Mortal: Since 500 Years Ago

In fact, this book is quite good at the beginning. The protagonist has a clear understanding of himself. He will not stand out if he can, and he can run away if he can. At least before the pill formation, the protagonist is still very similar to Han Li, but after the pill formation, there are some flaws in going to Tiannan. For example, the plot derived from Feng Susu, Yun Ying's Yunlu kidnapped a Qi practitioner and foundation builder, and had to babble a lot. Who is going to explain it? Qi training and foundation building? For the sake of her own peace of mind, Feng Susu did not give the protagonist a chance or anything, but she arranged the hatred between Yunlu and the protagonist. However, the battle between the holy tree when the pill was formed was quite good, with many twists and turns, and it was quite exciting. The battle between the monster after the baby was born was also okay, and the strength of the protagonist after the baby was given, but the emptiness behind it was quite good. The plot of the Temple of Heaven has begun to lower the IQ of other characters. The protagonist is a Nascent Soul, and the alchemy monks can't even take care of themselves. They have no time to worry about the safety of the protagonist. How dare Ji Yin and the Nascent Soul female casual cultivator provoke the protagonist? The protagonist's record in the sea battle is obvious to all. Where do the two junior Nascent Soul casual cultivators get the courage and confidence? The strength mentioned earlier will be forgotten later, right? As for opening a chamber of commerce in Tiannan, I am even more speechless. What materials can you exchange for the materials of the fifth and sixth level monsters in Luan Xinghai that are helpful to Nascent Soul in Tiannan? Those few eighth-level demon pills might be able to be exchanged for some useful materials. This chamber of commerce is purely useless. It can only provide the protagonist with some scraps and spirit stones. The last few pictures have been extremely bad. It takes several martial arts masters to write a chapter, and they have to talk a lot when going on an adventure. I guess they have learned the essence of the animation production team.

By the way, the protagonist always has a cold look in his eyes. Everything is cold. Is there no other look in his eyes? Those who don't know clearly think how wronged the protagonist is. Also, later on, it is said that the protagonist deals fairly and I agree with you. But what happened when he used Xuan Gu to inform Xuan Gu and blackmailed Ji Xuan into buying and selling? Then there is a problem. Some chapters are too dull and the fun level is low. I skipped and read the following ones without any impact. The density of text information is too low. Then, the preface before the main line is too long. At this pace, it will probably be 400-600 chapters before the main line starts, right?

Five tickets

It is estimated that there is a high probability of collapse in the later stage, so let's forget about a batch of water. Several chapters of monthly tickets will be added to the update. The result of the additional update is some kind of bird plot. I specially wrote a few chapters about saving mortals, hiding opportunities, etc. The monthly tickets are like feeding a dog. The design of a magic weapon that forces one's destiny is also mediocre. I designed a shuttle just for the purpose of escaping and sneaking across the country, right? I only learned it in the later stages of forming pills, and I don't have many methods. The writing in the article doesn't reflect the feeling of being crushed by the same level at all. There are only a few dry sentences about how the protagonist is powerful, but you have to explain why he is powerful. I have only practiced a few techniques. I only have two or three magic weapons before I can practice them. The means are really pitiful. To reach the same level is entirely the author's forced explanation. You can see for yourself how many techniques and secrets Han Li practiced in the original book during the period of forming an elixir. There are also a lot of magic weapons and ancient treasures. , Formations, spirit insects, puppets, a lot of means to become invincible. As for the protagonist of this book, plus the natal magic weapon, there are only three magic weapons. Each one is made by adding materials behind an umbrella. They are not top-notch magic weapons. They may not even be as good as other people's natal magic weapons. Then there is only one. The Demon Suppression Tower is still being repaired, but has not been completely repaired. I consider this to be a top-notch ancient treasure, a natal magic weapon. It was only developed at a later stage. It has not been cultivated for a long time. It has no power at all. It is estimated that it can only run away. And there are not many magic and secret skills. Compared with Han Li, it is almost the same. The beggar's version of Han Li, how can he crush other alchemy monks? The protagonist expressed in the writing of the article can at best be regarded as a passerby in the late stage of ordinary alchemy in the original work. He took a bunch of ten thousand-year elixirs and sold a bunch of demon pills in the Blood Forbidden City. The Nascent Soul is looking for you everywhere. You have nine in your body. We have Qu Ling Shen Dan, we have the guarantee, we have the spirit stones, we have completed the skills, and we have the ten thousand year elixir. You told me to take such a big risk to plot the Ding Ling Pill. It happened to be the time when the devil was planning, and a bunch of Nascent Soul old monsters gathered in the Yun Sect. You told me that you had to join in for the Ding Ling Pill. Fishing in troubled waters, right? If you get caught and beat into dumpling fillings, I guess I won't believe it. There is no pill with the same effect in Luan Xing Sea. Taking such a big risk for a pill is completely out of proportion to the risk and benefit. When you come back, Luan Xing Sea is also a pile of water. A natal magic weapon is trained from elixir formation to Later, when I saw the picture, I couldn't help but laugh. It's true. Logically speaking, the wind type is light, agile, sharp, or sustained weather damage. Even if I re-train that umbrella, I think it is better than the shuttle you made. When you wrote it, I was still thinking about the picture in my mind. Look Come to the picture, what is the difference between this and a rocket? Why don't you talk about building a space carrier? Your imagination is completely useless. Since you mentioned that the shuttle is assembled, why can't it be formed by a needle and an array of shuttle pieces? Each group of shuttle pieces ranges from six to twelve, or consists of hundreds or thousands of shuttle pieces. It is composed of pieces, which can only be split into dozens of pieces at first. If you have strong spiritual consciousness or a child, you can split it into hundreds or thousands of pieces. You control the shuttle needle yourself. You can stand close and act as a gunman, and you can attack from a distance. The shuttle piece attacks are interspersed and make it difficult to guard against. Or you can say that you add some kind of material. If you have accumulated a large number of shuttle splints to a certain extent, you can hide them in the void. When you fight against the enemy, you can hide in the void and hit with a fatal blow. You are also a formation master, and you can use shuttle splints to form formations to kill enemies. You can even split a certain number of shuttle splints, and you can assemble a battle armor and wear it like a gold-eating insect. Not only Defense has speed and speed. It can be said that when worn, wind spells can be added, and escape skills can be greatly improved. And since there is comprehension, why not develop a secret method that can engrave formations on the shuttle pieces. When wearing the armor, the formations on each shuttle piece can be linked, isn't it? Is it because of the body formation? It is simply an all-round magic weapon. One armor can pull out a lot of functions. When stowing away, you can stick the Six-Ding Heavenly Armor Talisman on it, and the shuttle blades themselves have array text to link up to form an array. With the strength of the magic weapon, you need a chicken-feather cockpit, and you can also build a shuttle-shaped spaceship to stow away. Are you going to the stars? Internavigation, right? Now that the comprehension hook is enabled, it should be developed well. There is no little green bottle, and there are not as many resources as Han Li. If the quantity is not enough, the quality will be lost. With the comprehension hook enabled, it can be said that the protagonist is comparable to Dayan Shenjun and Qing Yuanzi. Moreover, the protagonist is not a pseudo-spiritual root, and is second only to The alien spirit root of Tianlinggen ended up giving birth to a baby. The author seemed to be timid and half-dead. He is now 180 years old. He said that it will take 60 years to create a baby, which is equivalent to maybe 250 years old before the baby can be successfully formed. To be honest, the shape is far worse than Han Li. Now he is really 250

I haven't entered the Yellow Maple Valley for a long time. I guess it will take a few days to enter the Yellow Maple Valley before entering the Bloody Forbidden Land. The story of the Bloody Forbidden Land will also need to be watered down for a few days before it comes out. I don't know, I thought you wrote the original novel. The story is so stinky and long.

1. Water, many people are talking about water From the protagonist's solo flight in Chapter 57 to the opening of the Xutian Palace in Chapter 100 or so, I don't know what the author is writing in the middle 50 chapters. It is too bland and will be forgotten after reading it. It is just like many comments below said, Water is not about the speed of cultivation, but many descriptions are procrastinating, not refined enough, and the plot advances slowly. Du didn't make the transition well, so he improved a bit and added an additional skill (Dongxu Condensation, what a sand sculpture name, Dongxu Splitting Wind Strength/Shattering Wind Slash/SuFeng Kill sounds better than yours?). A lot of writing was spent on this key skill, but in the end the power was not as powerful as the previous Dongxu Finger who appeared out of nowhere and explained it in a few words. Everyone felt numb when he saw this. In addition to this skill, you also spent nearly three thousand spirit stones to buy a talisman with three remaining times? In the later stages of his qi training, Han Licai had collected Qi Tianlei Zi, two or three talismans, a full set of top-quality magic weapons, and other equipment. He had both regular and trump cards. What was the protagonist doing? We are already in the late stage of foundation building, but it is still the same flying sword from dozens of chapters ago. It obviously has no configuration, but the author forced it to write that the protagonist is very strong (the first person under the formation of pills?). Yes, the protagonist has two killer skills, so he doesn't need external objects such as magic weapons? Those who have made it to foundation building, everyone else is mediocre, without any trump card? And the skill consumption is not much more than the magic weapon? Under the impact of the beast tide, how many times can you let go? In the later stage of Qi training, you can use two magic weapons at the same time to fight. How many can you use in the later stage of foundation building? You mentioned several times that the protagonist's spiritual consciousness is stronger than the same level, and you wrote about everything from Qi training to foundation building. Hey, I just wrote it for fun, and I didn't use it. 2. Many of the descriptions are inappropriately detailed Do the subsequent plots such as the pill formation meeting, monster hunting, and beast tide defending the island have any help in shaping the protagonist? Moreover, there are so many chapters to prepare for the beast tide. As a result, the Nascent Soul War ended up with a few wrong moves and two people escaping to death. It was an anticlimax. It would be better not to write it in detail from the front, but to write it from the side. For example, a few Nascent Soul bosses fought hundreds of miles away from the sea to the sky. Deep in the clouds, the fight caused lightning and thunder, the sky was dark, the earth was dark, and the huge waves were huge. Just explain the results. The protagonist is only in the foundation stage, so the narrative must be written from the perspective of the protagonist. At most, it is like the previous writing of Ji Xuan (I personally think that the writing of the early stage of forming the core is too exaggerated). It is enough to show the majesty of the next big realm. If there are too many realms beyond the protagonist, just let it continue to remain mysterious, not to mention the dialogue between the two Nascent Souls, which is a whole 5 chapters! ! ! What should be written in detail is the growth of the protagonist. The first is the harvest and expenditure of the protagonist before the beast tide. The protagonist could have relied on the skill of alchemy to have multiple sources of income to subsidize his training needs. Since it is not written, then after you use up the existing elixirs, you rely on killing monsters in exchange for supplies. Is it a mistake or is it just enough? You have to write down whether it is difficult or not, otherwise readers will feel that the protagonist is just dawdling around, which is inexplicable. (On the one hand, the author repeatedly told readers how to earn two or three hundred yuan a year from foundation building, but on the other hand, he did not write about the financial situation of the protagonist as a casual cultivator. He spent a lot of money to buy talismans, and was reluctant to part with the more than one hundred transmission fees later. The former is to prevent trouble before it happens, while the latter is a disaster that is imminent! If the readers don't criticize, who are you to criticize? Another thing that should be written in detail is the sacrifices and gains made by the protagonist in the past few months of defending against the monster tide. How many monsters were killed/how many materials were obtained/how many treasures were exchanged/how many spiritual stones were saved/how many items were exchanged to the Star Palace based on the performance? These are the key points, and the author briefly mentions them.

To be honest, I am a little disappointed with the author. It is understandable that you rebuilt the mountain gate in the Chaotic Star Sea, but I can't understand why you want to share the teleportation array with others. What is the point of building a sect in the Yue Kingdom? If you want spiritual stones, you have the best spiritual stone mines, and you need cultivation resources or spiritual materials. You just practice this Spiritual Elixir and then collect monsters and bring them to places like the Nine Kingdoms Alliance and the Righteous Way Alliance. You show off your peak behavior in the early stage of Nascent Soul in a high-profile way. After you finish the transaction, you just pretend to be in seclusion. Then you go out and show that you have just broken through in the middle stage of Nascent Soul. Who will give you trouble? Who the hell dares to kidnap you and ask you about your origins? You vaguely mention that you were chased here by your enemies. You have already entered the explanation period. Why do you feel like you are still in the elixir formation period? You don't dare to do it here and don't dare to do it there. What's the point of you still making a fuss here in Yue country? If the ancient teleportation array is exposed, you will be dead. Those short-lived or great monks will definitely surround you and kill you. After chasing this book for so long, I feel that you will not be able to write this part after you reach the middle stage of Nascent Soul. You will just do some meaningless things and it will be clumsy. Have you ever thought about how to write the heroine's scene? What are you doing when you become a great monk and find a female alchemy cultivator to be your Taoist companion?

After reading about 60 chapters, I feel that there are two problems. The first point: Goldfinger was too late and not well developed. I realized that to be honest, it was too weak and the usage was wrong. The best way to use it is to practice various secret techniques and spells, so that even if you don't have top-level magic weapons, you can still have strong combat power like Master Mulan. With secret techniques like Blood Spirit Diamond, you can easily achieve the effect of killing at first sight, instead of having to fight for a long time every time you encounter an opponent of the same level, with frequent accidents. The second is formation and talisman making. The formation can lead to enlightenment and achieve achievements like Xin Ruyin, or it can refine a large number of talismans, so that you can have confidence when running away. . But the protagonist chose alchemy, so the effect of enlightenment was not obvious at all, and it was not even useful. It gives people a sense of forced reasonableness. 1 Second point: The protagonist has no characteristics at all compared to monks of the same level, and he is also very poor, with no channels or ability to make money. I can barely make alchemy, mediocre fighting skills, weapon refining, formations, talismans, and beast-controlling spiritual insects. It is the kind that will be forgotten the next day after watching it. I can barely make alchemy, but there is no source of elixir. This will consume a lot of resources to build proficiency. I don't know how to form, and I'm already in the late stage of foundation building and haven't learned how to practice weapons yet. So how long will it take you to practice the magic weapon after you have formed the elixir? Where can I find the materials for the magic weapon? The top-level skills practiced also lack characteristics. They say they have deep magic power, but in fact, they will start taking drugs after two hits. There are no decent supporting spells. Even the wind escape was realized suddenly. Look at the Xuanyin Sutra, which is also a top-level skill. The Yue Emperor directly penetrated Han Li's two top-level shield magic weapons with a Blood Spirit Diamond, almost killing him. Where are the spells that match the protagonist's skill? How is it different from ordinary exercises? Secondly, when I left as a seed, I received no elixirs, no talismans, no life-saving things, and very few secret arts and techniques. What kind of seed is this, foxtail grass? This sect gives people a very tasteless feeling. I also want to go to the Xutian Temple during the foundation building stage. The original Zi Ling is in the foundation building stage, but his parents are both alchemy monks, and they have a lot of life-saving things in their pockets. The protagonist dares to go to the Xutian Palace just to buy a talisman, which is unnatural.

Don't cater to the audience too much and change every suggestion you make. Then the comment section will be all about you. By then, it will be a bad article without any characteristics. What about gold-eating insects and Dayan Shenjun, you have to take it? The writing is all bad. All mortals have these opportunities, so why can't they come up with something original? Isn't your writing of Tianfengsuo Qingpingjian very good? Also, aren't the plots of Qing Yuan Zong all very well written? If I have to seize the same opportunity from Han Li, then I might as well read the original work. Isn't Wang Yu better than yours? There are also jokes to be made at any time, and the Nine Turns of the Big Intestine is here, so why not make a show? 😰😰

Han Li can basically kill people in the early stage of Yuanying with one blow in the early stage of Yuanying. The protagonist in the middle stage of Yuanying can't kill even the early stage Jiyin. It's a waste. It's exciting but not exciting enough.

I can understand why you hide your cultivation for fear of being targeted by the Six Paths and the Twin Saints, but do you think you want to take the Xutian Cauldron in full view of the public after revealing your cultivation in the early stages of Nascent Soul? Since the choice to take the Xutian Cauldron's hidden cultivation is purely unnecessary, otherwise it would be impossible to rush out with the initial cultivation level, and then we have to consider the sect, not to mention that Xing Palace has long regarded the Xutian Cauldron as something in the bag and will not let anyone take it away casually. No matter how you look at it, there is no reason to take it, but the author just writes that the protagonist intends to take the Xutian Cauldron. How old are you? Even if you want to take it, you have to be well prepared and consider the consequences. There is no such thing as just taking it. And then the author has no intention of letting the protagonist actually get it, so he has people kill the blood jade spider. Doesn't that mean It can't be killed, but the protagonist in this article is too stupid. He just and honestly took two blood jade spiders and put them there. A bunch of people were watching, and the Xutian Cauldron spit out the two things. The protagonist, who was only in the early stage of Nascent Soul in the eyes of others, took them all, and he was not beaten by a group of people. There are other Nascent Souls that are almost meaningless if they don't come. If nothing else, Xing Gong has already regarded this thing as his own. If he doesn't show up, there will be other ways to peek, which is not written out. And among the few present, Wan Tianming and Mrs. Hao have nothing to say, Qing Yi and Man Hu must be the protagonist's followers? I didn't get any benefits. I originally said that I would take the Xutian Cauldron and the Dry Blue Ice Flame, and let Man Beard choose the ancient treasures first. But Man Beard had nothing in his hands. There is also a middle-stage Nascent Soul named Jiang who is about to die of old age. In his eyes, the Heaven-Building Pill can extend life, and he can easily let you take it away. , Even if he is kind to his granddaughter, it will be difficult The author probably watched the anime and wanted the protagonist to maintain a certain relationship with Qingyi and Man Beard, but he can't make the characters stupid. Opportunities are ahead. Man Beard Qingyi and Man Beard have no psychological fluctuations at all? Obediently give everything to the protagonist The most difficult part is the scene where the blood jade spider is killed. I think the protagonist described by the author is very indifferent and doesn't care about Mrs. Hao's methods. He has a calm face and are you threatening me? It seems that I have been prepared for a long time, and I am also looking forward to preparing some back-ups. As a result, the blood jade spider was killed in two blows, and the mid-term cultivation did not show any deterrence. It showed its initial toughness, as if it didn't take anything seriously. After it was a foregone conclusion that the Xutian Cauldron could not be pulled out, the protagonist slowly lowered his head to look at the blood jade spider, slowly raised his head and suddenly smiled, and then revealed his mid-term cultivation to kill Mrs. Hao. It was really stupid There are too many contradictions before and after, regardless of whether the hidden cultivation is to get the cauldron and the treasure. It doesn't make sense to keep a low profile, but the protagonist is still pretending. Manbeard is also a free thug. He doesn't get anything and doesn't compensate the protagonist, so he doesn't have any opinions. What kind of people in the devil's way are so pure that they can't be righteous anymore, and the protagonist still gets two, ancient treasures and elixirs. Logically speaking, Manbeard has a share. If it is useful to the protagonist, then the protagonist has to pay some compensation from his pocket, so he just left and became a free thug along the way.

A Jiedan dares to take advantage of Nascent Soul, are you kidding me? Han Li was forming a baby in the Luoyun Sect. When the Nascent Soul Celestial Phenomenon appeared, no Nascent Soul would take action. It would either succeed or fail. In other words, the moment the Celestial Soul Celestial Phenomenon was discovered, the formation of the baby was almost over. The inner demon tribulation seemed long to me, but it was only a moment to the outside world. How long would it take for the group of pill-forming pills to discover the Celestial Soul Celestial Phenomenon and wait for that idiot to fly over, fly around the front and attack the formation from the weak point? Author: Have you ever seen Mortal? Is it possible that even Yuanying has no time to take action? If you look at any mortal fanfic, the moment the celestial phenomenon of infant formation appears, unless you are a late-stage great monk, even the peak Yuan Zhong will not make any other moves, because it is too late. No one is willing to form a deadly feud with a Yuanying for no reason! Where does one have so much time to attack the formation? Doing a lot of bullshit? People who have formed a core are hundreds of years old. There are no fools in the mortal world. If you really want to trick someone into failing, you have to be sure that the other person has failed before you dare to do so.

It's too cool. I went to Tiannan to write about a top scholar who disguised herself as a man. I thought for a long time that it was some kind of foreshadowing (I wanted her to be Tiannan's agent or something). As a result, he was kidnapped and the protagonist couldn't save him. That doesn't mean I paid to see you talk nonsense to me. Then when I saw that it was difficult to conceive a baby, I wrote a two-in-one chapter, and then filled it with water like crazy. First, I made a clown to cut the formation while others were having a baby, and the water was poured out. Then the whole seven fantasy world demons gave me water numbness. The co-author doesn't treat readers' coins as dry food, right? There are also countless poisonous points, such as taking things from the original work and taking them without anyone saying anything. The author insisted on leaving something else in it. Also, I could have originally written some elixirs with similar effects, but ended up having to create an elixir from the original novel, and then fill in many chapters of the plot. And I haven't seen the heroine Mao until now. In short, it is very watery, with limited poison points, but the author always likes to make some ingenuity in some inexplicable places.

Having killed so many monsters before, do you think others are fools? Moreover, since Nascent Soul is in the middle stage, it can also be fought in the later stage. What is it hiding?

To be honest, judging from the protagonist's current skills, it is not suitable for Song Yu to be the heroine. In the barren environment of the human world, there is no good character. There are only two people who are suitable to be the heroines or apprentices. One is Xin Ruyin, whose talent in formations is incredible. Send her to the pill formation. Maybe she can help you when you ascend. , And there is Ling Yuling, the richest woman in the human world, who can help you transform into a god. Other Yuanyao, Ziling and the like are pure drag in the human world. Don't tell me that they can ascend to the spirit world, the demon world and the like right now, in the human world, and the protagonist's cultivation is very difficult and difficult to do now.

Kill Mrs. Hao and pretend to be pretentious. What are you pretending to do?

You can only write about the mortal world in this book, not the spiritual world. In other words, it's a good thing that he is the protagonist, otherwise he wouldn't be able to get the connecting pill!

The protagonist seems to be very strong, but I don't feel it, or it's not exciting enough.

It's getting more and more confusing. I wonder how many more chapters the author of A Dust Falling Pill needs to come out, so I want to ask. Your master has given you the Nine-Tune Spiritual Ginseng, so why don't you just ask him for a dust-reducing pill? Isn't this difficult for a fake infant monk? I won't even mention whether it's necessary for you to go to the Xutian Palace to risk your life during the foundation-building period of your spiritual roots. I'll just assume that you are laying the groundwork in advance for the sake of the number of water words. The alien spirit root elixir is as difficult to write as the pseudo-spiritual root. If you change the protagonist of this book to have three spiritual roots or even a pseudo-spiritual root, it won't be out of the ordinary.

Now that you have such a small hook and few resources, you have to find a Taoist companion who can follow you to ascend. But according to the way you write it, there are very few people in the human world who can ascend with you. Except for Bingfeng, if you want to be an anime fan, you wrote it so realistically. When it comes to women, you can directly lower your intelligence. It's too exaggerated. Song Yu has talent, but it's almost the same as you, not very special. You have been so careful and spent so many resources and so many calculations to get here, right? If you don't plan well for women, you won't be able to go far. Is it possible that you want to be written as the second model worker? Are women just accessories? Then I'll send it, you can only look for special physiques, and you definitely won't touch Nangong. The suitable female characters who appear in the original work are all too young. Can Xin Tieyin's dragon chant physique and Yuan Yao's Tianyin physique create a method to cultivate one Yang and one Cultivate Yin? If the two of them practice Yin and Yang in balance, the cultivation speed and results may be faster. Others It's hard to say about his woman. Song Yu is 100 years younger than Han Li, which means she was born when you were 600 years old. It would take you more than 200 years to reach the Nascent Soul stage even if you are given resources. At this time, you will be over 800 years old. How many years do you have left? When choosing a Taoist companion, you must choose someone who can go on with you to suit your character as the protagonist of the book.

Thoughts after reading: This author always writes and writes with great enthusiasm, but suddenly he will screen readers a few times and forcefully add jokes. Add some inexplicable settings, and then continue to play around. I feel that it is awesome and that I have a genius idea, and then I will copy it. I often write the meaning of a sentence over and over again, and the whole chapter is blurred. When you write about mortals, just stick to their settings, but the result is that you always write some inexplicable settings. I want to see myself weighing and weighing.

Entering the sect in the early stage is a springboard for safe development, but it is always arranged to give the protagonist uncomfortable points in his development. 1. The protagonist's skills have potential, but they are a little slower than I imagined. They also specifically pointed out that it would take twice as much time and resources. The techniques practiced by other geniuses are all strong and fast, but the protagonist is like this? Or is it that the protagonist's combat power will be much stronger than other geniuses just by relying on this skill? 2. The sect's treatment is not good, and you have to fight for the foundation-building pill of the alien spirit root yourself. Everything is calculated based on contribution, and the sect is like a school. There is no warmth, it is all calculation. 3. Being a referee also requires rescue, and the description highlights how difficult it is for the protagonist to rescue, which is very uncomfortable. "There are three referees, the protagonist takes the penalty, one is also a rescuer, and one is a formation checker." The most intuitive feeling is that the protagonist does two jobs and others do one, but there is no difference in the contribution points received.

I saw the latest. I can read this book, but I don't have any sense of expectation. There is no original copy. The description of the fighting method is poor. The naming of the moves is really useless. I almost couldn't stand it when I saw the wind god's legs. Alas, after all, I paid for it. I can say a few words.

The writing of this protagonist is outrageous. He killed eight or nine transformed monsters when he was just a Nascent Soul. The key point is that this protagonist has no means. The puppet cannot pet animals and has no spiritual consciousness. The magic weapon is still rubbish from the pill-forming stage. Is there any difference between a few spells and Mulan's spiritual skills? You wrote it so well. Compared with the methods of Han Li's hexagonal warriors in the same period, they are too awesome.

To save you some money, you don't need to read between 363 and 373. It's ten chapters of setting up a street stall and doing business. It won't affect you if you skip between them.

I wrote it for a long time, laying the groundwork, and then sent it to Yellow Maple Valley. On the way, Yuan Ying of the Hehuan Sect saw the female consort and took her away. Then the protagonist told the female consort boyfriend that it was his fault. I won't ignore it. Let's look at the logic. The female consort is going to take the imperial examination herself, and she also won the top prize. The princess was granted marriage by the emperor. The woman disguised herself as a man and had sex. Before the female consort passed the imperial examination, she met the male protagonist who had just arrived here. The male protagonist spent money to learn the local dialect. This is a transaction involving money and goods, and no one owes anyone. It can only be defined as someone you know. The male protagonist feels that this female consort can no longer play anymore and is about to be eliminated by the nine tribes. Because we know each other, I tried to find a way to build a ladder for her to go to Yellow Maple Valley. The thing is done. To be considered helpful, the female consort owes the protagonist a favor. As for going to Yellow Maple Valley, there was a "car accident" on the way and he was captured by the Hehuan Sect. What does that have to do with the protagonist? At that time, the female consort was considered a person from Huang Maple Valley. The Hehuan Sect and Huang Maple Valley are on the verge of fighting. Who is the protagonist? Do you need to stand up and say "I want revenge"? ? ? Author, how much did you drink? Writing this kind of shit plot?

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Out of Song Yu is not good, Song Yu is a Tianling root plus a special spirit body, extremely high qualifications, the original work also successfully condensed the Nascent Soul, it can be said to be very extraordinary, and the appearance is also extremely outstanding. But the timing is too bad. The main plot has not started yet. Author, your setting is that the protagonist, Old Devil Han, is 500 years old. So by the time Han Li in the original book gives birth to a baby, the protagonist will be 700 years old at least, which means that he is at least at the peak of Nascent Soul, or has advanced to the stage of becoming a god. But Song Yu was no more than a hundred years old at that time, and with his cultivation in the pill formation stage, it was absolutely impossible to condense the Nascent Soul. Don't you think the gap is a bit too big? Monks and monks have different circles in different realms. In the middle and late stages of Nascent Soul, one can barely get involved in the circle of gods, but it is only reluctantly. How to deal with the gap in cultivation between the pill-forming stage and the god-transforming stage? These eight poles cannot be used together? "Don't really make a story about the underworld with no cultivation. The protagonist is no longer a child. Falling in love at first sight is impossible after experiencing the inner demons, let alone lust. The essence of the world view of mortals is the exchange of interests, valuing everything. Intrigue and intrigue are the norm, and cultivation and strength are everything. No matter how good-looking Song Yu is, she's only in the pill-forming stage, and she won't become a pill-forming shrimp if she shows interest again. Even if the protagonist hasn't broken through to become a god at that time, he will definitely look down on a pill-forming peak at the peak of Nascent Soul! It's even more impossible if it's a god. All the old monsters in the incarnation are worried about ascending. Even the Hu Lao Mo, who has many wives and concubines, only accepts some beautiful Nascent Soul female cultivators who have not lost their vitality. They are Nascent Souls! Collecting a knotted elixir would be too much for your ability to transform into a god.                                                           Anyway, I can't think of how to arrange Song Yu to be the heroine. Han Laomo is more than a hundred years older than Song Yu, and the protagonist is more than 600 years older than Song Yu. It's enough to be her ancestor's ancestor, so she doesn't have to smelt copper! ! ! ! You can arrange one first. Isn't Nangong Que very good? It's not impossible to train Yuan Ying in the later stage. She is already a top female cultivator in the human world. Don't do love at first sight or young Muai jokes among mortals. The romance is too OOC. This is not a small problem if you add it to mortal novels.

I have read too many stories about the start of the Yue Kingdom, joining the Yellow Maple Valley, participating in the Bloody Forbidden Land, the invasion of demons, and being teleported to the Sea of ​​Chaos Stars. This book opens in the chaotic sea of ​​stars 500 years ago. It is unconventional and has some new ideas. I look forward to seeing the interaction between the protagonist as a great monk or a master of god transformation, and Han Laomo, a minor Qi refining cultivator! Don't grab it, just refine it instantly

The author, so far, this book is well written, and I think it is good food, but I personally think there are still some unreasonable parts. You can refer to it appropriately, and if you think there are reasonable places that can be adopted, then make reasonable optimizations👇👇👇 Chapter 157: Physical training corresponds to physical training, and tempering the physical body to a level comparable to a magic weapon is actually dead muscle? This is an obvious poisonous point Chapter 218: You get a golden treasure chest at the end of this chapter. You can set up your own formation accumulation to break the ban on the treasure chest and get the ban token Chapter 219: You can set up a refining ban token to avoid ban strangulation (I personally think there is a ban strangle). Get the token first and then unblock the repair. There is something particularly confusing to me. Nangong Wan and the protagonist both entered the forbidden area through secret methods. This is absolutely fine, but Nangong Wan did not unlock the cultivation seal before leaving the forbidden area. There are no monsters above level 2 or 3 in the Bloody Forbidden Land. The black dragon was at level 1 before it broke through. The place where the ink dragon exists should have a ban to cover the aura. After all, it is the place where the treasure box ban token is placed. The treasure box has not been discovered for so long (personal understanding) Personally, I think there should be a large formation ban to clean up these second-level monsters and above on a regular basis. Can't the seven factions clean it up on a regular basis? The Queen of Yuan Dynasty can resist to the past, after all, it is a place where inheritance is left. The protagonist exposed his alchemy cultivation but it did not trigger a ban reaction. If you could get in by suppressing your cultivation, the seven sects' elixir-forming Yuanying would probably have gone in long ago. After all, it was left behind by the ancient monks Chapter 220: It's still a treasure chest, not a forbidden token. Chapter 267 (269): I have reservations about whether there is erysipelas among mortals. Personally I don't think so. ① There is erysipelas: The uniqueness of the elixir that ripens in the small green bottle. Han Li ate the elixir as a meal. There is no mention of Han Li getting erysipelas in the original work. Maybe because of the pure potency of the vial, Han Li never got erysipelas But other monks did not have cheats like Han Li. The elixirs he took There is an accumulation of impurities, which makes it difficult to completely refine, which can also be explained by a long time. ② No erysipelas: The small green bottle only has the law of time in the early stage, and the ripening elixir only increases its age, which is no different from elixirs that grow normally in nature. Han Li is still not infected with erysipelas, which shows that there is no concept of erysipelas among mortals Chapter 293: I re-read the part about exchanging skills with Barbarian Beard, the life-saving grace + the real film of Brahma Saint in exchange for the Demonic Skill, there is absolutely no problem (there is no problem if I don't modify my personal feelings) But after all, it is Barbarian Beard's native skill, Manbeard is not Tiehanhan, it can increase the inner demon oath, Make the protagonist promise not to reveal the skills (this is more rigorous) Chapter 330: When talking to Man Beard, you can use psychological activities to highlight the main purpose of the trip, what treasures you must get, and what the consequences of exposing your cultivation are. You can pretend to act in the name of "taking the tripod". And the new blood jade spider, paving the way for the subsequent three entries into Xutian Palace

According to the way he writes it, it probably has nothing to do with the plot of the original work. Those who want to see the plot related or interactive can withdraw it.