The Immortal and Demon of Fate

As the title suggests, this is dedicated to every reader who has the privilege of perusing my work. This novel, to my honest opinion, moved me to tears. This might be a tragic story featuring two male protagonists. If you can persevere and read through more than forty chapters of challenges... I think you all understand to some extent. The main ideas and development of this novel

Dude, I've taken a quick look at your book. The writing style is quite old-fashioned, but I've been reading online novels for over 10 years now, so I really can't get into it. To be honest, I can guess most of the main plot just by looking at the title and flipping through the table of contents. The writing style isn't exactly comedic or lighthearted either.

The author should really think about taking a web novel writing class; this book is so boring.

The very first chapter reveals something: "Carefully selected, already at the Nascent Soul stage." This sentence... Wouldn't it be better to describe it as "Carefully nurtured, already at the Nascent Soul stage"? If it truly is a disciple chosen from a group, the description could be: "Cai Die (I forgot her name) was the most outstanding disciple selected from the sect, her cultivation has…

It's good that the author has ideas, but personally, I feel that the author's writing style and intellectual level don't quite match their thoughts. Many comments suggest the author's rebuttal is meant to encourage readers to read more chapters to understand, but actually, you don't need to read more; the writing style at the very beginning of the first chapter speaks volumes.

I haven't read the novel, but the comments section is quite interesting. Besides those offering advice and social niceties, there are all sorts of suggestions. The author is proud, polite yet stubborn, and his main theme is "I don't respect anyone." Just read it; you'll discover the true essence of the book sooner or later.

To be honest, after taking a look, it's rather awkwardly written, belonging to the style of writing from over a decade ago. Modern readers would find it hard to stomach. Moreover, it's a story with two main characters, and the reason a character is a protagonist is because they possess "uniqueness."

Since you're writing a book, you definitely need to consider the market. Look at how many books on Qidian have this kind of dual male protagonist plot. Just one question: who should the reader identify with? You're using "Chinese Paladin" as an example. First, you need to know when "Chinese Paladin" was created.

The writing style is mediocre, as can be seen from the first chapter. The story should explain later why the Holy Son and the Demon Son are in the human realm. But even after reading four chapters, they still haven't explained whether this narrative pacing is really good. I discovered two more problems after reading Chapter 4.

This is the style of classical fantasy novels, but many people don't read this style anymore. Actually, I don't think there's anything wrong with the writing style, including the paragraphing. However, online novels don't use the paragraphing style of traditional articles. They use short paragraphs of two or three sentences each, which makes it easier for readers to read.