerical monsters, but they are actually a humble group, and their wealth and splendor are nothing more than wrapping up her fearful heart. So although we have always called Jian Shangai the customization champion, but logically speaking, this customization champion really belongs to him. As Cheru Watanabe said, Rin Kiyono was his first love interest. Ai Mitsuki and Ri Aoyama had no bloody beginnings, and there was no systematic promotion. It was a natural plot of a boy meeting a gril. However, Ai Mitsuki did not have enough description in the early stage and became a clown. But at this point in the story, we can clearly see that Jian Shang Ai is just a bastard with high attack and low defense, who can easily break through the defense and talk back to the powerful king. Both Aoyama Ri and Mikami Ai are attracted to each other, but they deny this fact. They don't want the other to look down on them (are you a junior high school student who blushes when holding hands? But Chu Nan, who has no experience in dating, does blush when holding hands), but they both agree in their hearts that the other will become their marriage partner. Although clichéd or clownish, their direct emotional development is sound and normal. There is no morbid relationship or morbid attachment. Everything is so coincidental and everything comes naturally.        ，，，，😜

Convinced, Kendo has always emphasized that the protagonist works hard on his own and does not want to rely on the system, but doesn't the protagonist's level rely on the system to improve? You also have to play slowly, and the description of the game is the same as 💩. It's better to just rely on the system to win, at least it won't be disgusting, repeatedly emphasizing that the protagonist has to work harder, and saying that others who don't have a system work less hard than you. The protagonist really worked so hard, why is he so lazy now? I mentioned earlier that I should study hard and have a system. I still ranked in the 30s in one semester, but I ranked first in kendo😦. I also said that I don't like kendo. Where are the efforts of all the protagonists?

This book was very good before it was put on the shelves. Why does it feel like it was not written by the same person now?

All the female characters have no special characteristics, and the eight layers of characters are quite likable, but there are too few plot appearances. I can't understand it, no matter how good-looking it is, it's a clown. The male protagonist sees her and tries to talk to her like a turtle. If he doesn't want to be with her, stay away. Tian Yu prefers someone who is straightforward, and the sisters will pull the ones who can be confirmed the fastest 😜

When I saw that Yasang started writing light Japanese style again, I was very happy, and I felt like my child was on the right track. After all, Lianyou is really invincible and beautiful! ! ! : The gentle and persistent Tokyo handsome guy, the omnipotent Kiyono God who never lies, Dora A-rin! ! ! There is also the daily life that is as plain as a lush tree, but when a gust of wind blows inadvertently, it seems vigorous again. Because Lianyou read a few of Crow's other books, such as "Black Mist" and so on. But most of them are unfinished. To be honest, I quite like the Republic of China period. Because I am a student and don't have much money, I usually read pirated copies. If I really want to read reviews, I will buy a few chapters. But when I read the comments, my anger almost overflowed. Some people think of "lost dog" and "turtle man". If you think about it carefully, it makes some sense. Most netizens should have a bigger opinion on "Turtle Man", but they just don't like it. I got rich from writing books, but I was restricted. I was shackles on the grounds of what I thought was my family. I shouldn't have read the comments Finally, God Qingye is on top! ! ! I want to be a handsome guy in Tokyo!

"Aoyama-kun looks so handsome when he confesses his love!" The evil girl Koto opened the door of the drama department while discussing excitedly with her girlfriend Haruka Kawara, the director of the drama department. "Aoyama-kun? Confession? Who are you talking about, Koto-senpai?" Mizuki Ono, who arrived early for practice at the drama club, felt something bad in her heart when she heard their conversation. "Hey, Mitsuki-senpai, don't you know? It's your brother, Aoyama-kun, who just confessed his love to the student council president in public!" The evil girl Gudu looked at Ono Mitsuki with a confused look on her face. "Yes, yes, but many people have seen it, and everyone is discussing it now." Haruka Kawara added. "With the student council president?" Ono Mizuki stood there blankly, her delicate and cute little face gradually losing color, and murmured in a low voice. Then, Mitsuki Ono rushed to the club gate. "Mizuki!" "Mizuki-senpai!" Everyone in the drama department looked worriedly at Mitsuki Ono, who was panicking like this for the first time. Ono Mitsuki kept opening the club door. After hearing the call, she slowly closed the opened door. "Well, I, I'm fine. Didn't you agree to rehearse for the play that will be performed today? Let's start now." Mitsuki Ono forced out a sweet smile like before. "It's okay. If Mitsuki-san feels uncomfortable, it'll be okay to rehearse at another time." Haruka Kawara, the director's girlfriend, said. "It doesn't matter, I'm really fine. It's not good to waste everyone's time." Ono Mitsuki patted her cheeks with both hands and said with a smile. "Well, hurry up and let's start rehearsing now." Said the director of the drama department. "Okay!" Everyone responded. —————— "Look, everyone, Aoyama-kun confessed his love to the student council president!" In the sunny band club, F. Rino held up his mobile phone and called for everyone to come and watch. Hearing this sentence, the originally lively singing, guitar, and drum sounds all disappeared in an instant, as if the mute button was suddenly pressed. Except for the bass, of course. "What? Is the Aoyama-kun you are talking about the Aoyama-kun we all know?" "Of course, otherwise why would I be so excited." F. Rino noticed something was wrong in the atmosphere and became cautious when speaking. "Show me your phone." Ono Mika said in a tone that could not be refused. F. Li Nai obediently handed over the phone.        ，，，， Drummer Mengmi and bassist Yingzi also leaned over in silence, staring closely at the messages on their phones. It was so quiet in the band club on a sunny day that you could hear a pin drop. —————— Ri Aoyama stood in front of the gate of the Athens Philosophical Research Department with mixed emotions. Finally, as if he had made up his mind, Aoyama Ri slowly but firmly opened the club door. "Good afternoon, meet my classmates." That greeting that has been repeated countless times has not yet been answered today.        ——，， Jian Shangai looked at the book in his hand motionlessly, with no expression on her delicate and beautiful face. As if aware of the observing gaze, she suddenly closed the book with a bang. Aoyama Ri was startled and quickly looked away. "Why are you here so late today?" The voice was like solid ice, and the cold air emanating from it was enough to freeze someone into an ice sculpture. "I... I just had something happen." Ri Aoyama didn't know what to say. Hearing Aoyama Ri's answer, he saw Shang Ai and stopped talking. After sitting with his arms folded for a while, he opened the book again and started reading. The Athens Philosophical Research Department became quiet again, with only the occasional sound of Jian Shang Ai turning the pages of books. Aoyama Ri sat like this. When he and Yaeko agreed on the time, he stood up and left. "Don't you have anything else to say?" Jian Shangai finally spoke again. Standing in front of the door, Aoyama Ri sighed, as if summoning all his strength, and said softly: "We are just friends. Aren't we? Meet my classmates." After saying that, Aoyama Ri walked out without looking back, and slowly closed the door. When Aoyama Ri closed the door completely and saw Ai, he raised his head, put the book back on the table, and stared at the door for a while without focus. Then he got up and went to the window, opened it, and let the slightly cool wind flow into the house from outside. The wind blew Ai's thick black hair, and Ai saw that Ri Aoyama and Yaeko Miyayo walked out of the club building hand in hand and walked slowly towards the school gate until they disappeared from sight. Seeing love closed the window. —————— "Sister, have you heard about my brother?" "Well, I just heard about it." After the club activities were over, the Ono sisters went home together, but they were all in a depressed mood and their words were weak. "It turns out that my brother said that we have something to do today after school and let us go home by ourselves. This is actually the case, haha." Mitsuki Ono showed a wry smile that looked like she was about to cry. Ono Mika rolled her hair around her ears and remained silent.              ，，， When Aoyama Ri walked far away, the Ono sisters started moving again and walked far behind without anyone saying a word. They followed to the school gate and watched Aoyama Ri get into Miyayo Yaeko's car. When the car door closed and the car drove away, Ono Mizuki finally couldn't control her emotions. "Why? Why exactly? He clearly said that we are his most important people. Why do you still hide it from us when it comes to such a thing?" Ono Mizuki leaned on her sister's arms and kept sobbing. Ono Mika hugged her sister tightly, her eyes red.

The uncut original version of "Love Travel" is a well-deserved number one. It is just enjoyment for me to watch it again whenever and wherever I want. A top-notch male protagonist, a unique female protagonist, and the plot and daily life are unparalleled. "Voice Actor", Crow's debut work, his skills and talent in writing daily life were evident at that time. For readers who like voice actors, this is a light novel masterpiece not to be missed. The unfinished ending often made me cry. "Witch", as the next work of "Love Travel", even though it ends in a hurry, and even though the content is a battle that many readers have always criticized Crow, the character portrayal and daily description still maintain the consistent level of Crow. It's a pity that the world view is not perfect enough, but I still admire this 21-year-old novel very much. I really haven't read any novels, and I'm currently reading the second one. "The Lord of the Black Mist" was a novel that Crow put a lot of effort into. It is the longest novel that Crow has written. Unfortunately, I haven't even finished it. "Mental Hospital", the last time I watched it was a few years ago, and I have no desire to look back. Then there is this work. Even though I haven't finished watching Lord of the Mist and Asylum, I still think it's better than this one. I was extremely happy after reading the first hundred chapters, thinking that I could experience the feeling of reading Love Travel for 20 years. However, it became distorted as I wrote it. It was so weird that I once suspected that the author had changed... And then the performance was up and down, the emotional advancement was like child's play in rushing a duck to the shelf, and the ending was rushed. Too plain. It's so simple that it looks like a novel written by an ordinary light novel writer, and it's so simple that it looks like a novel written by a person who has learned the crow's writing style and imitates the cat and the tiger. Even so, I think this book is one of the best books in Qidian Riqing at present... Sigh... Looking forward to your next book, don't worry, there will always be someone waiting for you.

The problem with Crow is not that he doesn't rest on his laurels and writes about fighting (although this is also a piece of cake), but that he has no laurels to gnaw on in the first place. Some people say that Love You is a fusion of a lot of two-dimensional works, but I believe that everyone who has a certain exposure to anime second games can easily see that Love You is a fusion giant that combines a lot of two-dimensional works. The most typical one is the character Rin Kiyono. I can tell at a glance that she borrowed most of her character designs from Yukino. The plot is full of spring objects, light music, and even the shadow of some traditional literature, such as Norwegian Forest and Metamorphosis. It can be said that Crow's success is inseparable from these things. I don't deny that Crow has captured the most attractive aspects of these things and blended them together very well, but this has also led to a problem: there are only so many works in this type, interesting ideas have been written, and it is difficult to innovate in this track in the neon industry. What should I do? The answer given by Crow is: write about battles, Tata Kai! Ideals are full and reality is very skinny. Crow's battle can actually be seen in Miko's book, but Lianyou's aura is still there, and everyone gave him enough time. But I couldn't stand the Black Mist and the Mental Hospital after reading even half of it. It has a formulaic set of characters (not clear enough, no highlights), boring fights (I'm still looking at the miko, I want to skip it later), and there is only a hint of charm in the interaction between the beautiful girls. The data doesn't tell lies. The sum of the data in these books may not be enough to give Lianyou shoes. I guess I have woken up and want to write about the Japanese campus again. I have only read about a hundred chapters of this book, because at that time there were only so many updates, and I thought it was pretty good at the time. But now that I have finished it, I think it's still not satisfactory. I don't think Crow has regressed in this regard, but Lianyou has brought him to a level that doesn't belong to him. Similarly, I also think that being able to write about Love Travel is not an accident. Apart from The Shoulders of Giants, Yasang's writing style was the biggest highlight for me at the time. The most important thing for Ya now is to settle down well, instead of going through the assembly line like one book a year. Find the feeling when writing about love travel and write your own story.

I think the biggest problem with his book is that there were too many things he wanted to write at the beginning. There were too many heroines that appeared at the beginning. Crow wanted to write about every heroine until the feelings of each heroine were not deep enough. The plot of each heroine is superficial, which is particularly uncomfortable to watch. The Nissin that Crow wrote before was at least described in multiple lines after the male protagonist and heroine established a certain emotional foundation. The blood is superficial. Each line is not in depth and is extremely confusing. Anyway, I felt extremely uncomfortable watching it. It feels like the female protagonists just fall in love with the male protagonist without any emotional foundation. This is how it feels to me. This is how I personally feel. I think the previous book was better written about daily life, with a relaxed and happy atmosphere. Although this book is also very relaxing and enjoyable, my daily life now feels like rootless duckweed. It just feels like those things about him are very weak. I think the idea of ​​writing 4 female protagonists directly from the beginning was particularly problematic. If you were to write everything at once and be deeply invested in it, you would be a complete scumbag. But I don't want to write about a scumbag, so I write in a very superficial way without any deep emotions.

After Love Game, I couldn't watch Miko, and I didn't even watch Black Mist. I liked the first and middle stages of Asylum, but it sucked. And this is a book that I still chose to believe in crows and started to read after watching the mental hospital where I was fed a big lump, but I still didn't read it and chose to wait and see in the comment area. During this period, I still have some hope that you can write better, thinking about the crow, and hope that you can write a little bit about the feeling of being in love with travel. Today, I was still eating at the starting point. I just finished reading He Shouchao's response to cutting the book, and suddenly I saw your final remarks, and then I found that you still did not disappoint us.

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Actually it's okay. Just like the title of the book, judging from the characters, the male protagonist and the female protagonist are actually problem children. The male protagonist, Yae, and the Ono sisters all have psychological problems due to car accidents when they were young. After accepting this setting, many behaviors can be understood. To sum up, it can be said that from the characters, to the author, to the readers, they are all just mortals. Let's talk about the characters first: Although the male protagonist has obtained the system, his psychological problems are still obvious. The weakness of his behavior and character is a manifestation of his problems and an important factor in promoting the story. It is also a point of dissatisfaction among readers. Then the author: In fact, there have been obvious clues since the beginning of Love Game. The relative weakness of the character itself is a reflection of the author's inability to handle the character's Shura field. He eventually fell into the usual emotional entanglements of Japanese light novels, which often makes readers feel annoyed. Last reader: I don't remember where I saw anyone say such a sentence, saying that the real world is cruel enough, and the audience no longer needs to feel the pain from virtual works. This book has received such favorable reviews, and I think there is probably a reason for this. I will not deny the writing style and emotion of this book. To be clear, I think it is well written. From the writing style to the emotional description, it is of a very high standard. It is very good and I like it very much, but I am not willing to read it again. Readers have enough troubles themselves, and there is no need to read such a book to add trouble to themselves. The evaluation of the work itself is obviously affected by the times and circumstances, and now is obviously not its best time. The psychological barriers and weakness of the male protagonist from the initial setting also doomed this book to be unflattering. If you ask me whether I can read this book, if I can read it, it cannot be considered poisonous if I accept the setting of the male protagonist. Although there is no part that everyone likes to see at the end, the trend is already obvious. The protagonist and the four heroines have recognized their own hearts and want to be together firmly. The only thing missing from the open ending here is the question of who can become the legal wife. This is obviously a part where readers can play freely, and there is no big problem.

The criticism of some book reviews is understandable. Some book reviews feel that the author is regarded as the system in the book, and they just start criticizing when they are not at the level of A. It is normal that some parts are not well written. I feel that overall I am quite happy to read it.

From voice actors, love games to the previous book Mental Hospital, most of the main characters written by Crow give people a refreshing, clear and handsome feeling, and the interactions between the characters also have a tacit understanding, which is exactly what I like best. As for this book, although there is still a crow's style in the interaction between the characters, whether it is the repeated uncuteness in the early stage of love, the asymmetry in the readers' perspectives between Ri and Mika Mitsuki, or some events used to interrupt the love process, there is a lack of tacit understanding between the characters. If it was a match made in heaven in the past, making people feel that they really deserved to be together, then maybe it's just a makeshift relationship now. Looking back after a few months, Crow's meal replacement is still too hard to find.

Seeking to get rich and get out of singles

After I put it down, I had no idea of ​​continuing to read it. The plot was bad and the characters were even worse. There were so many characters written about it, which one was the best? The male protagonist is a pure and precious person. He is narcissistic when he meets his lover and thinks he is so self-righteous that he does not feel any charm. The male protagonist Yaeko is a tool and only comes out to say love words when he needs help. The older sister and younger sister cannot feel the shaping except for the character. The few words of Che Lulu are nothing but gentle and arrogant. They are empty and empty. As for the rest, there is no shaping. The plot feels like there is nothing but water from the beginning of the band chapter, and the kendo chapter is like an old lady's foot wrap. Everything from the characters to the plot is terrible.

It's not what you wrote in this new chapter. The character you set up is a cold and arrogant young lady. As a result, the male protagonist can't watch it but everyone else can, right? The male protagonist of Guogou also promised not to come at three o'clock in the afternoon. Why don't you write more details? You wrote that the female protagonist is surrounded and photographed in the middle, and the male protagonist is in the distance. Secretly look at her shy but pretending to be calm. It would be better to write about how cute Catwoman is. She is never photographed from any angle. The male protagonist can only see an outline from a distance. He is thinking about how cute the female protagonist is, and then decides to wear those dog-like clothes tomorrow. A bitch dog matches a bitch cat. You, the male and female protagonist, are really invincible.

These chapters have been read three times. Apart from the defense of the war between the ill-fated and unfinished literary youths, the writing of Riqing is really a dimensionality reduction blow. Writing by other authors is simply unreadable in comparison. Seriously, stop writing about your b battle.

First of all, I'll put my armor up, as shown in the picture What you wrote is really terrible. I rarely say such serious words. I didn't say anything about the witch, and I didn't say anything about the mental hospital, but I really can't stand this book. Who can bear to eat a book of shit for a year? The whole book feels like I just wrote whatever came to my mind, with no outline at all! It keeps pouring water, and there is no emotional advancement at all. It all depends on appearance and trance. I don't know if Ai Jian is a woman who has nothing but appearance, but Aoyama Ri is definitely a man who has nothing but appearance! The character design is completely untenable. Apart from the system, it is still a system and has nothing of its own! This is one of the most disgusting male protagonists you have ever written. A group of people with twisted emotional lines, except for Yaeko, there is no well-developed character. The male protagonist is even more of a tool. He is a tool purely for the purpose of writing emotional lines and has no impact on advancing the plot. The Ono sisters were particularly well written in the early stage, with Bai Yueguang, childhood sweethearts, and companions in despair. They originally followed the setting of a good wife and loving mother, even if they were written as yandere? You have to mess it up, what you write at the end is disgusting. I won't talk about the name Ai. I wanted to write it as the second Qingye, but ended up writing it as a clown. I wrote it back a little later, and that's it. There are also Sword Princess and Amakusa Kazusa, who are the tool people among the tool people. There will be no such person in the future. The plot has nothing to say, it's just bad! There is no main plot, no highlights, even the most popular Shura Field is appallingly bad. Moreover, the writing style that made you famous is also a piece of cake. It is brilliant and mediocre. There is no ending at all. No matter how good it is, it is a bad ending. To say it is a bad ending is to flatter you. It is purely because you can't make it up yourself and cut it off by force. This book has as many problems as its title. Those who want to read Akaashi can read it, but don't touch the others. Damn, disgusting, ugh! Nausea! Disgusting!

Let me show you an outrageous green turtle, even a Tokyo girl was not spared

Daily Prayer: She is the most special, she is above all else, my God, Rin Kiyono

1. Meet Ai: I liked Jian Shang Ai at first. She has a cold personality, but the author made a genius move and made her into a clown. Now she wants to bring it up again? I have only heard of the writing method of suppressing first and then promoting (it is always good for a prostitute to become a good person and a prodigal son to turn back), but the description of love at first sight is clearly to first promote, then suppress and then increase. This is like turning a good girl into a prostitute and then letting her become a good person. Isn't it disgusting? And when I meet a young lady from everyone, there is no shortage of outstanding people of the same and opposite sex around me. The male protagonist even takes the initiative to cut off, and he still shyly approaches her? What makes the male protagonist worthy of her doing this? 2. Ri Aoyama: In the chapter about the maid cafe, my pride came into play. I felt that I and Ai Mikami were not the same people, so I wanted to cut them off. As a result, within a few chapters, I started talking about naughty things in the latest chapter? Does the small head really control the big head? You owe ten thousand yuan to your love, and you can repay it just by mentioning it to your sister. Do you have to hang it like this? A greasy man who doesn't mean what he says. 3. Little Tangren Band: No intention of making progress, just muddle along, no sense of boundaries, and full of vulgar and dirty jokes. What do such people write to express? You said you want your sister to experience high school life for the last time, is this how you experience it? 4. Mika Ono: My younger brother has earned back several hundred million yuan, so why don't you want to give him an extra 10,000 yuan? Is it too strict? And since they quit their part-time job, the description of the sisters has been a straight line without any ups and downs. It is bland at best and boring at worst. 5. Character setting I can only remember four heroines in Miko, and four in Lianyou. The other supporting heroines are impressive, but they won't steal the heroine's role. However, starting from the mental hospital, in addition to the three classic female protagonists, there are two more mothers, an actress, and an older Japanese female professor. More people will inevitably lead to uneven distribution of space. Then it appeared that Su Qing was a childhood sweetheart, but the foreshadowing was not enough, so the readers could not get it at all, and then Gu Ran became a licking dog. The number of female protagonists in Tokyo Girls has increased significantly. There is a clown in the book, and there is a clown. Unfortunately, there is too little writing and ink. The Ono sisters have no feeling. The blonde swordswoman is almost unknown. Then the most classic one comes. The four little Tang people in the band take up almost 50% of the page, but my impression of them is: vulgar girls who love to tell dirty jokes, and the two names of bass Sakurako and drummer Meng Shi, and I have no impression of the rest. Want to portray your sister's image through the band? But I don't feel the positive feedback from my sister's band at all. If that's the case, what's the point of joining this band?