A Family Cultivates Immortality, and All Clans Become Evergreen

The protagonist's name appears too much. To borrow the words of my former Chinese teacher: no matter how beautiful and frequently you use the words, if he appears more than 4 times in your 500 words, he is a piece of shit.

I haven't jumped in yet, so I read the introduction and will give you my personal opinion, which is for reference only. According to the introduction, the Earth Newcomer Village has not yet appeared, but he is just a student who has never set foot in the society. So after time travel, he will be able to get into the Yuanying boss without a lot of intrigues and intrigues. After hundreds of years, he has become a Yuanying boss. He has a sophisticated way of dealing with family sects and women. So he will be reborn after becoming a Yuanying boss. It's difficult to write when I'm starting to write, and the plot is difficult to set up. If I write about the characters simply, I'd like to think of a twenty-year-old who has been around for hundreds of years. It's so damn childish. The writing is sophisticated, far-reaching, and too difficult. Unless the author is a genius, he won't have the writing power, so it's best for new writers not to touch this idea.

Why does the heroine have the full surname Zhou? ? Just wait for the purchase 😰

Alas, a family novel is written about emotional drama, but the emotional drama is still so rough. A stallion is not like a stallion, and a harem is not like a harem. This. . . . .

They are thousands of years old monsters, why are they still so childish?

Why did you write a heroine with quadruplets?

The author makes a suggestion, it is best not to write about relationships. It is not suitable for you at all, and the subject matter is not suitable. To establish a family, you must have children. The best way is to marry more and have more children, because not every child has spiritual roots. Secondly, your emotional scenes are written like a single person. Whose girl would fall in love with you just because you saved your life? Still four sisters. How long have we been together? Who else would feel like a family just because a few girls did something for you? Love brain? At best, it's just a matter of sex. This is actually nothing. The woman is a mortal, at least for now. In the disorderly world of bandits and immortals, the protagonist is superior to her. It is better to write that the four sisters want to hug the protagonist's thigh tightly for revenge and self-protection, and slowly return to their hearts in the following days.

Come on, the author's writing is good. I really like this genre. As long as the girl is decisive and doesn't ink, I'll book it all. Looking forward to writing a long novel!

Please update more, I can't even stand it.

The protagonist's current cultivation level is still in the city, and he doesn't have thousands of bloodlines. What's the use of spiritual veins?

Aren't they 7 children? Why did it become 4?

It shouldn't be, it's enough to read 100 points

Is he a eunuch? ? A eunuch. I'd rather delete the book. If there is no eunuch, I will wait.

There is no sense of immersion in the description of fighting skills. A flying sword is used to cut with one's hand. Is that a fairy tale? In cultivating immortals, high-level monks take the heads of people thousands of miles away. You, a low-level monk, use flying swords to attack with swordsmanship of tens of meters and hundreds of meters. You are a knight who attacks at close range with your sword and has not yet reached the transition stage of becoming a monk.

Borrowing precious treasures to push the book, "I will clean up the Tibetan Scripture Pavilion at the beginning, and I will complete the incomplete skills." Mortal flow, Gou Dao flow, IQ will not decrease if IQ is online, the protagonist's magical power refers to ancient magic: a wonderful pen creates a dragon, scattering beans to form an army, dividing the ground to form a river, etc. Interested Taoist friends can take a look. If you are bothering me, please contact me. [Asking mortals to recommend each other's authors]