Beautiful Women Help Me Attain Immortality

After reading Chapter 280, how can I say, it becomes more and more boring 1. The revenge plot started early, and after reading fifty chapters, I can still chat about daily life without pushing the plot 2. The erotic scenes are also repeated, there are four people in total, the characters and the erotic plot account for a lot If you read it as an erotic novel, it is okay to read 200 chapters, but I don't recommend it later.

I have never seen a protagonist with so many faults, such as smoking and prostitution. Is this something very honorable? Why are you so casual with the protagonist? And Gu Na, why did he stop thinking about humiliating others and humiliate others when his status is slightly higher? Not to mention that the protagonist is glorious and upright, at least he doesn't make mistakes everywhere.

First of all, the author's writing is good, but the tone of the whole book is too... How should I put it, it feels old and sluggish. There are also some side stories and so on. Most people who read about cultivating immortals and falling in love are young people. This book makes romance and cultivating immortals bland. What a pity about the writing and setting of this book

Come on, the wife-making stream is pretty good.

The writing of this book is quite strange, the language and vocabulary are rich, but it seems to have a jumping feeling. At first, I thought I read it too fast, but I still got this feeling after reading it slowly. In short, it is not the mainstream way of writing male videos. Furthermore, after reading the first hundred chapters, I felt that the author did not write an outline. The plot was here and there, and I couldn't stand it at first. However, he wrote the Ghost Festival chapter very well, so I gave a little more hope. But after reading more than 200 chapters, I really couldn't hold on. The author probably wanted to write a big world view, but when I saw more than two hundred chapters, I felt that the map was quite big and nothing else. Almost all of them are plots on the twelfth floor. What about beyond the twelfth floor? There is too little description, it just feels like the map is big but the rest is very narrow. The same goes for the description of the heroine. There are only a few adjectives going back and forth, such as three thousand black hairs, love threads, and lotus arms. Among them, the word "lotus root" appears very frequently. Those who know the heroine is a person, but those who don't know think the heroine is Nezha. Also, the author probably wanted to write about the different worldviews from modern time travel to classical immortality, so he wanted to write with a bit of ancient charm. The characters' speeches and descriptions are all very literal, but I don't know whether it's because I want to write more clearly or because my writing skills are simply not good enough. It's very strange to read. Some of the descriptions of the protagonist's daily life seem to have been shoehorned in with those words. Summary. I gave up the book after seeing more than 240 chapters. The author may write better in the future, but my defenses have been worn through and I can't hold on anymore. The description of the secret realm in the book is indeed remarkable, very detailed and clever, and the section on starting to cultivate immortality is rare. As for the description of the heroine, if you can accept the shortcomings I mentioned above, it is actually not bad, but there is little description of the strategy, which feels a bit abrupt. As for the highlights of this book and the h-plots of the heroines, I can see that the author is a scumbag, likes to feed porridge, and likes the queen. There is nothing else to read, and there is no feeling at all. To be honest, I admire the author for this. I have read a lot of harem stories, and you are one of the few who can write such a plot dryly. Even if other authors of harem novels briefly mention the main plot and write some interactions between the male and female protagonists afterwards, it is enough to leave room for imagination. But you have described the main plot in detail, but the writing is very empty and makes people lack passion.

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I picked up your book for the second time. The first time was when I caught up with the latest chapter at the end of last year and started reading it. The second time was in October this year. I saw that the quality of the chapters you wrote about Xiao Zhao fighting Huangfu has declined. I, an old bookworm, can tell it at a glance. It turns out that it was your poor performance in this book that caused your emotional breakdown. Although there are still many chapters that have not been read yet, I feel something in my heart and want to communicate with you about the part of this book that ends before the Tianxiang Walking Trial. First of all, the world setting of your book is fine, the writing is exquisite, the female characters are very appetizing, the lines are fresh, and the characters are coherent and vivid. It is only better than those platinum masters in the harem novels at the starting point. Judging from your feelings, I know that you have devoted your efforts to these characters. But why is the performance of this book not ideal? My understanding is that the pace is too slow, why the harem story of Master is so good, because they separate the women's skills and treasures one by one into reward packages. After one strategy is completed, it is the next. The book has some problems with its pacing after all five heroines enter Xiao Zhao's house. The main plot is too slow. There are too many daily routines and memories are constantly interspersed with it, almost becoming a soap opera. As a result, the number of words in each part far exceeds the original plan written in your summary, making it very bloated. My suggestion is that if there is no major progress in the plot, and there is no further change in the relationship between Xiao Zhao and the heroine, there is no need to write so many love words and physical contacts in detail. Although the characters are more fleshed out, the heroine is living with the hero. A simple sentence or two between an old couple can be understood by everyone. Most readers come to read the story rather than live in the book. Dialogue and memory descriptions that cannot promote the plot and emotional changes of the characters should be reduced. I have also posted before to remind you that the male and female protagonists cannot sustain this book on a daily basis, so Urumqi needs to speed up the development of the main plot. The above are my opinions on why this book has poor performance. They are all my personal opinions. Show this comment to your girlfriend: I am a loyal reader of your husband. This book is well written and I like it very much. Unfortunately, the pearl is covered in dust for the time being, but as the saying goes, the moon will shine when the clouds open. I hope you two can work together and persevere to complete this book. It would be a pity to give up halfway.

This book is really great! A rare treasure author found on Daily Guide! It's a pity that it's not popular! Wait for the double monthly pass at the end of the month! This is my first time watching a wife-making drama, and the emotions are well written and the plot is great. Although the strength is not that invincible, I don't feel suppressed or abused when I watch it. It's great!

After reading the first volume so far, I can only say that the problem is huge The beginning to chapter 44 is very well written, which makes people motivated to read on, but after more than 200 chapters, I can only say that the problem is getting bigger and bigger If it is said that it is a fairy tale, it is too bland and has no explosive points. The battle complex is even more like Laqua in Laqua If it is said that he is farming, it will not be a bit satisfying. The most enjoyable part may be something that all system novels have, and Dark Blue adds some points If it is said that he is a romance novel, he even praises his brother, and the heroine's favorability level will be increased in a short time. The subsequent female protagonists are not as good as pure accessories, and then there are repeated male protagonists making money to support their wives. There is no separation between the female protagonists. They will grow up and reunite with each other in the future. They will not help each other in the incident, and there will be no unexpected plots. I can read these contents in 10,000 words, and I will be fine. Watch it I would feel aesthetic fatigue after reading 700,000 to 800,000 words. To put it bluntly, the author originally planned to finish the first volume in 30-40 weeks. However, the writing style of the book was doubled after the completion. It was simply because the outline was not detailed enough.

Shuyue!