Douluo Dalu: A Rock from the Start

Uh, come on. You might as well have just written about awakening a sword spirit from the start. Wasn't writing about stones redundant? A spirit struck by lightning gains both lightning and metal attributes; isn't a Railgun or a Barrett better than a sword? You've really mastered the art of deceptive marketing; it seems novel but is actually the same old thing. 😒😒😒

The pace is too fast. It's not that there can't be a female lead, but what is your main conflict? Is it about romance, becoming stronger, or revolution? You're starting to believe in "my fate is in my own hands," and just when things are starting to look promising, you're already obsessed with women. Why don't you just write a harem novel?

Many fanfiction writers have written conspiracy theories, suggesting that Tang San was sent to Douluo Continent by the God of Asura. Even so, have you ever considered his purpose? He simply wanted to pass on the divine position as soon as possible. As long as the requirements were met, he couldn't wait for someone to inherit it. Even if it wasn't Tang San, so what?

The three women from the Spirit Hall are all love-struck. I suggest the protagonist at least find one of them to be love-struck himself. That way he'll have a powerful backer. Also, Dugu Bo can be won over as an antidote. Although your writing is good, having everyone constantly subservient like before is too stifling. At least he should live like a protagonist! 🙂

It's pretty good. Just a little frustrating. The sword spirit can inherit Shura's God King position. Shura's demonic sword is great for killing lowly bastards. And Shura himself seems to want to abandon his godhood and run away. He's shamelessly protective of his own. Enemies are disgusting, but allies are wonderful. Creating a godhood is too slow. And he doesn't have a powerful backer.

So beautiful

😅😅😅😅70% of the female leads in Douluo Continent novels are Qian Renxue, 8% are Ning Rongrong, 5% are Xiao Wu, 5% are Hu Liena, 5% are Bibi Dong, 3% are Zhu Zhuqing, 2% are Na'er, 1% are other female leads, and 1% are original female leads.

Even the protagonist can be coveted. Tang San could too. It feels like we could cause him some trouble. Make his Ghost Shadow Steps, his methods for cultivating spiritual power, and his hidden weapons attract unwanted attention. Let others come to him asking for them or subtly hinting at it. It would be good to annoy him. It's a bit unreasonable that no one coveted him in the original story.

That's too rigid a mindset. The greatest asset of a time traveler isn't knowing the original story, but rather the benefits of the information explosion era. With so many inspirations and paths available across countless worlds, why insist on taking the path of a god?

Add a few more female leads, such as Ning Rongrong, Ye Lengleng, Hu Liena, and Shui Bing'er, all of whom have the potential to become gods. Leaving aside immortal herbs, we could actually intercept resources from Douluo Dalu II in advance, such as the Life Gold, Xuanbing Marrow, and Tianmeng Ice Silkworm. Many people complain about the protagonist's love-obsessed nature in Douluo Continent, but if you could put yourself in that position, you'd find it surprisingly appealing.