Seeking the Dao in the Mortal World, Wielding the Sword Across the Heavens

Let's read this book... I'm not saying it's good or not, but it has a bit of an ancient pretentiousness 🙂🙂. It feels like a book I read when I was a student.

It's a mixture of good and bad, and the subject matter is well set. It's much better than a system-installed article. It's attractive enough to keep people reading. The plot is novel and not cliche. The shortcomings are obvious. Being too literary is a disease. Excessive wording and sentence making appear to be bloated and watery. It should be concise and detailed. Don't bother to expand if it shouldn't be described too much. In this chapter, Tian Linger got up and wrote as many words as possible. If it were replaced with a few cross words, it would look very "smart". It is a mess, each paragraph is like a ball of tangled wool, it is difficult to sort out, it is difficult to switch roles when reading, I don't know who you are talking about, and the explanation is unclear. So I can only focus on the main rhythm and key points of the plot and read it briefly, reading ten lines at a glance, saving worry and effort. The free chapters are okay, but once they are released, you can only read the titles to judge the climax of the plot and subscribe, but Wen Qingshui would have given up on the climax. When you write, you rely on "he or she". You know who it is but the readers are confused. I suggest you read it as a reader after writing. The editor should have told you this. Take a look at the writing style of the veteran author of Qidian. It is concise and comprehensive, and it is sedimentary

It doesn't accept female protagonists, but always describes how these female characters are. I'm very disgusted with this kind of writing. It clearly doesn't accept female protagonists, but it always pushes the plot in this direction. It gives me the feeling that a monk always sneaks into a brothel and lets them show off in various sizes, and then the protagonist closes his eyes and chants sutras to pretend to be clean. This kind of writing gives me a very double standard feeling. Anyway, I am a little disgusted. I have clearly said before that I am a monk, but the way the plot is written always relies on these women, and then says no, no, no, it is quite unflattering. You say experience all kinds of things in the world of mortals, do you really have experience? They haven't integrated in, they are more of an observer, let them perform hard, and the protagonist will quietly watch you as a clown

Originally it had the word Zhu Xian, but it couldn't be used, so it was changed to the current one. In fact, this is Xianxia's Zhutianliu, not an original creation.

The image of the protagonist and the way to improve his strength are very lovable, and it is completely a masterpiece. However, Tian Linger has too much ink, which is completely the failure of this book. If you want to write a seeker-like protagonist, it's okay, but can you not write this so-called affectionate female character to be the heroine? If you really want to write it, can't you just change the character of the protagonist and just accept it if he dares to love or hate?

I want to ask, is there Lu Xueqi as the heroine?

Considering that the protagonist now seeks immortality instead of the ordinary mentality of the original work, if there is a heroine, she should be a Taoist couple who can accompany him to ask for immortality instead of a husband and wife in the secular sense. Tian Linger's mentality has not changed in this regard.

The writing is very strange, there are too many descriptions

I loved the Zhu Xian chapter, but the only thing that didn't suit my taste was the female character's attitude towards the protagonist. I may not read the follow-up story. That's my problem. I haven't read the original work. Come back with a new story, author, come on, I look forward to your original fairy tale.

The only problem is that every woman in the book likes him. Although in reality everyone likes the rich, handsome and handsome man, it kind of ruins the sense of empathy that the heroine and the supporting actress had when I read the book. I didn't see the ending of Zhu Xian World, so it felt like it ended a bit abruptly. What exactly happened after the five volumes of the Heavenly Book were synthesized? What happened to the New Holy Religion? What will happen to Tian Linger's follow-up?