Invaders of the Witch World

To be honest, this cover makes me a little panicked. Every time I open the starting point and see this cover, I feel a little uncomfortable.

The inner world and the cultivation of immortality are combined. Also added elements of magical girls? But it looks more like a max-level immortal cultivator who failed to ascend and had to enter the world of urban legends. Author, you must be a trumpet. What is a large size? Wang Chezhi? Pokémon? Praise to Eevee? They all have similar feelings.

It's a bit messy. One side writes the scenes that the protagonist can see, and the other side writes the scenes that ordinary people see. It's too confusing to go around. It is also said that the protagonist is from Tokyo, but his parents studied, got married, and worked in Tokyo. What is the use of using this background?

I thought it was that Korean movie

I've finished reading it all, but the author has a question. Each paragraph is well written, but the connection is a little hard to understand. If you really don't know how to change scenes, just add separators at each scene transition.

The transition was a bit weird. I really didn't understand what was going on with the jumping scene in Chapter 9. Why did the protagonist grab the knife? I hadn't seen a knife appear in front of me for a long time.

The more obvious scenes include Chapter 6 "I want to watch that video, Dad, please tell me the truth" After this paragraph ends, it switches to the perspective of the male protagonist. If there is a sign, it means that the scene has changed.

It's pretty awesome. It broke my mine clearance record. Why did you introduce the mine clone in the introduction? Come on, Shen Nong 😰

Has the author ever considered changing the cover?

Daily excess needs to be increased, or "watered down a little", and some twists or manifestations of the witch's madness need to be increased by at least half. You are the author. The outline of the content is all in your head, so the plot development and description can be understood by you, but the reader cannot, especially about the thoughts of the characters. It is recommended that the description of the thoughts of a main character should be at least half a chapter.

The novel is actually good, but it's more of a stream of consciousness. If you can accept it, it seems very interesting.

After reading Chapter 38, I still don't understand what this book is about. I keep using clones to promote the plot of the story. It's scattered and fragmented. Not to mention the readers, the protagonist himself is confused.

As expected, it got cold, and in the later chapters, no one commented. First, the writing is abstract, stream of consciousness, and the various scenes change too quickly. The second question is why the hero's Taoist heart is still broken. Didn't your introduction say that you should abide by your Taoist heart? Anyway, I gave up when I saw this. As a result, I read this book again today, and found that you cut it. As expected, it turned out cold.

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง Author

Why am I so dizzy when I read it? Is there something wrong with the author's logic or does it contain too much information?

It's a mess, both in terms of the narrative and the way the protagonist behaves.