Underworld Retrograde

I felt that the writing was very complicated. The generals in it were written in a pretentious way. The unparalleled generals rush in and out, and then it's too late to finish. There's too much inner drama. Huo Qubing felt that the writing was too pretentious. In ancient times, there were several military generals who could achieve the feat of sealing the wolf to Juxu. He led more than 10,000 cavalry and marched for more than a thousand miles, from the border of the Han Dynasty through the entire Hexi Corridor, and then turned back all the way. He directly made an emergency landing on King Hunxie and King Xiutu, and captured more than 30,000 enemy soldiers. Would he be such a pretentious young general? Arrogant lion is a better description of him

The plot is quite creative and well-written, but the coherence is a bit off and it almost doesn't feel enjoyable.

It's been a long time since I've seen such wonderful work.

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When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates. So, don't stop ah... Update update update

I feel that the author is obviously not good at writing emotional dramas, yet he still insists on challenging the difficult level. He is a straight man, has multiple heroines, and is a yandere. And when writing emotional scenes, the author always forgets the plot setting and writes it as urban writing, which leads to various bugs. If nothing else, why is it that with the protagonist's physical strength and recovery ability, his lips can be bitten during a kiss, and he can't recover for a whole day? In addition, it's the end of the supernatural war. The world view in the plot should not be monogamous. It was mentioned in the previous article that there are extraordinary people who have multiple women. As a result, the protagonist and the doll established a relationship, and the other one was heartbroken. There were still people criticizing the doll behind his back, which was simply inexplicable.

Witness the Prime Minister, imitate the Prime Minister, become the Prime Minister, surpass the Prime Minister

After reading the protagonist's character and plot, I always feel that the author is a female author

I don't think you need to look for other skills to practice the Vientiane Mask ability. If you increase your physical fitness, it will not only be able to better carry the hero's power and even increase the hero's ability when the ability is activated, but there will be no shortcomings even when the ability is not activated. Ps: In fact, I just like the meaty and output! After all, who can say no to a hunk?

Can the author write less of the so-called "high-intensity plots"? You can't write well, and the protagonist looks like a two-parter. Moreover, if you write so many female characters troubled by curses and then let the protagonist be their "one and only", then how can you still be impotent?

I just started watching it, and I have a question for you guys, is the main character a stomach ache?

Have you ever been a psyker? Some things are scribbled and taken for granted.

Cute little girl senior

First of all, I want to say so much because I hope to get better and better The writing of the Wuxiguo section is really poor. The emotional handling is pure and simple. The more I watch the male protagonist, the more I don't want to watch it. The author's fighting is probably what the author is better at. The section about usurping the sky and cage does not reflect the excitement at all. What about He Lan? Those with older skills were not as powerful as those with explosives. In the end, they had to put the cheese there so that the male protagonist could block the knife. I was about to vomit, but the cheese was rescued, and I felt guilty again. I fell in love with it, so I forced the male protagonist to get hurt, and wrote Cheese as a jealous woman who is useless and has no business. The setting of the fruitless fruit is just to create a harem backup. All kinds of forced openings, originally it was fine, but I had to force the plot to unfold, leaving the male protagonist completely disabled. After the plot unfolds, I can add some emotions... Nothing With this kind of strength, you don't need to have a harem, you have to have a nondescript straight man, and the transition is too poor. The last book had no problems with the infinite text. This book is not an infinite text, but it was written as an infinite text. The sense of fragmentation is too strong, and the details are not well controlled. It feels like this is the first book...

The mask setting was quite nice at the beginning, but it turned out that the roles of the several masks overlapped too much. The protagonists' second and third awakening abilities were too poor compared to the masks. The label said there were multiple female protagonists, but it turned out to be a Japanese male protagonist, and there were multiple female protagonists, and there was no sense of lightning protection.

The unfortunate but optimistic young man

Recently, Ye Han's plot is too cliche. The character design of Ye Han is difficult to describe, and the plot is dragging out in a mess.

It's okay to write about love, but don't write about the Japanese type of impotence, which is more disgusting than a knife.

After reading nearly 200 chapters, I feel that the male protagonist is Japanese Yang Wei

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I have a little question, does this book have multiple female protagonists? Also, the description of the female characters is a bit, well, unsatisfactory (personal opinion). A piece of cheese makes the protagonist happy, but he also has 0 experience and is still shy. The second is the doll, because no one is afraid of her. Except for the protagonist, she will support the protagonist in various ways, and her thoughts are also in the direction of Sesu. Third, the little mad king, because the curse will not be remembered by others or something, other than the protagonist, he makes the protagonist stronger (do you think the protagonist becomes stronger to be worthy of him?)

It's becoming more and more formulaic. There aren't many words to begin with. The whole article is a psychological description of this and that. Don't you feel that the more you write, the more formulaic it becomes? Putting aside these sighs and sighs, do your ten chapters have the plot of someone else's chapter?

I have read more than 300 chapters now There are a few issues that I really feel uncomfortable with First of all, the protagonist gives people a feeling of wanting and wanting. Nothing is perfect. When he went on a mission with the team, he blamed himself if a teammate died, especially when he was undercover and came back. When he was getting things at the headquarters, oh, it was great to be undercover, but after he came back, oh, I killed my teammate. This may be to help the protagonist grow, but he can't blame himself all the time. Insufficient strength is a lie. Why can't he understand that he is not strong enough and blames himself until death? Because there will still be death. I understand the desire to protect everyone, but to be honest, it's not as good as Li Ba Then the protagonist is always pushed away, that is, it is not the protagonist who drives the development of the plot, but the development of the plot that drives the protagonist forward. Although he has changed his predetermined destiny many times, it still gives people the feeling that he is enveloped by a greater destiny Finally, it is an emotional scene. I understand that the protagonist may be thinking that the forbidden area is unfair and why he should live at home, and he cannot explain the emotional things clearly and wants to escape. OK, it is understandable but It was written with the feeling that everyone knows that she likes the protagonist, and then the protagonist PUAs herself and wonders why she can't like herself. Please, author, you are also married. Is it true that you can't tell whether the other person likes you, or are you pretending to be stupid on purpose. In reality, a girl often acts coquettishly towards you, wants to hug you, and behaves in a relatively intimate manner. Even an emotional idiot would know that she is interested in you, not to mention that there is a sister who is an experienced driver to give guidance. Emotional scenes are really a bit difficult to comment on

Looking at the posture, if Overlord is a spearman and Huo Qubing is a cavalry, then there will be archers, wizards, assassins, mad warriors, swordsmen, and even derived from them, shield guards, swordsmen, counselors, gunners, axemen, animal trainers, healers, musicians, dancers, craftsmen, strongmen, and other historical figures with various characteristics.

Well... Li Yunyan

The traditional righteous good-guy protagonist is still viable, but I prefer a good-guy protagonist with a little selfish desires and evil intentions. It feels more immersive. . Overall it's quite watchable. Personally, I prefer light harem stories. It would be best if there are a few beauties and some crimson colors to neutralize the tiredness of killing.

Why do I say this name looks so familiar? It turns out to be your boy.

Finally, there is a normal official version. The official version of this book is really comfortable to read.

I just read a hundred or two chapters. The plot is pretty good and very innovative, but the emotional drama is too explosive 😡 and there are too many villains written. What kind of twisted love is this?