A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: Enhanced Cultivation

He died from poisoning. The cheat-like abilities were pretty good, and it used a lot of references. The protagonist is a pure gambler; even with cheat codes, he still actively gambles his life. (He voluntarily gave up his Foundation Establishment Pill in exchange for spirit stones during the Bloodstained Forbidden Land gamble.) In the early stages, the protagonist's personality was portrayed as that of a very reckless gambler.

There aren't enough women, so it's not exciting. A harem novel should include as many women as possible, with three thousand beauties in the harem. Another reason this book isn't exciting is that these women are already common in fanfiction, so it lacks novelty. In addition to including them, you should also include some less common female supporting characters as concubines or other attractive characters to keep readers interested.

The old, disgusting female dog, hundreds of years old, rapes a brat in his twenties.

Too many jokes, 79, criticize my melon. Modern language used in dialogue, such as "Holy crap!" And "climb!", As well as movie lines, can easily break the immersion in the story. And Yoruichi the Black Cat There are too many entries; I'm getting dizzy listening to audiobooks. The game's interface is simple and straightforward, which is a plus.

Another instance of this kind of tactic involving a different spiritual root entering the Crimson Forbidden Land to sleep with Nangong Wan. 😤

Byd is just driven by lust; he wants to have sex with a female cultivator at the Nascent Soul stage. He even made up some nonsense about Yuan Luan Qi. He's utterly despicable.

Intentionally undermining your combat power. You broke through to the late stage of Core Formation early on, then fell back to the early stage. Then you spent nearly a hundred years trying to break through to the late stage again. Wasn't that a complete waste of time?

Of all the fanfiction I've read, your story of taking in Nangong Wan is the most outrageous. You actively betrayed Nangong Wan, causing all her disciples to die. How could you take her in? This is a huge grudge!

A female Nascent Soul cultivator around 100 chapters long—if you can't write that, don't bother. They'll kill you anyway. Don't write those Daoist couple plots; what's the point? You might as well write about maids and cultivation furnaces.

It feels like the author suddenly found a partner, and then his partner became extremely controlling, even interfering with his writing.