I Built the Council of Light and Shadow

To really improve your writing skills, you need to practice more. First, the character descriptions are not facial expressions, but directly labeled. For example, the rich second generation who pursues excitement, the real impression is that you wrote about her pursuing excitement, and the expression is not good at all. Second, the rhythm is not well designed. For example, when you go to a bar and you clean up a Balrog in the front, the description of the succubus later is unnecessary, and the writing is not good. You just brushed it off, and the writing is boring. Thirdly, I don't know why the members are selected in that way. If you want to save the world, the members, especially in the early stage, must be carefully considered. Just bringing in a few ordinary people would be a waste of resources. Fourth, since it is an organization, institutionalization is inevitable. Writing it in such a scattered manner gives people the feeling of a small fight. This savior is too unprofessional.

To be honest, the writing is too bland. No matter what the content is, I just feel bland after reading it. The clearing of the bar, the beginning of the succubus, etc., The writing feels too bland, especially the bar, which can be regarded as the official beginning, but after reading it, I just feel bland and boring, and nothing can make me feel emotionally. It's even worse than a cool article if it's ugly. I hope the author can think about it carefully when writing next. There is nothing wrong with the development of the plot, it just depends on how it feels when written.

What I like to read most now are the behind-the-scenes salvation stories, in which the protagonist creates or guides extraordinary people to fight against the invasion. Unfortunately, there are too few of them. Many authors like to write about the only way to do it, or about having endless fun in a small world. The behind-the-scenes savior stories I am most satisfied with are "The natives of this world are so fierce", "I adapted the world", and "The Glory Throne". The previous book "The Perfect Savior" from Qidian is also very consistent, but it is a pity that it is a eunuch. Others, such as "The Only Savior", "My Salvation Game Comes True", "I Inherited the Ancient Mysterious Organization" and "Building a Salvation Organization from Scratch" are also more suitable, but they are a bit unbearable, so I will keep them for now. So if you see similar novels, you must support them. It's not easy 🤭

The setting and plot are great, but it feels bland because it doesn't describe the battle scene, the language expression ability is limited, and the members are too ordinary. I know that I want to have more words, so I will keep it on the shelves until it explodes. If it doesn't keep people watching until now, there will be no future. I look forward to it.

I really can't stand the author. Can you please give me some advice? A bunch of typos, a bunch of bad sentences, damn. Forget about your plot line. After all, this thing also depends on writing skills and time to practice. However, you should at least pay attention to the words and sentences so that there are not so many problems, okay? It doesn't matter if the words are wrong, but there are still a lot of bad sentences. Damn, sometimes I don't even know what you are writing. Seeing that everyone there was confused, I had to stop and think for a while. What would this plot look like normally? What went wrong? Then he relied on brain supplements to correct the connection. If I didn't think your subject matter is quite novel, to be honest, I really couldn't stand it and left long ago after seeing this writing style.

The subject matter is okay, but the writing style can only speak. . . . . Shi This is a fair evaluation

You've already been reborn, and you still have so much to say when you're a little succubus. And your second route after rebirth is obviously to use the parliament to gather capable humans to fight against the darkness. Then it's obvious that you have to pull up your b. You can kill a passerby for half a day. The writing method of novice is suitable for those who have just entered the power.

Although the power is gradually increasing, you must know that the protagonist is in control, and darkness will soon cover the earth. As a reader, this seems to have no sense of urgency at all, and all I can think of is the showmanship of the mastermind behind the scenes. Tease, mortal. I think we should strengthen the display of saints in front of people and speed up the pace of progress. This is not a TV series, and it doesn't take that long to write a plot.

. The plot of the protagonist is in a wrong direction. It doesn't matter that you, a commander, go to the front line to fight in person. Then why do you need to create an organization? According to the introduction of the book, the parliament is the main line of the story.

Parliament of Light and Shadow? Divine Kara connects us!