Magic Returns, Starting with Video Games

It's well written, but I hope the author can make the sentences smoother first, otherwise it won't be easy to persuade someone like me to give up.

Why are there two books on my bookshelf ()

It's so good. I finished reading it in one sitting. It was so exciting and refreshing. The only doubt I have is that the protagonist's personality in the dungeon is very distinct, but in reality it is a bit blurry and not very unified. If it were really like this, the heroine would be furious if she came to find her.

It will be updated on time at five o'clock every afternoon. In addition, I will ask all you little cuties to continue reading. Please, please, please, please say important things three times.

I can read it, but there are too many problems with the writing, including incorrect word order, incorrect punctuation, typos, etc. The plot is a bit awkward, but it's just good enough.

Endless Shennong comes out! !

The overall story is attractive, but the lack of writing style will prevent readers from reading it carefully. They will only skim over to see the direction of the story. If it is published in the future, they will probably read the title directly.

There are more than 50 chapters, which is not bad, but the identity of the protagonist has not been revealed yet, so it's hard to say what the future will be like.

The first two dungeon worlds were brilliantly written, but in the real world they were tasteless and it would be a pity to abandon them. There is a problem with this genre. The dungeon world is wonderfully written, but the real world is a mess. It is recommended to write more copies and just cover the real world in one go. Anyway, the real world has been written in a mess now. The upgrade is too fast, and too many things are not unfolded. The important characters who appear with various settings are directly transformed into supporting characters within two chapters. The identity of the protagonist's son of the earl, the identity of the fourth prince, and joining the academy are just settings thrown in. They have been eliminated without playing any role and have lost their meaning. The adoption of little Jack and his sister's family is also inexplicable. The sins of factory owners and nobles are repeatedly described (without showing how sinful they are). The protagonist did nothing in the end, and the result was that they were sacrificed by their own people. The protagonist seemed very busy and rushed to the scene many times, but actually did nothing. He established a demon investigation department and no one under his command could beat him. He went to catch the Ripper but failed to catch it. He went to investigate and destroy the magic circle. Those who wanted to sacrifice to upgrade were successfully upgraded. Those who wanted to summon demons were also summoned. In the end, the protagonist's deus ex machina directly crushed him. The only function is to introduce a gay couple and Papa. The gay pair can be said to be a little humorous. Papa has already dissected his colleagues and the image of a lunatic who goes crazy and wants to dissect passers-by from time to time is really unflattering (even if you specifically describe her as a mature lady). I said earlier that I would collect and clean up all the thorns, but in fact I did nothing but beat them up when they met, and let them out directly. Without telling anyone else, if Papa hadn't happened to meet the Ripper, he would have dissected Jack's sister. There is also the setting of the steam industry era, and the setting of firearms. I have emphasized it many times, but it is of no use at all in actual performance. The fourth level can already control a country, and now the fifth level is everywhere. The author wants to sew too much, but cannot grasp it at all, and needs to make a choice. I don't know how many of the author's outlines have been set, and whether it is almost finished. The various legendary characters depicted earlier have now caught up with the protagonist at the speed of light, and have become a cabbage, completely losing their b-level.

AI? Why are there so many wrong sentences and wrong practices?