Magic Returns, Starting with Video Games

It's well-written, but I hope the author can improve the sentence flow; otherwise, it's easy for someone like me who prefers this style to give up.

How come there are two books on my bookshelf?

It was great, I watched it all in one go, it was so exciting and satisfying. My only slight concern is that the protagonist's personality is very distinct in the dungeon, but a bit blurred and inconsistent in reality. If that's the case, wouldn't it be a disaster if the female lead came looking for him?

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It's watchable, but there are too many writing problems, including incorrect word order, incorrect punctuation, and typos. The plot is a bit awkward, but it's still worth watching.

Endless Shennong, come out!!

The overall story is engaging, but the writing style is lacking, which might discourage readers from reading carefully; they'll likely just skim through it to see where the story is going. If it's released later, they'll probably just look at the title.

Over 50 chapters, not bad, but the protagonist's identity hasn't been revealed yet, so it's hard to say what will happen in the future.

The first two fictional worlds were brilliantly written, but when they were adapted to the real world, they became bland and unappealing. This type of story all suffers from the same problem: the fictional world is brilliantly written, but the real world is a mess. I suggest focusing more on the fictional world and only briefly mentioning the real world.

AI? Why are there so many grammatically incorrect sentences and line breaks?