A Mortal's Rebirth as Li Feiyu

The new book is open, and the author signed this agreement! 😏

You started updating on August 8th, next door on the 5th, and now 220,000 words on next door have been released, why are you still messing around with 160,000 words? How to make money like this?

Zhang Xiuer is quite miserable, dragging a son and raising a daughter to become a widow at a young age, and having a miserable life. Her script is also very difficult to write. She appears early and has no spiritual roots (even if she has spiritual roots, readers will not buy it). The author's writing is also very troublesome. It can be said to be a seduction, but it is integrated with Li Feiyu. Helping can be said to be a matter of affection, but I have no ability to help. It is also my duty to just help if I don't help. Anyway, I am in a dead end. Compared with those glamorous female characters, isn't it too miserable?

There are three popular Li Feiyu that I am currently following. One adds attribute points, one kills to gain life span, and this one has dual attributes to change body. Each has its own merits, but those two are bigger than yours. In terms of plot, I feel that yours will be better. It has its own copy of the map and original characters. Those two are basically the maps in the original work. If your writing style is better, it will definitely be more promising than the other two.

The author needs to read more and write more. Up to now, I still have no sense of immersion in this book. I recently reviewed "Mortal" again. In comparison, I feel that the author's writing skills are not good enough, causing some plots to be too simple and like a running account. The part where Xie Yun takes the protagonist shopping. "After shopping around for a while, Xie Yun found to his dejection that he couldn't get anything out of the other person's mouth, but instead handed over a lot of clues." Does this kind of text sound like a picture to you when you read it? So how did she get it right? Is it all up to the readers to figure it out? This kind of purely psychological description is very empty. To write about a protagonist who is experienced, it doesn't come from a passerby thinking, "Ah, the protagonist is so awesome, I've been tricked."

In the first three boxes before the start, I was traveling through water. I was banned, and I just finished three golden chapters in the cemetery. I haven't told you to open the golden finger yet. It's more fun than not. The plot is dragging, and it always emphasizes the emotions of the predecessor. Why do you keep writing about the poisonous point that time travel is affected by the control of the emotions of the predecessor? It's not cool, but it's very poisonous. The first three chapters need to be interesting, have an interesting story, and make people feel happy and retain them. Hey, you've kicked people off.

Li Feiyu killed people and set fire, but Han Tianzun saved the people in trouble! Li Feiyu never thought that he would make so many enemies after his death! 🤭🤭🤭

Can this Yang body refined by the magic secret method return to normal? If not, how will you continue to walk in the world of immortality? Or do you mean to walk with an ice body from now on? And isn't there any damage to the Yang body after being refined?

I hope to steal Han Li's beauty so that my wife won't have to

When I saw the protagonist endow Mo Caihuan with ice spiritual roots, I felt that my expectations were not strong. What is the reason? The emotional scenes in many novels nowadays are too ordinary, easily awkward, and lack the unforgettable kind. If Mo Caihuan was given spiritual roots in the book, the protagonist would have to advance and retreat with him, constraining each other. The protagonist's current strength and ability cannot protect Mo Caihuan and her family. Think about whether the spiritual world chapter and the fairy world chapter can soar. Instead of restricting each other and the description of the couple in daily life, wouldn't it be better to create a tempering of the protagonist's state of mind, a vigorous life and death dialogue, and seek to improve the strength and have the hope of continuing? I feel guilty about Qixuanmen's wife and children (trap), and I am unwilling to accept the death of Mo Caihuan. Zi Ling knows that Mo Caihuan is the only one in your heart and is still attached to the protagonist (the sixth sense of the past and present life, the innate emotion for the protagonist) and the joy of learning about his past life after arriving in heaven... I feel that this really has a lot of room for improvement, and it can avoid many embarrassing plots. Maybe some people don't like this old routine. Qiao Feng and A'Zhu in Jin Yong's works, if A'Zhu didn't write it down, would Qiao Feng's image still be so perfect~ My humble opinion, I hope the author can forgive me~