Lingbao Daojun

The protagonist or the author is a bit pretentious, and part of the plot has a formulaic feel for the sake of having the three views correct. For example: It is mentioned many times in the article that immortal cultivators do not treat mortals as the same kind. In and out of words, the protagonist treats mortals equally and does not forget his roots. But the author asked himself, can mortals really be equal to the immortal cultivators in the author's book? Even if it is equality in dignity and personality. It's like a tall person and a short person. If you don't allow the tall person to look down on the short person, do you have to make people bend down or even kneel to look at the short person at eye level to achieve equality? Under the analogy between ordinary people, this statement is already ridiculous. What is the gap between immortal cultivators and mortals in the article? Do we have to make some zzzq in this real world? Give the protagonist a radiance of greatness and righteousness? It's okay for you to do it, but please put your own thoughts into it!

I've finished the book, but I feel like there's a sense of disconnection between each chapter. I feel like the previous chapter hasn't been finished yet, and the next chapter has started again, and the following chapters have filled in what was missing from the previous ones, so it's not very coherent 🙂

It's a bit strange, why can't I write a way of writing with good qualifications + cheats? Why do I always like to write some useless + cheats?

This subject matter is really good, the logic and writing are so awesome, I finally don't have to read the kind of stuff about taking medicine to defeat monsters and leveling up, or the stuff about practicing Qi to help the foundation, only cultivating mana, not Taoism, and not knowing the number of days.

The writing is still a bit poor, the plot setting is a bit too confusing, and a large part of the plot is easily skipped, giving people an inexplicable feeling. For example, on the way to attend the conference, it was suddenly mentioned in one stroke. Isn't it the inheritance of the brothers? All of a sudden, there was a show

The writing style is a bit poor. The foundation building that has been laid out for dozens of chapters has been mentioned in one stroke. Now I don't see a climax. It's too bland. It's a pity to abandon it if it's tasteless 😅

It just doesn't feel good. I came to see the magical treasures, the formations, and the Four Swords of Zhu Xian. It doesn't feel good at all.

Two very important points are that the protagonist's story is too complicated, and the author's writing is inappropriately detailed. It should be written in detail and not written in detail, and too much ink should be written in one stroke. But overall it's still worth watching.

A piece of advice to quit, ancient style and modern words intertwined back and forth, really bad

A low-level author will only use explanatory text to reflect the causal relationship between characters, while a high-level author will use the dialogue between the characters in the scene to reflect the relationship between the characters.

Advantages Ancient style and good writing style. The story has a beginning and an end, and the characters are rich but not thin. The use of Golden Finger is very restrained, and more emphasis is placed on the inner drive of the characters Disadvantages It is too old-fashioned, with the difficult coincidence plot and causal design in Shushan. Every step has a reason, everything has a destiny. People who like it may like it very much, but people like me who don't like it will find it very annoying. Furthermore, the author doesn't care about the cool points, but cares more about the story structure in his design. He will leave out a lot of the fun parts for you, while exaggerating the unpleasant parts. Of course, this is also a place that some people like and make a record of it so that viewers can use it as they see fit.

It feels like it's either from an outside site or the reincarnation of an old master. To put it bluntly, few newcomers can master this genre and this kind of cultivation system, and few newcomers can write about it.

The first part is okay, but the second part is almost like an ordinary fairy tale, and the variety of magic weapons is getting less and less.

Updates are too slow and I have fallen into a rut lately.

Can it be pure Duobao? The evolution of yin and yang is really a bit disgusting.

I'm not very good at commenting. I just feel that the writing in Hongchendao is not very good, and I no longer have the desire to read it.

Out of nowhere, he went to Jiulun Sect to cause trouble.

In fact, the writing style is not bad, but newcomers should learn from Crane Watching the Moon Over the Pond and try to tell every story well.

The author can only say that you should learn more from the masters Readers are not afraid that you will write carefully and well I am afraid that you will not have ups and downs Internet articles are meant to arouse emotions I guess the author writes quite happily Look at his replies in other comments I guess he doesn't like some of the writing methods of other online articles It's a pity that the author chose the most clichéd writing method Each plot is a deliberately arranged mechanism Yuan The level of horror is comparable to that of jumping off a cliff to achieve peerless martial arts Everything is obtained inexplicably There is no subjective initiative It gives me a feeling that the whole world is giving preferential treatment to the protagonist The writing is also very bland, and the key plot is not bland It looks very strange, and it is impossible to find an answer You are not a farming writer, a Taoist writer, or a daily writer Does it need to be so bland? There is no focus, no climax There is no journey to the immortal road Millions of miles to Wanfa Sect Are you asked to hurry That is to ask you to tell the readers what foundation you are going to build To prepare you to face the competition In the end, it will create an evil spirit and blow the wind That's it? ? It's a bit of experience In addition, I talked about the monkeys later The co-authoring is the perception of the forbidden area plus the monkey fight Admittedly these are enough But it must be detailed and appropriate Forget it, that's it You will know when you find that readers are losing in the future

More to come. I've been asking for leave so frequently recently that I feel like I'm a eunuch.

For an old bookworm like me, this is almost as good as grass jelly. It's very good. Come on, author, I'll give you a vote.

The book is very good, classical cultivation of immortality. The only problem is that there are too few updates.

Picture 344 says that the real king only gave him the white tiger skin, but the picture in front of it says that he has a complete body.

If you don't want to update anymore, you can tell me earlier so that I can delete the book.

Well written, well written, work hard and write well

I politely borrowed the building and recommended the new book "Mystical Powers Begin by Gathering Beasts and Regulating Birds". The young man picked up a pottery pot in the Wahuang Temple, and heavenly beings were reincarnated in a world of immortal cultivation. The Qingyun Dynasty, the nine immortal sects, and demons were rampant. He gathered the beasts to regulate the birds, took nine breaths to subdue the Qi, and began to seek immortality and ask questions. Not the Holy Mother, not brainless, traditional fairy, IQ is online,