People Are Pirates, and the Sound of a Sheep Comes to Open the Gate of Heaven

The writing of this emotional drama is really rubbish. It is not coherent at all and seems very abrupt. It can be seen that your skills in writing emotional dramas are very poor. If the author wants to open a new book, it is recommended to write one or two. If there are too many, you will not be able to grasp the connection between the emotional dramas. I suggest that you can learn from books such as Sweet Love, which can be sweeter. But to be honest, I don't recommend Shura Field. Takada's words are generally acceptable. Shura Field is difficult to control. After all, you don't specialize in writing about love. In terms of daily details, the writing is not very detailed. Orn usually does not have much daily life except blacksmithing, which can enrich the characteristics of this character. Personally, I feel like it has only a skeleton but no flesh. I hope I can write a book and improve it. At the same time, there wasn't much emotional communication with Yamato and Robin. Maybe I missed it, and they didn't even go to bed. I just talked to Hancock and the two after the cake island, and it felt like the two of them were like a tool. In terms of the plot, I don't think there are any big problems. I read it very smoothly. I just hope the author can improve the details in this book. After all, it is almost over. In the next book, I will work hard to enrich the details of daily life and the emotional aspects of the characters, and fill them with flesh and blood. I feel like there is still hope of becoming a great god. Come on!

Ornn's power lies entirely within himself, and forging is just his hobby. He can forge artifacts at will because Ornn himself is too strong, not because Ornn relies on his powerful artifacts. The causal relationship between this must be understood. I really don't think that Ornn relies on equipment to gain strength.

I don't like the second setting of Yamato's seasickness. It's too uncomfortable to sacrifice the original characters in order to highlight the pig's feet and forcibly increase the weaknesses.

When I see Yamato, I feel a little overwhelmed. If the character is like the anime, where Oden is always long and Oden is short, it will be really annoying. You know how many people are disgusted when the Wano Country chapter of the anime starts to revolve around this guy.

To write a pirate story well, it must express the protagonist's own will. What does it mean? Whether you choose justice or freedom or something else, you can usually laugh like a red-haired person, be as lazy as a blue pheasant, or even act like a yellow ape and try to catch fish. But once there is a battle or an issue involving the face of a strong man, you must show your own courage in the scene, otherwise it will never be interesting to watch.

The harem has expanded again, from 2 to 4, and like many other low-level harem novels, there is no emotional foreshadowing, and the plot is very blunt. It is just the author's desire to collect. The abilities of the goat's body are also very mediocre. Only the few skills in the game are not developed according to the imagination of the goat setting. They all rely on equipment and the passive passive of Heart Steel. After reading it now, some of the food is tasteless and it is a pity to throw it away.

This book should be renamed, starting with Pirates and Forging Equipment, or Pirates: Ornn's Forging System, and then changing the Devil Fruit to System. The setting of your Sheep Fruit Ornn form is really stretched.

I haven't read it yet but I think you got it backwards. Ornn is a demigod whose hobby is blacksmithing. To be honest, the author has restrictions, so I play equipment flow.

My evaluation is, not romantic enough, not wild enough, not heroic enough.

At the beginning, Yamato felt seasick, which brought down the perception by several levels.

I feel like my combat power has collapsed. When I was in the early chapter 100, I couldn't win a single move against Urgi who had not gone to sea three years ago and the fight lasted for a long time 😥. Is the protagonist still not as strong as Luffy who had just gone to sea?

He is also an experienced author, and his writing and plot arrangements are pretty good among fics, and the protagonist's skills and growth are arranged quite logically. The biggest drawback is having a harem in a hot-blooded anime... Also, the ambition and belief of the protagonist are mediocre, these two points are deducted greatly.

I feel like the most toxic thing right now is my obsession with Bellamy. I don't understand why I have to take him with me. It's really disgusting to watch.

Luffy is not a relative of the protagonist, does the poaching of the crew have anything to do with him?

If all goes well, our paths will never cross again

It would be really boring if the last few people who boarded the ship were still like cats and dogs. There are so many people in the Pirate World. It would be better to just board a few people than this one. Although you are late at this point in time, you can still intercept a lot of people, such as some supernovas. There is no need. Make some original, small and transparent waste of pen and ink, but it's not flattering. For example, directly cut off the Red Heart Pirates. Anyway, the core is Luo Beibo, who is the group's favorite. Doesn't Thunder Roar sound good? It happens to be in the North Sea, Kidd is in the South China Sea, Bonnie is also in the South China Sea, and it happens to be hooked up with Long and the others.

They all like to create some original characters and original plots. Do I read fanfics to see original works?

Personally, I agree that Haki has high defense, but the Haki of any cadre can block thousands of lava is too much.

Uh, inexplicably inserting a female WWE wrestler who kills Matt. . . Is it really good? I can't stand it anymore

It all depends on a lot of messy equipment and a little bit of its own abilities. I can't read it until I've reached more than 100 chapters.

Any abilities, characters, or weapons and equipment you want to see forged by the protagonist can be posted here. The author will then select some reasonable and distinctive characters to add to the subsequent plot

🌿, I subscribed by accident, it's very annoying and wasted😭

Read this book first, chapters 117~118. If you can accept it, it means this book is suitable for you.

I think the protagonist's weapons can learn from the dwarven rune magic of Warhammer next door. He has an anvil in one hand and a hammer in the other. The rune magic of hammering the anvil can both launch attacks and buff teammates. It also fits Ornn's image and looks unique.

Do all the novels you open have multiple female protagonists?

It's not easy, and it's finally finished. This book is one of the few that I have read from beginning to end after graduation. Although it has mixed reviews, I personally think it's good. I hope we can meet again in the author's next book. The ending will be sprinkled with flowers｡:.ﾟヽ(*´∀`)ﾉﾟ.:｡

Why did you get such a knife done? Uncomfortable

It's a good book. I enjoyed reading it. I really like Yamato in the author's writing. It's a pity that there is not much written later.