The Magical Power That Comes to the World Under One Person

I feel that if it is a spiritual control technique at the level of the Avatar King, the combat power of one person is a bit excessive. It is a level that can freeze a tsunami in an instant.

Holy shit, supernatural powers are so rare that I must support them right away.

Oh, magical power. As long as you write well and write enough, I will keep the three-month ticket for you, okay?

After reading the first three chapters, let's talk about senses, 1. The writing style is not very in line with my senses, that is, there are too many dialogues, too few descriptions, and most of them are useless and repetitive. 2. There is a big deviation between the setting and the actual writing. I don't respect my own setting. The protagonist's behavior can be supplemented by the setting, but I must respect my own setting and not be inconsistent. The protagonist can be innocent, playful, and like a child, but he cannot The performance looks silly to the readers, because he is a time traveler in the setting, and the setting can be extended. For example, college students of our generation are not as mature or insensitive as people who make a living in troubled times, so they will poke fun at cow dung in the countryside because they have never seen it, and they will make jokes about their fellow students. What will happen? But it's impossible to act like an idiot, because the protagonist's vision is different from others. He has learned Western things, he knows the plot, and he lives in our era, so in the first three chapters, it's awkward for him to eagerly absorb Western things. You want to show that he is extremely talented, but in fact it goes against him. He is more like a precocious villager who is still living in the ravines in the 21st century, but he is not. He can be reviewing these early Western sciences, showing himself to be a genius, or he can be hungry for all kinds of metaphysics (because few people are exposed to it now). The front and back are not unified at all, and it does not look like a book after a few paragraphs. Including three chapters where we see a giant ship, it is not huge at all in our opinion. Even if there are runes and formations on it, the protagonist can see a miracle. But simply seeing a giant ship would not make the protagonist behave like this. 3. Go through your books as soon as possible, don't treat them as self-pleasure articles.

The protagonist is okay in the Avatar, but suddenly he is no longer good when alone. If he doesn't practice his martial arts properly, he can't fight with children, but he can't use dirty tricks, and the country doesn't save him. He just loses his soul and doesn't see any action. Even if he is young and can't do big things, he should practice his martial arts well and then get out of the mountain. If you don't ask for anything to change the situation, just kill a few invaders like the Tang Clan. Just playing house there.

The main character is a funny and brainless child, which is really not likable.

My daughter is blind, weak, helpless and pitiful. Jpg

It's so watery that I can't stand it anymore. It's full of nonsense and always describes some insignificant plots. I wish I could drink water and write it down in detail.

I can't hold my breath in the first chapter, the writing is too abstract

The magical power that comes to the world, even if you specialize in one of the four magical powers, it will be a great weapon.

What? You can't see it either? Weak, pitiful and helpless?

If you have expectations for this kind of childhood theme, you can read it if you can bear it But I will leave it here. The author's arrangement is not comprehensive enough, the experience is too little, the writing style is relatively childish, and the plot arrangement is too rigid When traveling through the past as an adult, the first priority is not practicing martial arts, but reading newspapers every day, worrying about this and that I know that when you wrote it, I felt that the protagonist should worry about these things, but are there too many subjective emotions? Doing the protagonist's shit, what else can you do besides wasting time every day? Being able to defeat foreigners can make the protagonist the president? Also, the introduction of the world of Avatar is too blunt, and it all depends on you to find corrections in the comment area, but if you find corrections, it is outside the chapter of your novel In short, seedlings, I don't know if this book is considered seedlings, but the author should be considered seedlings.

Although I really want to support it, the content is indeed a bit difficult to read. It drags on too much. The first twenty chapters are irrelevant.

Adults time travel and become children. Is your brain like that of a child?

I like how you wrote about the Avatar and the emotional lines of various female characters, but part of the plot is too stream-of-consciousness, and it suddenly switches to the next scene without warning. Especially the section about the protagonist obtaining the four elements and swearing an oath with the God of Darkness, the writing was too vague and stream-of-consciousness, with many blank spaces, and I had to figure out the plot myself.

To be honest. The protagonist doesn't look like a college student

You can tell just by reading the chapters, it's too fragmented

Insulting? Why so naive

Don't stop. I didn't really want to pursue it at first, but I loved the youthful but growing flavor of the Toph chapter. Don't stop, subscribe to all, subscribe to all, as long as you keep writing, even if it is a daily sweet text, I will subscribe, don't give up🙀

Did you really send it? Brother. It was a little resurrected in February. Don't give up

It's over, the author was knocked down by the work, and this book is also very cool 😭

No more updates? There are only a few people who write about supernatural powers😭

I didn't pay much attention to it before, but where did I find Yue's mother's name? Pure curiosity

Author, do you still update? There are only a few people who write about supernatural powers, and yours is very good.

How did the protagonist's character change? I was reading a comic book called Rainbow Cat and Blue Rabbit in a bookstore. I only had three yuan to spare. The character was like a junior high school student. He joined the Trinity School and grew up in ignorance. After a while, I was not familiar with a person, but I was familiar with the supernatural power. Without any comparison, I knew that I was cheating. I traveled to another world again, and I accepted it happily, like an old fritter.