Magic Mist Rain

After reading more than a dozen chapters, the author's writing is passable, and all the details are included, but it does lack skills. If the following chapters are also of this level, it should be impossible to achieve results. Reading the author's speech in the book review area, I feel that there is a problem with the mentality. A little suggestion, since you have written a book and posted it on a public platform, you must have a goal. Whether it is xx recommendation votes or it will be raised to xx, when it is time to ask for votes, when it is time to become more popular, you must have a goal! Don't excuse yourself with words such as "I just write and play slowly", "I don't plan to make money", "It's just a hobby and I'm happy". The result of fooling yourself will be that your enthusiasm dissipates and you will not get the sense of accomplishment of developing your hobby. There is no person in this world who can achieve great things just by relying on love. Without feedback, the so-called development of hobbies is just an excuse to waste time. Ask yourself, you have written eighty chapters, and only a few people can read them. Thinking about the time you spent, do you really feel happy?

The plot has been too watery recently. It feels like there are two books before and after it was released, and the style and subject matter have changed. In the early stage, he was already killing people in two realms, but now he has become a little Karami after entering school. The academy's writing is so stupid that it makes the career system redundant and completely meaningless. I originally thought it was a cool article in the style of Lao Mao, but hey!

The more I look at it, the better it tastes, not bad

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It looks okay, but there is nothing new. Whether it is the setting or the plot, it is just normal and there is no sense of expectation. I have read too many novels, and the threshold has become high. The setting is not attractive, and there is no suspense in the early stage. After a few chapters, I can't watch it anymore.

When I saw the archer profession at the beginning, I immediately didn't want to read anymore. What I wanted to see were ghosts, spells, and imagination that transcended the world. This archer profession started out, and I was really unimpressed. The title of the novel was really stupid.

The author is an old author who hasn't written online articles for many years. The routines of online articles from more than ten years ago are still used.

I have ever seen the meanest protagonist. Other protagonists can only talk to themselves one or two times. This protagonist is completely indifferent. He talks about everything, talks about everything, does everything, is fearless, and has absolutely no caution that a time traveler should have.

Will the protagonist's character still be that of a mother-in-law? If you want to save someone, you have to find some reason. I think your protagonist must at least be free. If you have a grudge against others, you can kill them. If you are kind to others, you can save them. If you just do whatever you want, then it's over. If it's not to stop doing what you don't want to do and to be able to do what you want to do, then what do you need the strength for? Every time someone takes action, someone has to emphasize the morals and bottom line. It gives the impression that these morals and bottom lines are not part of the protagonist at all, but a chain tied around his neck. It is not what he wants to do, but what he has to do. If you have to find a reason for everything, it will look very frustrating.

You can tell that the writing is not good in the first three sentences of the introduction, and at the end, he goes out of his way to brag about himself. If you have the ability, don't delete this comment. It depends on when you cut it 😁

The title of the book should be the talent name of the protagonist, and his occupation is archer. The descriptions are okay, but the transitions are really stiff, like separate small copies. The progress is very slow, and not many people are watching it. I feel that the author will not live to finish it. The first main goal at the beginning was to enter the Academy, but it turned out that it was already on the shelves and I hadn't even entered the capital yet. The author said that he wanted to tell the story from the perspective of the protagonist, but the protagonist didn't know anything, so he had to rely on others to tell the protagonist, and the readers would know. What does it feel like? I don't know, what is that? Have no idea. Those who were impatient ran away.

It looked okay from the beginning, but in the exam, the intelligence was forced to feed the si. The character in the front was low-key and close-minded when killing villagers. Let's look at the character design in the exam. Does it correspond to the previous one?

It took Shen Nong ten years to read it. This book has the potential to be a big hit. If it is intact, it should be seen in the top ten.

I don't know anything about bows and arrows, but I have seen a video of a Danish painter playing with bows and arrows on the Internet before. He can shoot standing, running, jumping, riding, shooting left and right, shooting arrows in a row, shooting at close range, catching arrows with his bare hands, and all kinds of fancy ways. The performance of the marksman in the TV series is, at most, to hit the enemy's target with an arrow and hit the bull's eye. And this guy can hold a bow in one hand, an arrow in the other, and open his hands in a cross shape. Then he asked his assistant to shoot arrows at him from behind. While the assistant was shooting, he quickly turned around and opened his bow to shoot down the arrows shot from behind... I remember that the video also mentioned a lot of precautions for bows and arrows in actual combat. Among them, it was mentioned that the common method of carrying a quiver on the back in TV dramas is not suitable for actual combat. Hanging it on the waist is the way to quickly take arrows and shoot...

I don't even know what to say. You said this book is well written, and the title makes people feel a bit... Like being beaten with a stick and given a sweet date. The plot is okay but sometimes it feels like a noob But you said that the writing is not good, the subject matter is okay, and the story is barely ok Especially compared with the bad books that are all over the street now, this book is set off by peers, and it looks particularly good Harm

Have you ever considered moving the Age of Discovery into space? Similar to the setting of the magic ship in dnd. Human beings used the power of science and magic to build floating ships, breaking away from the shackles of gravity and sailing to the star sea. Recommended animated movie "Xingyin Island"! That's the subject. After sailing to the star sea, humans encountered other intelligent races: elves and orcs. Many humans have also transformed into dwarves and halflings due to their long-term reproduction in an environment different from the earth. The optic nerves of a very small number of people are also alienated due to the influence of star power: they can see the flow of star power. This alienation is of great help to navigation. People who have this alienation are called "navigators". Being able to hire a navigator is every captain's dream. The orcs' navigation technology is relatively backward and they can only sail around the stars. The navigation skills of elves are extremely superb. They have special technology that can artificially cultivate star stones, but the speed is very slow. The keels of the elven airships are all made of star stones, and some even have entire bodies made of star stones. Because the floating ships are made of star stones, they are extremely sensitive to star power. The elves' floating ships can sail at extremely high speeds without even relying on star streams, and their navigation systems are also extremely accurate. When humans sailed among the stars, they discovered that the source of magic power comes from the "star power" emitted by the stars. And some people awakened some "superpowers" after sailing among the stars for a long time and bathing in star power. High-concentration star power will solidify into star stones. This material has a wide range of uses: 1. Star stones with low purity are generally used to power magic instruments. 2. High-purity star stones will be used to make the core of magic instruments. The mage draws a magic circle to constrain the flow of star power in the magic circle. Different flow methods of star power will produce different effects. The mage can interfere with the flow of star power to a certain extent through his own mental power and thus affect the effect of the spell. This is the principle of magic. After the great development of human science and technology, mages have become less popular. After all, learning magic requires magic affinity. If you don't have magic talent, you won't be able to mobilize star power to perform magic. But in some fields, the role of mages is still irreplaceable. Technology doesn't have many barriers to learning. As long as your brain is not too stupid, you can learn a little bit. After humans set foot on the Star Sea, they found that their physical bodies were very fragile in the harsh environment of the Star Sea. Mages and technicians teamed up to develop "armor" powered by star stones to enhance the human body. The armor needs to follow the human body to complete various complex movements, so it is not operated through a mechanical structure. The mechanical results cannot complete such fine operations, so people want to control the armor through star power. After all, star power can achieve various complex effects through magic, and it is not a big problem to use it to transmit signals to operate the armor. The point is that ordinary people can barely influence Star Power. But a long time ago, mages discovered that after implanting star stones into the human body so that the star stones are in direct contact with flesh and blood, the person's mental activities can affect the star power activities in the star stones (this influence is two-way). Some mages have enhanced their spellcasting ability by implanting star stones. This move can indeed enhance the magician's spellcasting ability, but it will also bring huge mental pressure (after all, the influence of star stones and spirit is two-way), and many mages have burned out their brains and become idiots. Inspired by this, the technician worked with the mage to install a reading array on the armor that could read the changes in the star power in the star stone, so that the driver could roughly drive the armor through his mind. With the help of some uncomplicated mechanical structures, humans were finally able to drive the armor. But this also brings problems. If you want to control the armor flexibly and accurately, you can't do it with just one or two reading arrays. The action signal provided by each star stone node implanted in the body is limited, so if you want to control the armor accurately, you need to install multiple reading arrays, and the driver also needs to implant multiple star stones. But just implanting a star stone is already a burden on people's spirit. When driving armor, you have to operate it by affecting the star stone, which puts even greater pressure on the spirit. Implanting one star stone is already the limit for ordinary people. Those who can implant multiple star stones are all talented people who are different from ordinary people. There are many pilots who cannot bear the huge mental burden in fierce battles and burn out their brains. Star stones are usually implanted along the spine from top to bottom. The armor is roughly divided into the following levels: 1. Skeleton level: Like a skeleton, it can only support the limbs and trunk of the human body, improving strength to a certain extent. Implanting a star stone is enough to operate. 2. Warrior level: fully armored, looks like an ancient armored warrior, can barely operate with a star stone implanted. 3. Knight level: Medium armor, shaped like a giant ancient knight, with 2 star stones implanted for basic operations. 4. Titan level: Large armor, too much mental pressure when driving, unable to be driven by one person, usually driven by two people. 5. Titan class: Giant armor, complex operating system, requires at least 3 people to drive, and the driver is responsible for different systems. 6. Golem class: The output is extremely high, and the relative mental pressure is also extremely high. In order to share the mental pressure, the Golem class will be equipped with a "buffer": that is, ordinary people will be connected to share the mental pressure, while the driver can concentrate on operating the armor. The huge mental pressure will burn out the "buffer"'s brain in a short period of time. In order to continue fighting, the "buffer" will be replaced batch by batch. Some navigators also discovered "star streams": star forces gathering among the stars, just like ocean currents in the earth's oceans. Relying on the star flow, the speed of the floating ship will be greatly increased. There are even madmen who are not satisfied with driving on the surface of the star stream. They drive floating ships to dive into the star stream to obtain faster speeds. But this approach is no different from risking one's life. Although diving into the star stream can achieve extremely fast speeds, the strong turbulence deep in the star stream can easily tear the hull apart; if it encounters turbulence, the ship will be taken to a random star field; there are also giant void creatures inhabiting the deep star stream. If they have an appetite for floating ships, they are basically doomed. While exploring the Star Sea, people formed different organizations. Among them, the ones with greater influence are: Navigation Association: Anyone who makes a living among the stars is basically a member of the Navigation Association. The association has affiliated organizations such as the Sailors Association, the Navigators Association, the Captains Association, the Gunners Association, the Maritime Traders Association, the Lighthouse Association, etc. Basically, wherever there is an airport, there will be a sailing association. Members can obtain various information here: recruitment, rewards, current affairs, commodity prices, etc.; They can rent the association's rooms at low prices; they can entrust the association to buy and sell commodities, etc. These books cover all aspects of seafarers' lives. The logo is a sail and an anchor The most important one is the Lighthouse Association. The lighthouse uses star stones as fuel to release special light to point the direction of the sailing floating ship so that it will not get lost. Lighthouses are usually manned by 1 to 5 keepers, equipped with small boats and various supplies. In addition to the daily maintenance of the lighthouse operation, when receiving a distress signal from a ship in distress, the tower keeper will also sail to the rescue and guide the ship in distress to the lighthouse. Ships can use the supplies stored in the lighthouse for repairs, but they must not use up all the supplies they consume the next time they pass by. Otherwise, they will be blacklisted and notified by the association. At that time, anyone who runs a boat will despise him as a human being and refuse to deal with him. They will be removed from the blacklist only after they have replenished supplies and paid fines. In remote star areas that deviate from the main waterways, there are many unmanned lighthouses, which also store supplies. If an unlucky person in distress is lucky enough to find an unmanned lighthouse and use the supplies to escape, no matter how far the lighthouse is from the port where he set sail, he will sail here again to provide supplies. I hope the next unlucky person in danger can encounter the lighthouse and use the supplies inside to escape. Endless Sea Chart: An artifact whose origin no one knows. No matter where you are in the galaxy, it provides a detailed map of the nearby area. It seems that the chart data of the entire universe is stored in it. Royal Society: A scientific and magic research and teaching institution funded by the royal family. Among them are masters in various fields. Their research results have greatly promoted the development of human civilization. The Society is also an educational institution. After strict selection, geniuses from all over the empire will enter the Royal Society to study. However, even the funds approved by the royal family are barely used for the research of the masters, and there is no extra funds for education. Therefore, if you want to study in the Royal Society, you must not only be a genius, but also have money. After all, how can the knowledge taught by the masters be cheap? The Royal Society has multiple branches: the Royal Scientific and Technical Society, the Royal Magical Society, the Royal Society of Medicine, the Royal Society of Biology, etc., And will add or remove branches when necessary. The Royal Society has branches in every major city in the Empire, with its headquarters on Earth. The Royal Society does not exclude cooperation with outside parties, but the cooperation standards are extremely demanding. The logo is a crown and a book Royal Bank: a bank funded by the government and the royal family. The logo is a crown and gold coins Pirate Association: Yes, pirates also have organizations. You know, pirates, people on the fringes of society who are yelled at by everyone, need to join a group to keep warm. It is not difficult to understand that pirates will also have their own organizations. The Pirates Association is basically a degraded sailing association, but in some aspects it has special features due to the special status of its members: 1. The location of the Pirates Association is generally very secretive. After all, most pirates carry bounties on their backs. If the location of the association is not secretive enough, the risk of being blamed is greatly increased. The headquarters of the Pirate Association is said to be located in a floating ship cemetery deep in a certain star stream. It is impossible to reach it without the guidance of a sea chart. 2. Use secret words extensively. The logo is the man-eating shark Black Gold Trading Company: A chamber of commerce that specializes in illegal business. Most of the pirates' stolen goods are entrusted to the Black Gold Trading Company. Although the Black Gold Trading Company's commission is high, the most important thing is safety. It is said that behind the success of the Black Gold Trading Company, there is the secret support of the empire, the church, the royal family, and the navigation association. The logo is a black gold coin United Society: With the development of human society, the demand for scientific and technical talents in all walks of life is increasing, but the number of talents is far from enough. Either you are looking for technical talents yourself, but when you, as a boss, come to your door, you will find that most of the so-called technical talents are not worthy of the name, and the knowledge they possess is incomplete and cannot be put into production immediately. Or you can only turn to the Royal Society for help. The Royal Society looks down on ordinary corporate organizations, and it is not that difficult to cooperate with them. However, the demand for technical magic talents by various business organizations does exist. In this dilemma, various business organizations have united to establish their own society "United Society" to cultivate their own technical magic talents. The level of the United Society is not as high as that of the Royal Society, but it is more valuable because of its large quantity. The United Society has very low standards for recruiting students, and tuition fees are also very low. For some poor students, there is no tuition fee. You only need to sign an employment contract called a "sale contract" with them: you are guaranteed to work in a company designated by the society after graduation and use your own salary to repay the tuition. However, the repayment fees required by this contract may be a large amount of money, so that many people can pay off the money after working for many years. People from the Royal Society laugh at the people from the United Society as "people's sciences", but it has to be said that these "people's sciences" do meet the society's demand for scientific and magic talents to a large extent. Unlike the Royal Society, which only has branches in important cities, the United Society basically covers medium-sized and above towns in the empire. The headquarters of the United Society is located in the industrialized Mars. The logo is a magnifying glass. Church: After humans stepped into the sea of ​​stars, they became more and more aware of their own insignificance and powerlessness. People in urgent need of spiritual comfort naturally found the church, and the power of the church expanded rapidly after humans sailed to the star sea. Human prayers can also affect star power to a certain extent, causing various effects. This technology is called a miracle by the church. Its working principle is different from that of magic. Miracles produce effects by causing the resonance of star power. There are not so many types of miracles compared to magic, but everyone can cause the resonance of star power. However, the magnitude of the resonance of star power caused by most people is too small to trigger miracles. However, the resonance of star power can be superimposed. As long as there are enough people, the weak resonance of star power can trigger huge miracles. But this requires guidance. Star power resonance can not only be superimposed, but also offset. Without the guidance of clergy, even if there are many people praying, most of the star power resonances will cancel each other out and cannot be used to trigger miracles. The church believes that the sea of ​​stars has a soul, and star power is a manifestation of the soul of the sea of ​​stars. Human beings can perform miracles because their own souls resonate with the souls of the sea of ​​stars. The mage believes that star power is just a simple energy that interferes with the spiritual power of living things to a certain extent. The church headquarters is located in the Himalayas of Earth. Countless believers want to worship in the Himalayas. Unfortunately, there are too many people, and most people can only draw lots layer by layer. In the end, believers will gather in the sky of the moon and look at the earth, waiting for the church to draw lots to decide who is eligible to set foot on the Himalayas. After completing the pilgrimage, these lucky people will get a pendant embedded with Himalayan stones to prove their piety. This pendant will most likely be regarded as a family heirloom or even a sacred object enshrined in the pilgrim's local church. Most believers will never be able to draw this lot in their lifetime. All believers will be moved to tears when they set foot on the lunar airport, so this airport is also called the Port of Tears. Because it is too difficult to qualify for a pilgrimage to the Himalayas, most believers turn to the next best thing. When they come to the Port of Tears and look at the Himalayas, their pilgrimage is considered completed. They will get a thumb-sized copper bottle containing lunar soil, proving that they have made a pilgrimage to the moon and look at the earth. In order to spread the doctrine, several cities cooperated with sailing associations to send on-board chaplains. In addition to providing spiritual support and guiding miracles, these priests also know some medical skills and navigation knowledge, which can be of great use in emergencies. Even the Pirate Guild will cooperate with the Black Priest. Black priests only focus on the effects of performing miracles, but do not pay attention to praying for the believers who participate in performing miracles. They often try their best to enhance the star power resonance effect in order to enhance the effect of miracles, causing the souls of believers who participate in performing miracles to be shocked or even die directly. The emblem is the eagle in the sky The Imperial Navy: the main military force of the empire The emblem is the wolf pack among the stars The Imperial Police: the imperial security force The emblem is the hound The Imperial Bureau of Investigation: the imperial intelligence agency The emblem is the owl The Royal Shadow Guard: the royal intelligence assassination agency The emblem is the crow The Emperor House Guards: Elite troops directly under the royal family The logo is the negative sun lion Imperial local troops: The military force stationed in the place The logo is the giant bear Humanity expanded rapidly after gaining the ability to travel among the stars. However, with the expansion of power, humans formed different forces to attack each other. After a hundred years of "unification war", the forces from the earth were unified and established the Galactic Empire.

It's okay, but I still want to complain. Just lay the groundwork, instead of letting others get the protagonist's second career. This directly makes me feel that the early stage is no longer fun. Let's talk about the protagonist's other abilities first, the details of a character in the rain, and the other clairvoyance and wind ear. Then the question arises. You need another profession to develop your early-stage combat power, but other people also have the necessities of your early-stage profession. Do you think you can write the distance between the two? Looking at your setting, you only need to defeat four gargoyles to get a job. Isn't this a job that can be ruined on the street, or an ability that can be kept in captivity by big forces? You directly prevent the protagonist from showing any attractive points in the early stage. To be honest, it depends on the idea of ​​rain. I think it is really awesome if you are in a city or spy game or war, because everyone is involved in the protagonist. In my opinion, the protagonist must have a unique point. The easiest way to bring out this unique point is ability. As for you, the author, you ruined the protagonist's most attractive second career in the early stage. This is what I feel is the biggest failure in reading novels in the past few years. Not to mention how you will develop this setting later, as well as local capabilities. These are your necessary tasks to control the distance and write well. However, if you do not write well, your novel will directly collapse in combat power and the entire book will collapse. Now I don't have any desire to read this novel. If the first ten pictures you wrote were good, I would definitely read it. But these first ten pictures are just the ten standardized pictures of the novel, and they are a bit weak. They don't surprise me at all. I can already predict how you will write in the future. The plot is written in a way that is obvious at first glance. The protagonist's second career is rampant. The protagonist's original ability is weak in the early stage, and the protagonist's ideas can be thought of by normal people. To sum up, there is no excitement in the early stage, and there are no surprises. If you say how good it is, it can only be regarded as roughage, edible but no vegetables. You didn't show it in the early previews how good it is in the middle and late stages. When I play LoL, others have to show where the hero's strength curve is. How does your novel show it?

The plot development and transitions are too blunt, many things happen inexplicably, and the power system is a hodgepodge of Western fantasy games...😰

After reading more than 40 chapters, I feel nothing, just average, the writing is average, the plot setting is average, there is no poisonous point and it is not interesting. It is a very ordinary white text, just like boiled tap water. It is a pity to discard it if it is tasteless. The author said that it will take off later. How many chapters will it be?

When I first discovered The Eunuch, I was most upset. I also watched it and it was pretty good. . Tomorrow's drug guide lives up to its reputation. . .