Clan Cultivation: Building a Foundation from the Start

Xuanjian Immortal Clan, go see how others write it!

This book title is incredibly tacky! You can find tons of titles like this on Qidian (a Chinese online literature platform), they're all so similar and have absolutely no appeal. Change it immediately!!!

Just like the previous book, it's a mass-produced, formulaic work. Do you really think you can make money from this?

If Lao Mo doesn't address a few issues, future online novels will likely be copies of Qinglian's work. Firstly, as the male protagonist's level increases, everyone in the world's level increases as well; Mahayana cultivators are everywhere, Dao Ancestors are roaming the streets, and top-tier weapons are flying around 😥.

Couldn't they have chosen a normal book title? This kind of title gives off the vibe of a system novel, which seems unreliable!

A family-centric story would be better, and the writing style needs improvement. The Qinglian family has quite a few characters, but the dialogue is too straightforward.

The Immortal Lord of Ten Thousand Beasts is trash too. He hasn't improved at all after writing for so long. His dialogue with people is as robotic and numb. His fighting style is even worse; it's always the same set of moves, just a name change and a copy.

Keep up this perfunctory style, I don't even know if I'll get 300 subscriptions or 30 (><)

You want to publish it after only 100,000 words? How many first-time subscriptions do you want? You're crazy for money!

The descriptions of Qinglian's human realm were relatively acceptable, but the various settings for the spirit realm later on became the beginning of the book's downfall. The concepts of spirit domains and enlightenment were a chaotic mess, and even worse were the time-related immortal artifacts and the various attempts to accelerate growth—it's like the current overuse of hormones.