I Built the Council of Light and Shadow

I really need to practice my writing more. First, the character descriptions are no longer stereotypical, but rather directly labeled. For example, the rich second-generation who seeks thrills—the real impression is that you wrote that she seeks thrills, but the expression is completely flawed. Secondly, the pacing is poorly designed.

To be honest, the writing is too bland. Regardless of the content, everything felt flat to me. The cleanup at the bar, the beginning of the succubus story, etc., All felt too bland. Especially the bar scene, which should have been the official start, felt only flat and uninteresting, failing to stir any emotion in me. To put it bluntly, it's even worse than a fast-paced, exciting novel.

What I enjoy reading most now are stories about saving the world from behind the scenes, where the protagonist creates or guides extraordinary beings to fight against invasion. Unfortunately, there are too few that fit this description. Many authors prefer to write about being the only one who has the law, or about endless fun in a small world.

The setting and plot are great, but it feels bland due to the lack of vivid battle scenes, limited language skills, and overly ordinary characters. It seems they're aiming for a high word count, saving it for a big release. If they can't keep readers engaged before then, there won't be a future. Looking forward to it.

I really can't stand the author, can you please pay more attention? A bunch of typos, a bunch of grammatically incorrect sentences, damn it. It's one thing if your plot is formulaic, after all, writing requires skill and time to practice. But at least pay attention to your words and sentences and don't make so many mistakes, okay?

The subject matter is alright, but the writing style is... Well... This is a fair assessment.

Even after being reborn, you still talk so much about beating up a nobody succubus. And your second path after rebirth is clearly about using the council to gather capable humans to fight against the darkness. So it's obvious you need to build up your bravado. You ramble on and on about killing a random passerby. This is written in a beginner's style, suitable for those new to the game.

While the power dynamics are supposed to unfold gradually, it's important to remember that the protagonist is practically invincible, and darkness is about to engulf the Earth. As a reader, this feels utterly urgency; all I can imagine is the mastermind showing off behind the scenes. It's a mockery of mortals.

The main character's storyline has gone astray. What's the point of a commander personally fighting on the front lines? What's the point of creating an organization then? According to the book's synopsis, the council is the main focus of the story.

The Council of Light and Shadow? The sacred Kara connects us!