Daojun, Start from Penglai Foundation Building

It's really good, I particularly agree with the author's ideas A practitioner who has experienced ups and downs, countless crises, and lived for thousands of years without any regrets, is like an idiot and can't walk when he sees a woman, and is childish and naive, spanking and acting like a monster. What is the difference between this kind of practitioner and a mortal idiot?

The advantages are obvious. The protagonist of this book has a great heart, a deep mind, an online mind, a calm mind and a sharp mind. This is an advantage. The world of immortality is treacherous and treacherous. Otherwise, it would be hard to believe that a second-rate person could achieve anything. The protagonist has been successfully created, and the current supporting roles are also well created. Some of the plot twists are a bit harsh, but it's okay. The author worked hard and needs to be praised. Talking about the shortcomings, the protagonist is a bit drifting with the crowd. Currently, there are no life-or-death enemies, no short-term obstacles, the sect is peaceful, the Eastern Continent is still Penglai's world, and there is no danger in the so-called experience. It's a smooth journey. To put it bluntly, the protagonist has no sense of crisis, and at the same time it's an excessively smooth journey, just like going from kindergarten to elementary school and then to junior high school. It seems simple, and the constant mention of Tao Xin makes it feel hollow. Short-term goals/staged goals/planning by yourself, etc., All involve being content with the situation and going with the flow. Just like shouting slogans, in some places, people's perception is degraded. The author has worked very hard. I hope the author can write this book well and that it will become a high-quality book. First of all, I hope the author will take a good look at the outline, the current travels/Golden Elixir Ceremony/Conflict, etc. There are too many similar excellent works at the starting point, such as the Catalog of the Squid's Destiny/Starting from the High-Grade Golden Elixir, etc., Which is a bit old-fashioned. I hope the author will write about the shining point and personality charm of the protagonist. Otherwise, he is just indifferent, saying neither sad nor happy, and has an extraordinary mind, which is too empty. The current character design of the protagonist is completely based on this kind of noun template, and the character itself is not full enough. You can set up the plot and kill anyone who blocks the protagonist's path of cultivation, regardless of who he is. This is called slaying demons, and anyone who blocks my path is a monster. You can also set up a plot to enrich the protagonist's personality, or simply set up some so-called maps and copies. In the grand setting of the world of immortality, there is so much that can be written. Thirdly, the author does not know much about Buddhism and Taoism. Although the setting of the novel does not need to be rigorous, the current upper, middle and lower realms, as well as the foreseeable nine realms, do not deviate from the scope of the classical cultivation level setting. However, the author has obviously been negligent in this regard. It is recommended to refer to obviously similar settings such as The Catalog of Destiny/The Lord of One World and revise it. It is also recommended that the author use Baidu Encyclopedia to search for Buddhist and Taoist knowledge.

It has been fully subscribed and supported, and now that I have seen the latest version, it is amazing, so I will give an objective evaluation. Let me talk about the conclusion first, it is the best among recent Xianxia novels. It can be seen that the author is a newcomer. The early writing is a bit immature, the plot is not rich enough and the characters are not three-dimensional enough, and the early plot is a bit anticlimactic. But it's still readable. Jin Dan gradually got better after that, with a plot that could support the character's image. After the character's image is fleshed out, the reader can build up such a character portrait in his mind, and then the highlights gradually become denser. At this time, the reader's experience is great. It can be seen that the author grew a lot during this period. The author's writing style is online, and the IQ of the protagonist and supporting characters are also online. There is no mentally retarded plot, especially the fact that there is no mentally retarded plot is really very popular. This book also has some shortcomings, that is, there is only one character in the book, and there are no supporting characters. Both teammates and opponents lack memorable points, resulting in a lack of vitality in the author's world. I hope the author can strengthen the plot description of supporting characters, such as his best friend and the one with the character card.

I have been reading this book basically since the beginning, and it has now reached 350,000 words. Overall, I think it is well written. It's a bit cool but not obtrusive. It's just that the proportion of writing about one's own apprentices has been a bit too much recently. Anyway, I still hope that the author can write well and not be a eunuch. Come on.

If the author insists on writing the plot like this, I suggest you write all the Chunyangs in the Shanhe Tao family to death, and then Jiang Sheng can pretend to be cool. Anyway, those Chunyangs are useless like trash. They are useless except for their big names. It is better to get the box lunch early.

Speechless, how long has this kind of plot been going on? Everyone can come and step on the mountain and river Xuanmen, right? And Dongtian Taoist, which you talk about so much all day long, and other disciples are just decorations, right? No one is seen day by day, and those who make noises are either killed or skinned. I think you might as well call them Wugui Xuanmen and Orphan Taoist.

Is the role of Zhang Qing so baffling? A mid-grade golden elixir that is counterproductive is written as if it is a pig's trotters' enemy. The main character, a high-grade golden elixir, has lost all his character and feels like he is being led around.

The writing of this novel is very good, and the protagonist is well portrayed. It is considered to be a staple among classical fairy tales. There is one thing: the two apprentices that the protagonist accepts are mediocre, they only cause trouble, and they are both a burden. There is no need to think about the fruits that the protagonist takes, they are all prepared for them. In one chapter, the protagonist even said that he wanted his apprentice to reach his level. Those two guys have no strengths and are not talented. Later, they really became Taiyi, and Taiyi was too cheap, which made the other supporting characters look so incompetent. I estimate that Taiyi in the novel will become a loser in the later stages.

Immortals who like to fight in the dark genre can read it. I just finished reading the latest chapter. Well, a friendly reminder. I haven't found the tendency of the heroine to engage in various calculations at the same time. (The protagonist is remembered by others.) The martial arts flavor is stronger than the fairy flavor. It can be regarded as the kind of person who takes action when they disagree. Compared with Long Aotian, the protagonist fortunately does not take the initiative to cause trouble, and his personality is almost the same 😁😁

What is the significance of this paragraph? There are two thousand words of nonsense out of three thousand words!

If I remember correctly, originally only one of Mahayana and Pure Yang could be attained, but now in the Mahayana period one can ascend to Pure Yang again. How to do this?

The introduction is like a golden elixir, and the start is like Tahoe

Too much pen and ink is used on flashy descriptions, which makes it feel a bit watery and empty. I write so many flashy words and I can't understand them. I just feel that it's weird and nothing else. After turning around, I can't remember what I wrote.

Okay, okay, the old routine is here again, and then Mahayana from all sides, evil spirits and geniuses who think highly of themselves, and Mahayana ancestors appear one after another. Finally, the protagonist uses the combined cultivation level to pass five levels and kill six generals to ascend to the throne of justice, shocking the entire world.

I want to know, is this battle won or lost? Why didn't I get any benefits? And after finally integrating into the Mountain and River Realm, does it feel like the Dao Sect's territory has shrunk? People in the Buddhist world occupy one Luzhou, the gods occupy two, and the monsters occupy one. Isn't this nonsense? The Taoist sect used to be like the boss. After a battle, he became the grandson. How can the territory be divided among so many Taoist sects? And why can the God Realm occupy two? From now on, Daozong will have to look at the intentions of the other two parties. In this battle, you might as well just smash them all to pieces. The two sides have lost nothing and directly taken the biggest advantage. Author, can you give me an explanation?

That's not how the supporting characters were written. The author said that everyone hates this person, which shows the success of the creation. In fact, what everyone hates is the unreasonable plot you wrote. Don't you think Zhang Qing's plot is very abrupt? Don't you think this plot is stupid?

Let's talk about what I have written recently. It's like forcing me to write about Ling Yuan and pretending to be a slap in the face. I feel that Ling Yuan is the only one in Penglai. It's really a one-man show. The content is not as full as before.

It's good to read, and I look forward to seeing more updates from the author. The protagonists in many books nowadays are like idiots. There aren't many such indifferent characters anymore.

🐮Ah, the author, after writing more than one million words, his other abilities have not improved. All his skills have improved. A practicing elixir can write three chapters. 👍This level is not only about writing three million words, it is more than enough to write five million words.

Does the author have any meaning in writing this desolate world? Just to show off, you wrote so many times? Has the plot dragged on again? I don't even know what I'm writing

I've raised about 100 chapters. After all, it's not enough to read. I gave you the votes, you know!

If you don't have anything to write, just cut it off. Isn't it disgusting that the whole sect has too many words? Will this sect be able to break through after the competition?

After reading the comment section, I really don't know what I'm anxious about. It's originally a slow-moving article, so it's normal to be a little more watery and explain more, not to mention mentioning the previous things again for readers to figure it out for themselves. After all, if you don't want to watch the water, just one world and one big progress. Is this good-looking? The wilderness world + the mountain and sea world are directly combined, and upgrading to the three realms is just like a joke. He is the most valued seed player above, and he has been sent to work for hundreds of years to cultivate. Do you really think you are playing in the world of Zhu Xian? You can level up by killing monsters, and you can improve your level if you have money and can trade. Regardless of these, how many Xianxia writers can directly compile Taoist scriptures like the author? I personally think that anyone who is interested in writing fairy tales should learn how he writes. When you feel impatient, you should just give up. Although customers are God, people choose books, and books choose people. At least the author did not delete the review. I think the attitude is quite good. If you think water is not good, then you can go to the starting point to find the same type and think about it calmly. At least I think that for Xianxia, ​​there are too many big portions and too little gold. This book can be used as food even if it is not gold. I respect everyone's thoughts, but I hope everyone can calm down first. I really learned a lot from reading the author's book.

I asked for leave the day before yesterday and said that I would update every afternoon from now on, but now there is no update at 7.48Pm. It's only been a day. Are you not going to slap me in the face? Are you even pretending to be fake?

The first place in Jindan and Nascent Soul is both won by the old man. Doesn't it matter if you work together with your own efforts? If Jiang Sheng competes with Jin Dan and Yuanying, can he win? Penglai is such a large sect, but the one with the weapon spirit took the first place. The weapon spirit is not that strong, so what is the meaning of practicing in the sect? Wouldn't it be over if everyone goes to find the weapon spirit to practice in the sect? ? ?

In fact, I have no interest in the sect competition at all, and I will not subscribe.

Doesn't the protagonist also have a Shinto incarnation to save Ku Tianjun? Why don't I write it down?

Cultivation of immortality should be like the protagonist of this book, and his words and deeds should be consistent with his own way.

Those who are truly awesome will probably not participate in the sect competition, similar to Jiang Sheng back then.

Really rubbish update😥😥😥 Ridiculous