My Mahayana Ancestor

The writing is quite good, but I feel like the protagonist is like an urban dragon king who can be stepped on by anyone. The characters are a bit brainless.

Author, can you write a book with less excitement? Of course, there are elements of comedy, so there is nothing wrong with having more exclamation points. But as the ancients said, too much is too little. This exclamation point can almost bring together ten thousand swords to return to the clan. Just looking at it makes me feel tired.

One thing is actually quite speechless. Why do you, the Patriarch, feel like you are chatting with children when chatting with your disciples? Why do people who can cultivate to the level of building the foundation elixir feel that there is something wrong with their IQ?

You can read the book. Just have some doubts. First, the protagonist, who has the cultivation and magic skills of the Mahayana stage, can't teach the most basic Qi collection. In the foundation stage, he has to hire people from other sects to teach him, and there is no compensation. Second, after experiencing the sect being wiped out, the disciples who saw their fellow disciples die before their eyes were still stupid and heartless, without any change. Third, the golden elixir period of this book actually cannot fly and can only glide. . . .

Chapter 1: Really long-winded 😒

I feel like 300 years is too short, so I should change it to 3000.

If it's really your first time to write a book, you either have a talent or a liberal arts major. You can see it in the first chapter, there are many details, and the main character's character can be roughly figured out in just half a chapter. Isn't this the portrayal and wish of most ordinary people (readers) who come from an ordinary background, value emotions, be filial, and achieve some success through hard work? And I am not an orphan, so I feel very involved. After reading Chapter 88, the early plot was a bit bland and dragging, but when we arrived at the dark shadow creature flying boat, it felt a bit scary and started to get exciting. It is obvious that the author is making progress. At the current level, it is far beyond the studio's novice articles and is able to attract me to subscribe. I saw a book review saying that a lot of people scolded me... I can only say that some people haven't passed the stage of novice writing. It's normal. I used to scold me when I didn't agree with me. The author can understand. In addition, the overall feeling is actually more like martial arts or traditional Xianxia. If there are too many souls, they are not as good as dogs, and the gods can be killed by the evil at will... Of course, each book has its own setting. There is nothing to say. I respect the author's setting. In short, I hope the author will stick to what he wants to write and don't care about some nonsense. It is not easy to achieve this level of writing for the first time.

The plot of Xiaobai's novel makes my head hurt. I can't pretend to be cool and the dialogue is also stiff.

Transformation into gods, there will be gods, horses, and black shadows pretending to be gods and ghosts.

The writing is quite good, keep up the good work, has been collected