Family Cultivator: I Have an Intelligence System

First of all, the general direction and plot are absolutely fine. The ideas are concise and clear and very interesting at the same time. However, the habit of relying on dialogue to push the plot/explain the content is a bit fatal, giving people the feeling of just chatting without doing anything. This problem mainly occurs in battle rounds and family affairs. Repeated questions and answers and discussions cannot actually help shape the character's image. The important thing is what these people, especially the children of the family, did, and there is no need to be afraid of taking up space. Moreover, the plot must be prioritized. Don't be stingy with words for big scenes. Write scenes, people, psychology, states, and mobilize more atmosphere. Now it seems that the more important and intense battle rounds are a bit dull. It's good to maintain the current atmosphere every day. After all, the author is actually very good. I personally think that even a gold finger with no nutrition can write vivid and interesting plots and characters. I hope to keep up the good work. The above are just some personal opinions and for reference only. I'm sorry if it bothers me.

I hope the protagonist can complain less, be more steady, be more civilized, and be more thoughtful. Maybe I'm getting older, so I prefer mature and steady protagonists.

How should I put it? There are a lot of things. I haven't seen how he practices, and he probably doesn't have time. There are about ten messages a day. It's too much to remember. It's better to have one message every day or one message a month, which is better than so many messages in one day.

Is the author unclear about intelligence and prophecy? Is this information?

The poison has been tested, and there is currently a small piece of grass, which is expected to become a fairy grass. PS: I've given you the recommendation votes, if you don't update it soon, even the grinding donkeys won't dare to rest like this.

I finished reading it in half a day. It is a very good book. However, there are too few battle scenes about the protagonist. It seems that there is no passion. There are not many battles in the whole book. After the protagonist reaches Jindan, Yuanying and even the gods will still be under the wings of the patriarch and the seniors of the Alchemy Sect. The number of actual combat and hard battles for the protagonist should be increased. Except for Wu Qingfeng, he has never fought a life-or-death battle 😁

Seven or eight people in the late stage of Qi training? If you don't know how to write, don't write. There are 3.4 People in your family.

This golden finger can practice divination skills. It feels more reasonable.

The protagonist is too selfish. Since you are writing about a family, you must use your golden fingers to help the family.

Very well written, good work, keep up the good work

I really like this book, it's beautiful!

The road is long and far away, I will search up and down😁