Yinshan Family

It's very uncomfortable to watch. The setting is like a battle between the great and the great, but the writing style is not ancient, white and not white, the vocabulary is not accumulated, and it insists on writing in ancient Chinese. Many words are copied from ancient Chinese using colloquialisms, which makes it uncomfortable to watch. I really don't have that level, so I might as well describe it in vernacular. This way, the visual effect will be much better, and the story will be easier to write!

The author of "The Great Way of Confrontation" and "The Shadow of All Laws" has written very well. The biggest problem is that this book too imitates the nonsense of "Wan Jiu". It seems that the rhetoric is gorgeous and the system is perfect. In fact, it is difficult for this kind of writing to survive in this era. For example, the only fault is that too much nonsense leads to poor grades and worse grades.

Advantages: It can be seen that the author has his own ideas and concepts, which is a good thing. Writing novels is to have his own ideas. If they are all systematic and cool articles, it is really meaningless. The difference between the outside world and the practice system of the local world is a highlight of this book. The author can dig deeper in this aspect. There are also some descriptions of the world structure, which is good. The classical fairy tale can be more foreshadowing, which will help the later plot and story development. There are advantages, but the disadvantages are even greater! First: the writing style is too bland and lacks the spirit of a fairy! It gives me a feeling of watching martial arts. For example, in a fairy tale novel, up to now, there is not even a storage ring. The protagonist goes to the family scripture library several times. What should he use to store the book? Actually using a bookcase to hold books? I really can't complain! It's too retarded. Is this a fairy tale? Second: The description and reflection of the realm of monks is also very poor! Take the Yuanying monk who is appearing now as an example. I have not seen the author's description of the Yuanying monk's style at all! Nothing! The author is really messed up in this regard! You are writing a fairy novel, not a martial arts novel! What are the styles of monks in different realms? This must be reflected! Not much else, let me recommend a few books to the author and take a good look at them. What are fairy novels? "The Battle of the Great Road" needs no introduction, it is a masterpiece of contemporary fairy tale novels! If the author takes a closer look at Dao Dao, you will know what a fairy novel is! "Immortal Industry" and Dao Zhengfeng are the same system, but the author wrote something of his own! Not much to say, if you can gain something from reading these two books, it will definitely help you reach several levels!

I'm sorry, I can't stand it anymore, I really can't stand it. It's understandable that the Immortal Cultivation Family is cunning, but you have just started to lose new power when its power starts to decline. You have made it difficult to catch up with your own strength. I don't think that the Immortal Cultivation Family would be so unwise, and it is also the overlord in a large area. This is not in line with ordinary people's mentality. If you are a small shareholder of a listed company and the stock price drops, the gains you get from selling are completely different from the gains from other shareholders who work together to bring back the stock price. There are a few unwise people in a large clan, but the others work hard to find ways to stabilize the situation for their own benefit. . . . . Sorry, I didn't read much, just my personal opinion, retreat

It's difficult to collapse at the beginning. The Yin family has been inherited for more than 30,000 years. This is the length of civilization from apes to humans. Even if such a large family declines, it will only take thousands of years as a unit. As a result, the protagonist had to transfer the inherited fire as soon as he came to the Yin clan. How could it be such a coincidence? "It's not that I'm being arrogant, but it reflects the rigor of the novel's author's setting. Such an author will give you an incredible job later on. As soon as the protagonist comes, the sect will start a war, the family will be in crisis, and in the later stage, it will encounter a crisis of annihilation. The protagonist will encounter anything that goes against the will of heaven.

Pretending to be mysterious and making unnecessary noises, some things can be more concise, don't pile up words and blindly exaggerate

I hate aristocratic families and never read family articles. From the first time I saw the word aristocratic family, I felt disgust from the bottom of my heart. Maybe it's because of the same surname as Huang Chao.

I don't know if the author knows too much or what, but you seem to have a lot of sense, but the space is too empty. Complete vocabulary stacking. Why write so many scriptures? Do you want your readers to follow suit? The main character is still a tadpole and it's already written so well. You can write some mystical stuff, but this is the only thing in the whole article, so what should I read? I might as well read my professional literature, which is easier and more practical than yours.

It's so tiring to watch! I read just a dozen chapters for a long time, and many of them made me repeatedly speculate about what the author was saying. Just like the Mysterious Man! After reading more than a dozen chapters, I interpret the following content. The protagonist has an innate Taoist book as a golden finger that takes the protagonist through time and space and is reincarnated to the Yin family. Then the protagonist's golden finger is robbed by the Yin family. The masters of the Yin family cannot decipher the Shenzhou Taoist book. As a result, the blame is on the protagonist. He wants to search for the protagonist's soul and refine it. The protagonist also knows it. Then in the middle, the author made a description that the Riddler did not understand, and finally failed to find it! Then the protagonist becomes a dog for the Yin family and wants to help the Yin family overcome the calamity. What does the author call his name? ? ? It's really unbearable to watch! I don't know what the author wants to express, but this is what I extracted.

It's hard to read a good subject matter, but it's tasteless and a pity to abandon it.

The Great Road Confrontation is half-written and half-written, with concise vocabulary and a refreshing plot. It was very enjoyable to watch. There is nothing wrong with piling up rhetoric, which looks gorgeous but is actually all nonsense. I gave up without even finishing the free chapter. Chunyang Avenue also has this problem! I can't finish ten chapters. The author's new book seems to still have this problem and hasn't corrected it. The best choice for authors who do not have enough skills is to write in plain language like a mortal's journey to immortality, occasionally using four-character words or idioms. This is the simplest. The shortcoming is that it is too white, and demanding readers will not like it, but the writing is good and can be broken. This book can be regarded as a collection of all fault-free methods, telling the shortcomings of two families for ordinary people cultivating immortality! It's basically plain language, but it has to be piled up with rhetoric, but it's not gorgeous enough. It's far from being blameless, but it still doesn't convey the meaning!

The author feels that you should transition to writing fan fiction and follow the master's ideas first so that you can write your own work well. Otherwise, it would be tiring to reply to comments every day.

Author, Yin Wuruo will appear in the future, can you please stop doing embroidery all the time? It's not like Dongfang Invincible

This book is suitable for physical books. I feel so sad when I read it online. I'm really embarrassed that I can't read it anymore. Abandoned!

Aristocratic family, is such a small circle interesting?

Looking at the setting, I thought it could compete with Dao Dao, but when I saw Chapter 6, I was so addicted that I couldn't stand it anymore.

I dislike this Yin Wuruo more and more

I imitate Dao Zhengfeng, at least imitate its crispness and wonderful plot. It is written in a tangled and hesitant way, full of nonsense, and I can't bear to read it!

After reading the first chapter, I felt that it was very problematic. It was all expository. The author wants to introduce the background and characters, but you can't write it like this. It will extremely discourage readers. The background and characters should be introduced in the words and deeds of the characters, allowing readers to discover them on their own through the words and deeds of the characters. I really have to introduce it in the form of narration, and I only introduce it when necessary.

This... A real cultivator from a noble family, how can he be like a casual cultivator? I feel like he is slower than a casual cultivator.

I think it's a good one. It's one of the top ten Xianxia. It would be a pity not to write it down. When will the new book be released?