Shrouding the Heavens: Turning the Future Around

I'm really speechless. I haven't become an emperor yet, no, I haven't even become a saint. I'm tortured to death by the Immortal King and Emperor every day. I finally read a few chapters of the normal plot and wandered into other worlds. Can you improve your cultivation quickly?

The writing is okay, but I don't like the protagonist. I don't know what to say about the protagonist's character. He hesitates in doing things. How can he still regard this as a dream after traveling 5 years? Can normal people do this? Even if there is a tragedy in the end, the middle process is enough. As a result, the whole book has been about tragedy. The protagonist has a system and can change his own destiny appropriately. If the protagonist's character is changed to be more decisive and passionate, this book will be better. (Personal opinion, personal sense)

This book is really poisonous. I have subscribed to it for more than a dozen times. It feels like I have read a pornographic article on a female channel. 🙂

In fact, the author should make the protagonist have a better relationship with Ye Fan. After all, there will be many enemies in the future. Don't bother with some stupid stuff about licking Ye Fan, because the protagonist will definitely fight side by side with Ye Fan and No. 10 In the future. Some people nowadays just spend no money to read books and just keep pushing them. What happened to the relationship with the protagonist? Should the protagonist be allowed to face future enemies alone? What else do you write as a fan? Just start by exterminating the darkness and pretending to be whatever you want, but who would read such a novel? Since writing fan fiction doesn't even have the most basic affection for the original work, then what bottom line does the author have? To be friends and comrades with Ye Fan is just to lick? Then the person who said this probably doesn't have a single friend. After all, Ye Fan, as the protagonist of a short book who fights against darkness, is more upright than many people. Just like Guo Jing and Qiao Feng, you can rape their treasures and their women, but do you dare to insult people like them? I'm afraid many people will criticize such an author to death

One more

In fact, your writing style is good and your imagination is rich. Instead of writing fan fiction, you should write about the same book! For example, the era of the Corpse Emperor! The era of the Supreme Emperor! The Age of Emperor Fire! In this way, you have a framework, the content is good-looking, and you can use your strengths. Think about it!

You actually spent four chapters preparing for the arrival of King Hua Yunfei. The previous King Li Qiye did not receive such treatment.

I felt extremely embarrassed when I saw all the exaggerated dialogues and all the pretense and slaps in the face.

This book can definitely be ranked among the top three Zhetian fandoms. Whether it is plot layout or other aspects, it is excellent. Come on, stay tuned💪

I always feel that Hua Yunfei in the first few dozen chapters is too indecisive and has too much time to take care of others.