Brother Is Right

The basic setting of this book is that the righteous One-Punch Man violently beats the man-eating immortal cultivator. The key contradiction in the first few chapters of the book is how to keep the character righteous and how to turn him into One-Punch Man. The author basically ignored the character's IQ and logic and just wrote this stage. But at the end of the writing, I feel a bit wise and foolish. After accepting this setting, the protagonist's character, plot, etc. Were well written. Suggestions to the author: Minor revision of the first five chapters, you can move the section explaining the protagonist's logic forward and make it longer (that is, all the things the Taoist priest told the protagonist actually came true, so the protagonist feels that the Taoist priest did not lie to him), and revise the section about beating the senior brother to death, which is really blunt. . . Or can it be written that he actually noticed the senior brother's suspicions but ignored it because he didn't lie to him because of what the Taoist priest said? Advice to readers: Skip the most toxic parts of the first three chapters and read the rest first before deciding whether to continue reading.

The author's design of the protagonist is actually very exemplary and classic, given that he is incompatible with and completely misunderstood the current story background. This is also the reason why I felt humorous when I first read the story. This reminds me of the parts related to comedy in "Story: The Principles of Material, Structure, Style, and Screen Drama". Here is an excerpt to share with all my book friends: "When we lift the cynical veil of comedy, what we see is a frustrated idealist. Comedy hopes to see a perfect world, but when it looks around, all it finds is greed, corruption and madness. The result is an angry and depressed artist." "He focuses on social life—the stupidity, arrogance, and cruelty of society. The comedy writer will single out a specific social institution or system that he feels is wrapped up in hypocrisy and stupidity, and then attack it." The comic protagonist is then funny because he cannot understand or distorts what he is facing, and when he does, it is no longer funny. The second and third sons are to enhance this funny effect, expand the background of the character's story, and stabilize the protagonist's interpersonal relationship. Funny·Interesting·Saving the World Add a little sense of Journey to the West, supplemented by what you want to express and think. (._.) However, the new junior sister who appeared in the water pool broke this temporary balance of character relationships. Of course, the balance must be broken, because if it is maintained for too long, book lovers will become aesthetically fatigued, which will affect both the taste and the data. But the most important thing is how to re-establish the balance after it is broken, and how to make people feel novel and secure. ( ﾟдﾟ) I support the author's use of new character settings for the junior sisters, from the second, third, and fourth eldest children. It is obvious that the author knows that the new characters must have personality and be different, but not too different. If Xiao Wu is close to Lao Er, Lao San and Lao Si, but it is only based on a variation of their settings, then this character will have no appearance value and no one will remember her. But at present, from the discussion with book friends in this chapter, we can see that the little junior sister has her own personality, but she is not well liked by everyone for the time being (it even affects the sense of reading and joy) (._.) I feel that this problem is a little bit, I hope Brother Yu can respond and solve it soon, and then take us to continue our adventure in this interesting world.

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The author's writing is relatively good, and the way of interpretation in various aspects is still clear. I hope the author can write the map well and not be too outrageous, otherwise it will affect the perception.

The writing is very unique, and the protagonist's reverse transformation and my quest to become an immortal are very interesting. Currently, judging from the background, this world should be full of evil people. The so-called good and evil are all cannibals. The protagonist seems to be brainless, but in fact, he has an innocent heart that shines in this dark world. He had always mistakenly believed that the Golden Immortal Sect was a famous and upright sect, and forced his juniors to become upright disciples together. These dramatic conflicts brought a lot of joy to the otherwise heavy and dark worldview, diluting too much despair. The second brother and the third brother are very vividly portrayed. What kind of sparks will be sparked when two "normal people" in a dark world meet the protagonist, a "retarded man" who is incompatible with this world-eating man? What kind of humanity will shine through? If he wasn't such a "mentally retarded" protagonist, how could he have the ambition to defeat the demons and monsters in the world?

Working two chapters a day really lives up to its name, it's hard enough, and you can have some outbursts from time to time. The writing is quite good, at least it should be a small hit, but the slow updates and lack of inclusion on the cover are holding it back.

The front part is fine, but the back part feels broken.

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It's okay, it's about to be over, there's nothing to worry about, it's okay

I hope the author can write as deeply as possible according to his own writing skills. According to the current pace, it would not be bad to write about all the suffering in the world. Great support.

It is currently fully booked. The first 50 tickets for the first month of this book are not a problem. It is just that I get tired of the routine in the later period and may drop a lot due to other reasons, like my senior brother who is too stable. The author's righteous speech about the protagonist is very good, and it feels inspiring.

I hope that authors who don't know how to write about female characters can feel free to write stories without female protagonists. When the female protagonist does not appear, the writing is obviously very good, but the style of painting changes suddenly when the female character appears. This is not the first time this has happened, it has happened in several books. There are very few books to read, but they still insist on writing female characters. If you can't write well, don't write. I really want to experience life first and understand what normal women are like. Don't think of the fake paper girls in anime as something that may exist in reality. I've never seen one in my life. Many male authors have huge errors in their understanding of women. They treat male characters as earthlings and female characters as aliens, which is all kinds of outrageous. Even if the female character is written as a man with a female body, female readers will not be left speechless. I don't know when male authors will understand that women are just as human as men, with the same brain structure, and there is no need to treat them so deliberately differently when writing. The early stage is very interesting and I look forward to the next book.

The book has been distorted since the beginning of this junior sister. The author constantly emphasized the justice of the protagonist in the early stage. In other words, what the protagonist team does must be correct. The younger junior sister is different from the second and third eldest children. The second and third eldest children became like this because of their own experiences, and the second and third eldest children are easy to change. The junior sister is more like a natural madman, who will bring uncertainty to the justice of the protagonist team. Even if the protagonist can change her personality in the future, it would be so troublesome for the author to change two normal people. Everyone reads online articles. Who has the heart to read your crazy junior sister with hundreds of thousands of words?

The whole book has no brains. Especially the protagonist, he must have been a pig in his previous life! Otherwise, the brain will not become mush after traveling through time.

It's so hard to clean up an evil sect like this. It's uncomfortable to watch. I keep worrying about this and I can't stand it anymore.

I see many book friends struggling with the protagonist's IQ! Actually, I really want to ask: "Are you stupid, or is the protagonist stupid?" The author left a message at the end of the first chapter of the book PS: "Don't care about the protagonist's IQ, this book is just a comedy." Didn't you see it? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?

The whole half day turns out to be the Xianxia version of the ancient war hammer, so will the protagonist become a Taoist god in the future? My power of thinking (grinding) is really beyond WAAAGH🐶. Throw a handful of green beans and endless green-skinned soldiers will appear.

I read other novels to feed you

It's pretty good in every aspect, but the junior sister feels a little stuck in her throat. The rest of the brothers and sisters are all normal people in this world, and suddenly something strange appears and their senses are severely disrupted. Also, the core of the comedy is that the senior brother is super powerful and the other junior brothers have a strong desire to survive. However, the junior sister completely controls several people as soon as she appears, which greatly distracts from this characteristic. This feeling is like having a good meal and suddenly discovering a "duck neck".

Let me just say that the early plot is about a protagonist with a firm mind and clear goals➕infinitely high force value and a bunch of bad guys saving the world in a half-funny and half-sensational way. The sudden addition of the yandere junior sister and the idiot junior junior brother in the later period completely took away the necessity of the existence of several senior brothers' characters. I don't even know why the protagonist spends so much time improving their strength. The improvement in half a day is not as good as the two newcomers.

The world in the author's eyes is simply impossible to realize. Equality for all is a dream. Those without desires are machines. Without desires, people will not be human.

Do the immortal cultivators in this world have the same view of the protagonist as normal people do when they see extreme animal protection?

I didn't care about the protagonist's IQ, but there was something wrong with the protagonist's stance in Chapter 10. He has a group of maniacal cannibals under his command. Do you think the person on the other side who sneaks in alone to save people is a bad guy? Just outrageous. This is not a question of the protagonist's IQ... But a question of the author. Did you enjoy writing it? If the protagonist defines himself as the right path, you have to make the protagonist Guang Zhengwei.

I've seen Chapter 169, and I feel it's average. There are too many descriptions of battles, and the storyline has been severely reduced. Halfway through, I thought it was boring to see a man and a group of clowns performing on stage.

I think my senior brother is the reincarnation of green skin. Who supports and who opposes?

First of all, this book is not a Warhammer fanfic. It only refers to part of the settings. For those who are sophisticated, please don't go too far. Let me be clear again, the background of this book is weird and dark, and mortals are just the training qualifications for good and evil practitioners. In such a world, if the protagonist is not a comedian, the tone of the rescue process will be too desperate. This is what the author has emphasized in the first chapter and in his acceptance speech. As for the identity, the protagonist is not only chosen by the four gods, so it is normal to cross the border to confront the enemy. (Updated to the latest chapter, updated at any time, please contact me if there is any delay)

Why do you have to accept bad guys as disciples? I don't understand whether the author's protagonist is really stupid or pretending to be stupid. . . You are a normal person after accepting so many disciples. Do you think that all the things you have done before will disappear once you get started?

I saw that the acting master had recruited more than thirty disciples, and then abandoned them because they were too toxic. They are obviously disciples and disciples, but they have to be set as peers. It's so disgusting 😰

By about Chapter 140, I was really turned off by the junior sister Lingdang, and it was very difficult to watch. . . But to be honest, the yandere character like Ling Dang is actually a very cliche heroine, it's not a big deal, there will be other female characters without this heroine. What makes people resentful is probably the attitude of the male protagonist: the male supporting juniors are considered bad boys and need to be strictly trained and trained, and the prodigal son's return is the highlight; while Lingdang is equivalent to a naughty child, not only does he not care about going crazy and acting like a monster, but he also acts like a junior sister bear for a reason (grievance torture), don't blame everyone, he needs to be cared for, it is very greasy, and even the character of the junior sister is disgusting. He is a strict discipline to his juniors, but he is kind and caring to his junior sisters. The difference in style of painting is also too big. This is probably the fundamental reason why Lingdang is not lovable. If it was written about Lingdang going crazy intermittently, being slapped by the protagonist and spinning 3600 degrees, and then his eyes suddenly clear up, and he follows the plot of subduing demons and slaying demons honestly, this book would definitely be a god.

"The little demons in the temple are very windy, and the water is shallow and there are many bastards" ——————Pretend to be the dividing line———————— Appeared: [Xumimai]: Armor Sect, Seizing God Sect, Evil Ghost Sect, Menggui Sect [Beigao Kingdom]: Wenting Sect, Lishi Sect, Dali Sect, Zishan Sect, Chilongyuan, Qianyanmen, Changhong Sect, Hongxiu Tower, Caisheng Sect, Qianshan Sect >[Nanping Kingdom]: Nanping Palace, Quancai Sect, Zhenjing Sect, Wanling Sect, Yuhun Sect, Feixianmen, Kuangfeng Village, Mingtang Temple Not appeared: [Xiliang]: Wanzhangmen [Da Chu]: Feishizhai [Da Zhao]: Food Building [Western Bliss]: Qingjing Mountain