The Road to Longevity Begins with the Life-Enhancing Lamp

The biggest problem is that the foreshadowing of this organization is not well described, and he wants to force the protagonist to join this organization, which means that the author must have arranged an important role for this organization later on. However, there are two problems here. No matter how important they are, they have not been written yet. Based on the content written so far, this organization is one of the others. In addition to a half-ghost who lives in the background, the three people who appear are Arrogant, Naughty, and Paranoid. . Such an outstanding organization and such a highly cultivated Zifu Shangji are as mentally retarded as compared to other Zifus that the protagonist has encountered before at sea. . To be honest, if you were to portray the people of the organization in the same way that M created the characters on the sea, if you met the people of the organization suppressing the evil spirits on the sea, then the whole character would be completely different. With the current description? What kind of organization? This is a group of primary school students on a spring outing. . The second problem is that there is a problem with the protagonist's reaction, or I find that the author obviously has a problem with the character's handling. Because you know the plot, you are obviously inclined to shape the character. For example, Wang Hou and his group of younger brothers, the author knows that they are about to die. The problem is that you can't portray these people just because you know that their IQ does not match their personality! The dignified Dragon Crossing the River is obviously weak in terms of both strength and intelligence, so it cannot be forced to develop by giving the character intelligence. . The protagonist also has a problem with the performance of the organization's personnel. He was cheated, threatened, and controlled by others. The protagonist's previous anger was as if it had suddenly failed. In advance, he used a mentality of looking at his teammates and his own people to express himself. His tolerance was off the charts. The problem was that he was not one of his own at that time, so the protagonist's performance was very fragmented. In general, I decided that the biggest reason why it would make people feel poisonous is that the author's character performance is inconsistent with the current plot progress.

I started scribbling as soon as it was put on the shelf First, an organization appeared out of nowhere and wanted to recruit him and gave him a token Then the organization stole his home Finally, the protagonist was exiled by the author to a new map Really, this was all a routine from 20 years ago. Is your organization called Akatsuki? Just give him a ring.

Why did it explode just before it was released? The first one said that the ghost mother was so scary, but later she just stopped pretending and just called the ghost mother if she couldn't beat it. Then why didn't she just eat soft food? The chapters in other novels are basically small highlights or climaxes of the plot. It's better for you to go straight to the big ones. In the previous chapter, you were still beating up the old man and pulling the little brother. I really didn't expect that in the next chapter, you will directly settle the chapter. I thought there were a few chapters missing. The plot of joining this shabby organization and the ghost Taoist was written in a mess🐶💩. The viewing experience was so bad that it was so tasteless that it was a pity to abandon it.

The conflict with Lin was too abrupt. If it really went so far as to kill someone and silence him, he would have written out how to humiliate the protagonist. Otherwise, he would start killing people in the teacher's sect in just a few words. This kind of character would be too bad. Also, the later reflection behind closed doors was directly threatened by mortals from the Lin family. Doesn't the protagonist have no family? The protagonist should be cultivating demons and casually sacrifice his family to heaven.

I suggest you cut the book. The plot development is the same as playing. Don't you think it's very abrupt? Is there an outline but not a sub-outline? I won't talk about you being assassinated by the Ghost Taoist around Chapter 55, but suddenly another Heavenly Palace appears in Chapter 55, which is even more hilarious. Can't you say that you went on some ghost-killing mission, and then happened to kill a disciple or servant of the Ghost Taoist, and then you were hunted down? Don't you know this kind of plot? The simplest thing, one second I was writing on the earth and looking at the stars, and the next second I was writing on the moon and looking at the earth.

The problem of having a glitch in my head every three days is not due to a serious lack of ink in my stomach. Nowadays, the quality of authors is really not good, and they want to show off their literature. Unlike in the past few years in the early years of online writing, it was like dreaming of great masters such as Shenji. It can be seen that they have read many books and works offline. There are many updates every day and the quality is good. The author, your book is really about half of the words and sentences and half of the story. If you don't have the talent of Wang Bo and Cao Zhi, you just write novels honestly. You have to use the gorgeous rhetoric of parallel prose. I guess you have been studying all the time in your mind every day, so you always get stuck and put the cart before the horse. Do you want to write "Preface to Prince Teng's Pavilion" or "Fu of Luo Shen"

It stands to reason that this is not the first time for the author to write a book, but the two plot twists from arranging the plot conflict of the Ghost Taoist before it was released to the protagonist being abducted and traveling a few chapters after it was released are too blunt, so I am really confused... Keep the book waiting for the follow-up, I hope it won't die...

The Taoist system cannot be lost. The title of the book is not very attractive and cannot attract people who like gods, ghosts and monsters right away...

To be honest, I feel that the protagonist might as well have been a ghost cultivator from the beginning. What he is practicing now feels the same as that of a ghost cultivator. His character and behavior are also a bit extreme, like a demon cultivator.

If I change the gender description of what this damn old aunt did, everyone's fists will probably become harder! The older and scary dead ghost man forcibly married a young beautiful girl and placed a curse on her to die early. The girl did not want to marry or die, so she went to Tiannan to practice alone, hoping to lift the curse and live. However, the dead ghost man often harassed the girl in her sleep, causing the girl to wake up in pain. The girl went to practice alone and met a male Taoist friend to paint pictures with her. Afterwards, the male Taoist friend who helped the girl was unlucky for a month! I want to say that the protagonist is full of desire for survival and full of resistance. Can it give people a way to survive? No one wants to be haunted by a scary dead ghost old aunt. Within a few days, she will scare people in their sleep with half a scary face. She will always remind you that you are being pinched by the neck. You can only survive if you practice quickly and don't slack off! I don't have a good impression of the dead ghost's old aunt at all. She is pathologically controlling and possessive as well as wanton and reckless. I think the term "landmine girl/yandere" is really appropriate to describe the dead ghost! If there are still people who think this dead ghost is very good, you might as well search online for the horrors of being haunted by yandere, you will have a big change

I'm a little disappointed to see that this "Miss Cui" has no intelligence...

This book is too tiring to read. It is half-written and fluent, and it is also called Shaodao. Can't it be called Xiaodao? It has to be new and different. In addition, the writing is a bit messy, and many things are unclear. Let's just say that the concept is like the Skeleton Concept. There is obviously a ready-made explanation and I don't use it. I have to create it by myself, which is nondescript. It gives people the feeling of forcibly assigning new words.

It doesn't matter if you add Eleven Yao in front. Big forces are investing everywhere, so you can understand it In the eleventh day, a puppet master suddenly comes and picks people up. The plot is abstract. What is even more abstract is that this puppet master wants to blackmail the protagonist. What is he doing? Isn't this how big powers invest in newbies? This is just enmity. The entire sect was quite speechless about the protagonist's behavior.

I won't watch it anymore. I'll watch it again when the main character meets Tian Nan. I'm crazy. Tian Nan changed the map before he understood it clearly.

It's been a mess since the Kidao attack. Author, you always talk about ghosts and ghosts. Why don't you just write the protagonist to death and let him practice in the underworld? Originally, practicing qi, whether it is from yin to yang or from yin to taiyin, is good. Taking the ghost path is just a means.

I felt that I was baffled by all the twists and turns. At first I thought I had found a good book, but now it's a bit hard to review.

The twist was too abrupt and I felt like the writing was broken. The previous book was about the military flow and then the Dao soldiers had no sense of existence.

At the front, I feel like he is at the level of food and grass. But later on, if he sees any suspicion, the exterminator will not be sucked into the whirlpool by the senior sister. If it doesn't work, he will run away. The goal is clear, decisive and direct, I was really surprised.

I don't understand, this is at least waiting for the protagonist to travel after the Zifu, why did it suddenly change? Secondly, the protagonist was said to be careful about using the power of the ghost mother at the beginning, but later it became forced to arrange some scenes at every turn, and then use it. The main twist is very tough. Secondly, is Tiannan Temple written so weak? If it is so weak, why did the protagonist go to Tiannan Temple?

Just open a new book, eunuch. Don't waste it. It wastes both readers and yourself.

It's so well written. This kind of classical fairy tale about monsters is very interesting to read. I simply voted for all the four monthly tickets I had. I hope the author will complete this work well and don't be a eunuch.

Author, as long as you are "not a prisoner", we can afford to wait. The most important thing is to be a good person and do things with a beginning and an end 😡

Two votes support, just don't want eunuchs, I hope the map will be bigger,

I heard that the ghost mother is not the heroine, which is a pity

You need to know how to add updates, author 🙂

Author, please open a new book. I really like the book you wrote.

This novel is actually not my favorite type. It is also out of stock. The author's writing is good, so I read it and slowly got into it. It is a dynamic world. The protagonist is always doing things, but there are talents coming out from generation to generation. He has changes. It is not like other novels where everything except the protagonist has changed. I also like the system of national scholars. Although they may not live forever, the strong can be invincible. If you don't know how to advance the protagonist, then write more about the changes in the world and let the plot push the protagonist.

2 Votes support

It looks good, but it's a little lacking. Come on, food and grass

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