Immortal Road Embers

I read Chapter 10, and I find it incredible that the male protagonist's mother donated her ancestral property. She has a scholarly family background and has been an official for generations. Is there anyone in China who doesn't understand what these two things mean? It means a huge collective clan force with at least a thousand people. It is broken down into main branches and branches, and there are several rooms such as the first room, the second room, etc., As well as the clan leader and elders. It's not even a woman's turn to donate!

The part where the main character's mother donates the family property is a little bit cruel. It's a bit depressing to write this kind of aristocratic family as if they were similar to peasant women. Also, what kind of thing is it to directly write an aristocratic family? The family of nine generations of officials has been connected for hundreds of years, but a woman with a foreign surname is allowed to donate the family's property at will? Are you afraid you're dreaming? And after getting it back, it could be donated again. Twice before and after, I almost spit out a mouthful of old blood.

It's better to kill decisively. The mountain god wants to eat the protagonist. After being defeated, he says a few words about why it was not easy for him, and the protagonist forgives him...

The protagonist was too "innocent" and I got inexplicably angry and ran away.

I wanted to scold the protagonist for not being worthy of being a modern person, for simply being a fish that slipped through the nine-year compulsory education system, but he really was, and I had no words to scold him.

Ah, I feel like I'm eating jelly. As soon as I taste some sweetness, it slips into my stomach, so I need a big bag of jelly. Speaking of this, I thought about the days in the production team. It was hard at that time, but everyone was very hardworking, even the donkeys in the team were very hardworking. Looking at it now, alas, the world is declining, morals are corrupt, and the hard-working people are starving for their brains all day long. You think so, Comrade Xiaopeng. 😏

The author's writing is very good, but it feels like the protagonist is a headless fly with no main line and no thoughts of his own.

The author of the classical fairy tale mainly focuses on cultivating Taoism. Stop fighting all the time. If you haven't finished killing in the east, you come to the west to kill. I feel that there is still a key problem. The protagonist's positioning of his own strength is too vague and he always takes risks.

Good. Well written. However, it does seem a bit rushed. Changing maps to do things is a bit frequent. The first impression is a bit eccentric. I suggest the author not to change maps too frequently. There are also levels, which are clearly divided and what level of enemies to fight. How to defeat the boss. Think well. The reader's feelings will definitely be unbearable. If you come up and directly open the world map, it is too big and has too many things. It is better to write like a tomato. As your strength increases, expand the map little by little. The key is that the protagonist plays in the same power. Many are written in the beginning of a power. How to play. You have no power, you are too free. Readers, it's hard to substitute. Another protagonist's goal is not very clear. They left half of the group under the banner of Guangming Cult. Go play Cult of Bones. This is very speechless. The world you set is so bad. The situation is so bad. In the early stage of the protagonist's life, the main thing is not to improve his strength. Even if he wants to be saved by the Holy Mother, it will only happen after he becomes a boss, right? What ability can do what? The protagonist's actions are very anti-human. Practice first, then kill. The major flaw is that the protagonist's actions are a bit too arrogant. Set up the main line and complete small tasks one by one. In a force, it would be better if the goal is clear and the villain is clear. I also write about opportunities, giving the impression that there is no use after taking the opportunity. After taking the opportunity, it's time to kill the villain. Pretending to be B. This writing is very anti-human. Others are fine. First, the map is changed too frequently, and the protagonist's goal is unclear. The behavior is a bit anti-human and abnormal. Two, the main line is not clear, the protagonist is too floating, and the goals are not systematic. It's no use after taking the opportunity. Three, there are too many things. It is strongly recommended to start with a small map and small forces. Conflicts will lead to other small forces and big forces, and big conflicts. After that, the protagonist will expand while fighting. Author, what a great book. They are all the protagonists. Why don't you put the protagonist into a faction? Mainstream fantasy all starts like this. This substitution is more comfortable. With great power, there are many immortals. It won't affect your Xianxia flavor. It is difficult to become an immortal, and it will not always be the case in the future. Golden immortals are not as good as dogs. It's like you borrowed the article to copy the cover of Gongqi Luck. The master of copywriting also puts the protagonist into a small force and talks about it. It's okay to join a force not just for the skills, but for the resources. There are many benefits to expanding like this. Finally. Come on author! You can break your writing habit! Writing, charm, you can do it all. And very good. Substitution, structure, plot. You're really close. Moreover, the protagonist's goals and actions are a bit troubling. Maybe it will be better to do some fantasy routines. Finally, there is another important point. Accurate. I don't know what it's like to feel better. The protagonist acted as fiercely as a tiger, but was defeated by the villain in the end. It was like a 250-year-old. Write it for fun. It should be that the author has thought of this cool point, the protagonist defeats the villain. Then, the plot is written to serve this pleasure. Conclusion, although the author's book has problems of one kind or another. But I really like your Xianxia. When did the author stop following the so-called Tao? Use those fantasy upgrade routines. When will the author be able to fly? For example, The Wilderness of Tomato is also a fairy tale, using fantasy routines. Only writing the final chapter of the Three Realms will allow the author to reach V5 level. It's so heartbreaking to see the author rushing around. Not vomiting, not happy. Obviously powerful. Just because the structure and plot don't work. What a pity. Why not switch to a fantasy novel routine? Come on, come on. I like your Xianxia very much!

The 80th subscriber... I like to watch this kind of pure fairy type, without mixed elements, come on

This protagonist is a bit funny. Why does he have to turn into a sheep and can't follow the past?

Is this book about to get cold? How many more people are watching? I'm at the top of the list. I see two more problems. First, practice and upgrade, this line is useless. I'll go, the protagonist has no desires and needs, and doesn't need anything. Therefore, this very important line is empty. Two, play with foreshadowing. Don't play with foreshadowing. I have completely forgotten what happened before. A conflict was brought up and resolved immediately, which inspired a sense of relief. Such a refreshing feeling is so intensive and wonderful. You should have no more than two plots at most. We all forgot about the foreshadowing stuff. This second point is very important. If you are not a platinum player, you don't dare to play with foreshadowing like this. There must be at least one main line that constantly stimulates small points of excitement. Only after completing this can a few small foreshadowings be played. Come on, author. This book, keep it up. It is very likely that it will not bring any monetary benefit to the author. If the author has gained something from writing articles. Opening a new book may also be an option. I only have this little knowledge to help you this far. It's not good to say, please bear with me. . . Come on.

10+ Book age. Reviews after reading so far. A rare and top-notch novel.

It's a pure fairy tale and looks great. Why aren't many people watching it? I really can't figure it out.

It's a bit of a downer. It's become reckless. I can't stop it.

Pig's Feet is decisive in killing and written fluently. It is a good book.

Can this rare little fairy be killed quickly? She is causing trouble to readers.

There are too few pure classical fairy tales. There are Cthulhus everywhere, and they all turn into monsters in the end after training. Support the author, come on.

I understand that the author wrote it based on the background of the late Ming Dynasty and early Qing Dynasty. Lianshan refers to the Manchu Qing Dynasty, and the White Bone Sect refers to Li Zicheng.

While reading this book, I suddenly realized that there is a reason for the isolation of immortals. Immortal cultivators mix into the human world. Originally, the world was in chaos, but human nature changed. At most, thirty or fifty years were just a renewal of everything. The result became that with the help of immortal cultivators, the upper class was safe and oppressed the people. Originally, the refugees surged and the mountains gathered in chaos. They just beat each other with stones and iron tools. As a result, with the participation of cultivators, the fighting harmed innocent people, evil ways were rampant, and poisons were endless. Cultivating immortals must be pure of heart, not only for oneself, but also for others. If capable people don't stop, it will only cause greater harm. Even if it is to benefit one party, it is likely to backfire.

At the beginning, he boasted about cultivating the Nascent Soul on earth, but in the end, when he arrived at a place where everyone can cultivate in another world, he didn't rush to improve his realm. He wandered around every day, meddling in other people's business, and tried his best to seek death (he almost died several times, all because of the author's forced survival).

It turns out that Jiulong Zhenren is this kind of thing in the end. Worse than the devil in Shushan, no charm at all.

After returning from Daogui, this steady level is more stable. Although the beginning is not amazing, it gets better and better later on.

Opening a new book, writing about modern cultivation and urban supernatural powers. The author has a deep research on alchemy. Continue.

The name Liang Xingyang is so funny...

Starting from Shushan Feixian, I particularly like the author's style and hope to update it in the long run.

More 😭 I'll order them all

The protagonist doesn't look like a time traveler at all. . .

Nice! 😆😆😆

If you persevere, you will become a great god, and stick to it as proof