Mortal: from the Human World to the Fairy World

Henan fellows, come on! ! !

Reading fan fiction is like interacting and transacting with the protagonist. Develop the plot step by step. If the main character of the fanfic is gone, then what kind of fanfic is there to read? Don't listen to what others say about Han Li's filial son. If he has the ability, let him write it himself.

It was okay after reading a few chapters. It feels a bit like watching Mortals Cultivation to Immortality. I quite like this novel. I hope the author doesn't write a stallion novel. Now that they are all cultivating immortality, who still wants to play those vulgar things? I read too many mortal fanfics. Most of them include all the heroines and supporting actresses from the original works. It's so disgusting to watch. I hope the author will write a different story about a mortal cultivating immortality

I have finished reading the update now. It can be said that it is full of "mortal flavor". The beginning of this book is very solid. So far, the main plot of mortals has not changed much, and the branch plots are well conceived and extended. A few suggestions first: 1. Interacting with the protagonist is essential. Whether it is grabbing opportunities or sending skills, good or bad, it is also the foundation of fandom. 2. Optimize the plot and give preferential treatment to the protagonist. The worst thing to say is the nanny. The protagonist of the fanfic must be stronger than the original owner. The original owner cannot remain unchanged, and it is even more impossible to weaken it, so it is necessary to fundamentally strengthen the original owner. In order to integrate the mortal plot more smoothly, some branches of the original work can be abbreviated or cut off, the plot of the abuser can be made into a comedy, and extended plots can be added in a large space, such as the just-written Ji Xuan and later Xuanyin's master. 3. All the ups and downs of the original plot are foreshadowing. Fans should make comparisons on this basis. For example, after Han Paopao refused to join the dungeon with the protagonist and went through a lot of hardships, in the end he still had to walk the same road as the protagonist. 4. Solve tragedies and regrets. This is also the role of a nanny. Although everyone doesn't like it, it must be done. Who among Zhu Xian's colleagues doesn't save Baguio? What better one? 5. Strengthening the original protagonist also needs to have a logical relationship. Because the original work was afraid of writing failure, the protagonist was basically written. For example, the supporting character's sure kill is not only weakened but also gradually diluted in the protagonist. For example, the Puppet Technique starts with Dayan's decision. The little green bottle is directly invincible below the Golden Core. In the later stage, it is equipped with formations, and is invincible below the Nascent Soul. Therefore, the original owner's enhancements should be based on the original work as much as possible. For example, the 55-50 Qingzhu Peak Cloud Sword Sword Formation, in the early stage, all five elements, three talents, and four elephants can be arranged. 6. The female supporting role in the original work is optional, but not a stallion. It must conform to the mortal style, which can not only increase the difficulty but also go with the protagonist. I won't go into details here. That's all for now. The victory of fan fiction is to complete the novel. When lowering the difficulty and relying on the main line of the original work, as long as you can't die, you will die. Make more references to the plots and settings of other fans. There is no shame in writing fan fiction and using more references. I hope to adopt it and finish the book

First, I am practicing the Qingyuan Sword Technique. The protagonist is practicing the Divine Consciousness Technique, and I am also practicing the Dayan Jue, but the Divine Consciousness is only comparable to the later stage, and it does not reflect the effect of the technique at all. There is no difference between practicing it and not practicing it. Second, the protagonist is doing the third turn of elixir formation, and it is also a physical practice. As a result, the mana is only several times that of the monks of the same period. The original Han Li has two turns, and the early stage is equivalent to the later stage. What did you turn to in the third turn? Third, the protagonist has been practicing, and his skills and magical powers are powerful, but it does not reflect the protagonist's strong combat power at all. It feels just a little bit powerful. He is obviously better than Han Li, but he is slightly ahead of Han Li. And there is not a single female cultivator from beginning to end. Is the protagonist a eunuch? Not to mention that you can't live without women, you should have a heroine at least. This one is given, that one is given, and this one is given away. Come to the fanfic, if you don't accept an original female character, it's nonsense.

Personally, I feel that if you write such an interesting subject as a mortal fan, it's not good-looking, you're really talented.

The way to practice swordsmanship is to practice swordsmanship. There are also differences in swordsmanship, and it all depends on the skill of the sword. However, the recognized realms of swordsmanship are not bad at all. Under the golden elixir are the sword qi transforming into form and the sword qi transforming into rainbow. The transformation of the sword energy is to release the sword energy outwards, and use it to imitate various objects and ferocious beasts, which is very fancy. The sword energy turning into a rainbow is the beginning of the thunder sound of the sword energy. The sword energy cuts through the void and rubs against the atmosphere. From a distance, it looks like a rainbow, colorful in five colors. Once you have mastered either of these two techniques, you have mastered the art of swordsmanship. On top of the golden elixir, there is the differentiation of sword energy, thunder sound and sword light. The art of Sword Qi and Thunder requires that the true Qi be extremely strong and powerful, so that it can activate the sword light to split the atmosphere and emit a roar of thunder. The speed of the sword is so fast that it can be compared to the sound of thunder. Sword Qi Leiyin is a fast word! In the world of swordsmanship, only quickness is unbreakable! The differentiation of sword light does not have strict conditions for true energy, but it must have a superior sword. The so-called differentiation of sword light is to use true energy to activate the restrictions in the flying sword and turn it into countless sword lights and sword energy. The true and false are alternately real and false, which confuses the enemy's ears and eyes. However, if the true energy is strong, the sword energy can be transformed into the sword light. The enemy thinks that this sword light is an illusion, but in fact it is the real sword energy. Above the Nascent Soul is the practice of turning swords into silk and turning swords into formations. To master the unique skill of sword silk, one must have extremely pure Qi and superb understanding. Once enlightened, one can practice the flying sword and sword light as thin as a gossamer. There is a nickname for practicing swordsmanship and becoming silk, which is said to be able to defeat all magic with one sword. When swordsmanship has reached this level, no matter what kind of opponent, what kind of spells, talismans, or magic weapons you encounter, you can easily cut them all off by just letting go of the sword wire and condensing the unparalleled sword energy. The reason why swordsman monks have great lethality is due to the flying sword in their palms. The swordsmanship of practicing swordsmanship has brought the flying sword's unparalleled sharpness to the extreme. After one has mastered this level of swordsmanship, his enemies are no match for him. Even if he challenges someone who is one or two levels higher than him, it is no problem. Transform the sword into a formation.

I slipped away, forget about the water, and keep repeating chapters here all day long

It can only be said that the author is quite a novice. He wants to write a different work, but he doesn't have the ability. I also don't understand whether this is writing "The Biography of Mortals Cultivating Immortality" or "The Biography of Xu Yuan Cultivating Immortality" or "The Biography of Mortals Cultivating Immortality". It is said that there is a Taoist couple, and the result is one concession, two gifts, and three free gifts. This rhythm only occurs in the year of the monkey and the horse month; Male and female Taoist couples support each other on the road to immortality and go to the immortal path together. Is the highlight here the process of helping each other step by step when they are weak and growing together? (Aren't Xin and Qi good examples). When you reach such a high level of cultivation, it will be a problem whether you can find a Taoist partner. Who can cultivate to Lianxu, Fusion, and Mahayana who is not a person with a firm Taoist heart? Who is not an old monster who has been cultivating for at least thousands or tens of thousands of years? People who only seek Taoism will ignore you? So, either say that there is no female protagonist, or write something, and don't pretend to be a dog-eat-dog. Disadvantages: 1: You have to go to the third level of the Chongyuan Gong. If you have the little green bottle, more than 100 years of time will be enough for you to cultivate to the middle stage of the formation of the core. If the opportunity is good, you may directly reach the false infant state; , as long as it is replenished quickly and the combat power is above average, after all, others need resources and need to fight, and you only need to get the elixir and retreat; The most important thing is to improve your realm first. How are you so good at building foundations and forming pills? ! 2: I feel like Xu Yuan himself didn't write much, he was busy writing other things, and he doesn't know who the "protagonist" of this book is?

I have exhausted all my talents. Nowadays, most novels are okay at the beginning and then go off topic. The more they are written, the worse they get. The original mortal writing theme is narrated from the protagonist's perspective, but this novel is narrated from the protagonist's perspective and the God's perspective. The key is that the God's perspective overwhelms the protagonist's perspective. Good guy, what's the matter with the protagonist? Why don't you write more about the protagonist? In the beginning, you also wrote about how cruel cultivating immortals is. You don't care about yourself. You wrote about the rise and fall of the world of cultivating immortals in Tiannan. You, the author, are overflowing with the heart of the Holy Mother. It's not superfluous, you. The rise and fall of Tiannan is a side dish. One chapter is rich enough. The protagonist is the main course. Every chapter cannot be without the protagonist. You really have never eaten any good food. What nonsense is picked up in the basket and it is full of vegetables. I don't know what good food is.

After reading a few pictures, I couldn't stand it anymore when I saw that Xin Ruyin was not taken away, but instead pushed into the arms of Qi Yunxiao, a ghost who had long since died.

Fake updates every day, ruining your character

After reading more than a hundred chapters, I feel that it is boring. The main character is a brainless script reader, which does not reflect the fun of cultivating immortals at all. Spiritual objects and other materials are too easy to find, so I just have a mortal. And there are no female characters. The stories of wonderful female characters who are mortals must account for at least a quarter. Are you so simple as a time traveler? Practicing for the sake of training is too boring.

How can I learn this bad thing? I don't write the main plot, and write a lot of dialogue for the supporting character who will die in two chapters.

In fact, I don't like sect style or family style very much. The fun of mortal cultivation lies in freedom. When I first watched Mortal Chaos in the Sea of Stars, it was really at its peak. I was wandering around alone. Although I was often hunted down, I was carefree and unrestrained. The protagonist created all kinds of adventures and introduced array masters to the sect. I was really afraid that it would become a sect style again in the future. Yellow Maple Valley is an early stage copy, so I can't stay still. In the early days when the map was not released, you could say it was a price difference. Becoming a Yuanying monk was all profit, and the sunk cost was high, but it also resulted in the loss of a lot of the novelty and fun of developing new maps. Seriously speaking, this group of cultivators in the original book were so selfish that when they were about to be destroyed by the demonic attack, if they did not prioritize saving their own lives and improving their own strength, would they value Xin Ruyin's formation? If they can improve their strength in the Nascent Soul stage, these people can sell their sects in a blink of an eye. In the final analysis, war still relies on high-level monks to improve Huang Maple Valley's various backgrounds out of thin air. It feels like it is a bit tied up. Let's see what happens next. If you really become a sect, give up.

The extreme west, Wulong Sea, and Tiansha Continent are all mentioned briefly in the original work. The boundaries of loose alliances such as the Tiandao Alliance and the Nine Nations Alliance are almost blank. The unsolved mysteries left after the invasion of the ancient demon world have not been completely resolved. Is it possible to restore Lingmiao Garden? Is it possible to rebuild the ascension platform and connect it to the upper realm? The area of ​​the human world's ocean is far larger than that of the land. Why is it that only the Chaos Star Sea has developed a marine civilization? There are so many plots that can be developed, but none of the many fans of Qidian Mortal have written about them. Instead, they have turned the female characters in it into buses. Since you like harem stories so much, why don't you write about cities?

I beg you not to have anything to do with Miaoyinmen. After reading books for more than ten years, there are several very annoying characters, such as Linghu Chong, Baguio, and Zi Ling. Her sect is just a pimp, using the excuse of survival, but all the small sects are walking on thin ice, who is more pitiful than the other? She is also known as the most beautiful woman in Luan Xinghai. Is this title just for show and publicity? Wanting to sell it at a good price reminded me of some saint from Cihang Jingzhai who was doing the same thing. They are all white lotuses, fishing for women. Every time these people come to power, I feel extremely uncomfortable. It is human nature to like beautiful appearance, but once it is sold, it is like brown candy, with endless cause and effect and no response. Anyway, I have obtained the Golden Thunder Bamboo, and I no longer see any value in the Miaoyin Sect, only the cause and effect. And Zi Ling is not a suitable Taoist companion. Other female supporting characters can just play around with her, but this one is really disgusting.

Can I report fake updates😅

It's too bland, the story has no ups and downs, the protagonist doesn't encounter any fatal events at all, and it's not very satisfying.

This book is completely schizophrenic! The plot is separated from the character's personality, the protagonist's personality is separated from the logic of his actions, and the relationship between the protagonist and Old Devil Han is logically separated! The dialogues between the characters are stiff, and everyone talks in a long, straightforward manner. Although there are many dialogues, there is no interactivity, and it is purely for the purpose of narration! It is recommended that authors should not just focus on the plot when writing a book without considering the characters. Also, the introduction does not try to steal Han Li's opportunity. The protagonist has his own opportunity! The result? I just used another way of saying it to deceive myself and others. I took the Qingyuan Sword Jue, which makes sense. I took the Golden Thunder Bamboo in another place. I can bear it. I also took the Xuantian Immortal Vine, the Gold-Eating Insect, the Teleportation Array, the Heaven-Mending Pill, and the Xutian Cauldron. From the beginning to the end, I can't think of any one of you that you got better! There is absolutely no difference or innovation of its own!

I don't understand why I'm reading a fanfic and asking who the heroine is, how many heroines... This is a world of immortality, not a group of wives and concubines in ancient times, nor a city where men and women love each other. Good articles will naturally lay the foundation for the heroine. In addition, the obsession of immortality novels is in the pursuit of immortality. If you encounter a protagonist who majors in acacia and ask, you can understand, what is the meaning of having multiple female protagonists in a book of the ascetic type? The title of the book already has the answer. In the fairy world, three corpses must be killed, and what is cut off is the lust of mortals. If you are too obsessed with it, you will not be able to cultivate to the end, even if you have the help of the system, because you are cultivating immortality through the system, not the system. The protagonist's original intention is still the protagonist, and the inner demons cannot be overcome. Why do you need less cause and effect to cultivate immortality? If you have too much cause and effect, you can't resist the end. Don't be affected by today's fast food culture. In the original work, Han Li's handling of female protagonists is not the same as today's colleagues. Some women can only be passers-by. If even passers-by have to be dragged along to cultivate immortality, then this book can only be a book for lower-class novices. Actually, occasionally I want to see a crowd of flowers surrounded by flowers, but all the gossip ruins the market. Either cry to sleep in your arms, or ask for your mercy. It's really not as realistic as trading. Finally, if there is a book based on Acacia, Love Enters the Tao, and the Domain of Release can destroy the human heart, please introduce it ~

Today is the first day of September. Ten thousand words have been updated. The book has been fattened and is ready for slaughter. Please save it with your little hands. It would be great if you can read it every day. It's important to follow the recommendations for this book! Very important! Very important! Thank you for your support!

This forced Han Li to grab the Sky Bottle, but within a few episodes, the Sky Bottle fell into his hands. It was so shameless.

Add some finesse

It was very well written, why did you stop?

Dear book lovers, this book is expected to reach the world of mortals and immortals, with a planned length of more than 3 million words. Please feel free to invest and read.

Why is he a eunuch? The writing is quite beautiful 😆😆😆😆

Alas, I don't know what to say... If you don't write it, send an announcement.

Author, please don't let me be a eunuch! This is the best fanfic I've ever seen.

The author writes that the main character of this novel is still Han Li. Xu Yuan traveled through time to protect Han Li. In the original novel, Han Li performed his martial arts twice before he formed an elixir at the age of 126. After meeting Xu Yuan, he performed his martial arts three times before he formed an elixir at the age of 100. Xu Yuan, a woman who is closely related to Han Li, is also an acquaintance.