The Servant of Crimson

It's a pity. You have the potential to become a god in the West. If you don't accumulate popularity, it will be more difficult in the future. Moreover, you have a record of being a eunuch, which is very damaging to trust. We are all subscribing with real money, but in the end, we gave it to an unfinished building. No matter how good the quality is next time, we will only wait for you to pay in full. Once it is destroyed, it may take many times to re-establish trust. You shouldn't be like this.

The Mind Flayer heroine is too bitter. Write more.

I never knew much about the subject of DND. When I was playing Baldur's Gate 3, I got excited and wanted to write a book like this. For me, fan fiction has always been more difficult than original writing, because it requires reference to a fixed template and cannot be used as freely as possible. So when I was writing The Crimson Servant, I felt greater resistance than the previous book. I often sat in front of the computer with my mind empty, and couldn't find a satisfactory plot for an hour or two. The update of Crimson Servant is very slow, mainly because I have not yet adjusted my part-time mentality. The pressure of writing online articles full-time is greater than I imagined. Or maybe it took too long. When I was writing the fourth volume, it was difficult for me to invest in my own story. Coding has become as boring as going to work. I think it is difficult to present an interesting story to my readers in my current mental state. Then there is also the pressure of life. The performance of this book is not ideal. I am very grateful to the readers who have always supported me. I am sorry to disappoint you. Well... I decided to start over.

The second team's writing was obviously not as good as the first one. When I read the comments, some people said that the author's love writing was biased towards fake templates. I was enlightened. What is the new plot like? Everyone is involved in some inexplicable love. There is no cause and effect, and one sudden point is highlighted. Then the character setting is pretty good, but it's not written out at all. Barnes appears to be a lothario, but is actually an amnesiac. He is a cunning and bold liar and a lone star among bad people. He is a good character. However, the subsequent team plot is not as expressive as the beginning of his personal plot. Whether this character is a scoundrel who dares to gamble, cheat, and be cheap, or he has loneliness and conscience under the surface, he is very interesting. However, as soon as the team starts, the sense of existence gradually drops to zero, and so does the character-building plot. Probably because the environment is dangerous, you need to be safe and cautious, and when working as a team, you can't risk ruining the overall situation or seriously annoying yourself. There aren't many plots in the book that involve risking your life or cheating your teammates. In the end, the captain could only cheat the devil twice, which was boring. It stands to reason that in addition to deception and abduction, as the immortal evil star, dangerous situations are also the home field. This should be the time to play with flowers and gamble with life, and the realm is unfolding and the characters are highlighted. The team can't have serious internal problems, so why not give some extreme situations where the whole team will explode and let the captain perform some legendary performances that break the game. The daily sense of being a bitch is gone. I was confused when I saw Vivian disgusted with being bitch, and I didn't see how much of his bitch came out in the plot. The core of loneliness and conscience are basically not touched, and the love line is just a touch. The love experience is that I fell in love at first sight with someone at the beach and then lost my memory and kept thinking about it subconsciously. There is no information content or rationality in the process. The love plot relies entirely on the blood of the sea witch. The sea witch is still involved in his life, but he will never be the same person again, which is quite interesting. Now let's see if the amnesia reveal can be interesting, there is no pure history The warrior character is a former slave who is redeemed and saves himself, the key words are iron will and freedom, how come the law of freedom is not seen, the origin of will, the desire for freedom, the change of mentality from slaves to free people, etc. Are not seen. This character's love redemption line is the most important part, but as a result, this sudden and confusing love line does not support the persuasiveness of the entire character. The heroine has no information at all in the early stage, just like a resentful ghost with keywords wandering around in his mind. In the second half, a two-way secret love with the mistress suddenly appeared. There is no reason for the details. It is a brave love across class barriers, and it is a choice to sacrifice one's own family and become a slave. Free love is to let go. But after seeing the reason, is it him again? She fell in love at first sight, and even tried to sell out the whole family. In the end, there was no confirmation, communication or trust in the other party's feelings throughout the whole process? Vivian seems to want to write about the conflict and guilt between vampires and humans. The conclusion is not written, at least I can't see it. I have nothing to say about the protagonist's suspected love line. I don't understand the author's meaning or reason for this operation. The captain can say that love sets off loneliness. The soldier's love line is obviously redemption and the main character. Maybe having some love is letting go and strengthening two freedoms. What's going on with Vivian's love line? Vampires randomly capture people and suck their blood, causing people to blame themselves and become depressed, so how about using a protagonist who can beat and suppress them to tie up the dog? After helping to tie them up for a long time, you can confidently come back after killing all the main subjects? Ah? The scheming M The protagonist came out for Mariana. I forgot what he did specifically because it was never mentioned. There is also a rough kickback of true love resisting mental attacks. This team seems to be the home of love. Where did your first love go? Looking back at the beginning, the character's conception feels about responsibility, integrating friendship and family affection. , The Sun Team has some connections with the protagonist's initial family team (?). The Paladin's responsibility to the team's friends and family, the Raven Man's responsibility to his hometown society that he evaded, the old dwarf's responsibility to his children who have gone astray, and the druid adoptive mother's responsibility to the hometown that caused the tragedy and expelled her, perfectly showing the different aspects of responsibility and the complex and vivid emotions of the characters. It is recommended that the author should not use love content as the main body of the next big chapter, but write it briefly, it is a bit difficult to write. The whole book is still very interesting. I look forward to the next phase of improvement.

Unexpectedly beautiful. The writing structure is pretty good. If you like fantasy DND and other genres, you will like it very much. The main character is not a virgin, nor does his legs get weak when he sees a woman. It is an image that is very in line with modern people's aesthetics. Although some people say it is a bit slow to get started, I think it is just right. The text is concise and not watery, and it is smooth and comfortable to read. It should be an old author, right? The supporting characters in it are vivid, which reminds me a bit of the old version of fantasy web novels in the past. The protagonists and supporting characters are all vivid, unlike now, the entire web text only remembers the protagonist. Oh! I remember how to describe this book The previous excellent fantasy web novel blends with modern aesthetics It's very good, very good The only drawback is that the update is slow Ah! Why is it so slow ah! I will always support the genuine version I am very willing to charge even now.

A good book with the potential to become a hit may not be the next Cuckoo Bird if it is updated more stably.

The taste of dnd is very authentic. I feel that it should not be this result. Would you like the author to try py with the editor to enter the daily detox?

I want to see it, I want to see it, I want to see it 😭 Who can make up for the golden-haired idiot Paladin I'm missing?

After seeing the latest version, I still prefer the experience and description of the protagonist's first adventure when he first went out. At that time, the sincerity and growth of the protagonist and teammates, as well as the characterization were all very good. In particular, the growth and charm of the paladin can be said to be the pinnacle of this book. The interactions between the characters are also flesh-and-blood and real. On the contrary, this is my second adventure at sea. The character description is not as good as the first. There is basically no arc, and the character is not as prominent as the first adventure. The captain only wrote a little bit of possible extended background on the island. The soldiers are basically transparent after going to sea, almost like tool men. Of course, the author may want to use them to trigger some subsequent plot, but the position is really awkward and I can't understand the feelings between the protagonist and him. The vampire, a character who has just boarded the ship, suddenly occupies the same position in the protagonist's heart as the deeply bonded adoptive mother/secret admirer. How many times did she flirt with the protagonist just because she was pretty or embarrassing? It feels like novels were given to women ten years ago. Compared with the previous series of plots such as the bond between the protagonist and the Mind Flayer's adoptive mother, the fateful encounter, mutual care, and planning for each other, people can feel that this is a fresh and deep love.

Alas, the quality is obviously so high, but so few people watch it. Four hours after the update, I read it and it was in the top 100. I really don't dare to buy this book.