The Immortal Locust

Having read more than twenty chapters, I feel that your novel is written in a very awkward way. It is supposed to be ruthless and decisive, but the protagonist seems too soft-hearted. It is supposed to rise to power by relying on locusts, but it also recruits two clueless subordinates and takes on a disciple. That little girl is obviously not simple. It also produces some ancient cultivator's bones, which feels like a strange hybrid.

From the initial stage to the peak and perfection of the Qi Refining realm, there are forty-five minor realms. Seriously, it's disgusting.

I personally pay a lot of attention to logic when reading books, and that's not unreasonable, is it? It's outrageous for Foundation Establishment bandits to rob a Nascent Soul family. Don't tell me there are any reasons behind it or who is protecting them.

It's just ridiculous. I read 32 chapters. The first four chapters show the protagonist's decisive and ruthless nature, but then he inexplicably swears to kill a peerless genius after witnessing the genius's blood sacrifice of 300,000 mortals. It's so strange! I just want to ask, what's it to you? It's utterly baffling.

A Nascent Soul family getting involved with a Golden Core level manual and making a whole bunch of fancy stuff out of it is just ridiculous. It would be understandable if it were a Golden Core family.

Isn't this supposed to be about playing with bugs? Why are you killing the supervisor and stuff, going up in for a bloody battle and turning into a muscle-bound warrior, all that talk about training your mind on the brink of death?

You're casually sacrificing 300,000 people to the death in an entire city. How many people were there in a feudal society? And in the end, the bad guys were protected and escaped. If you rely on divine retribution for everything, I reckon this is a doomsday world of cultivation, destined for destruction.

No wonder they signed me; it's been a long time since I've seen such a good traditional category... No, new ideas don't count as traditional categories, haha.

There are endless opportunities to seize, countless stories of heroes rescuing damsels in distress, countless tales of ugly ducklings turning into swans, and an inescapable cycle of leveling up and overcoming challenges.

Peak of mid-stage Qi Refining, early stage of late-stage Qi Refining? Is this how you plan to write it—having eaten half a dragon and still at the peak of mid-stage Qi Refining? The most important thing is that the "peak" part is really poisonous. It suddenly attacked my memories of death.