I Have a Secret Place to Live Forever

It was the first time I saw such an affectionate protagonist in a novel about cultivating immortality, and I felt uncomfortable. Please author, please write a female channel😹

A time travel can be solved in 50 words, but you have written it for several pages. Who can bear to read it?

Does the author have any misunderstandings about the doctor? ? ?

A qigong practitioner who was running for his life took a five-year-old mortal girl with him. The key is that he has nothing to do with her yet. He was not so kind to his original sister. The reason why immortal cultivators are separated from mortals has actually been made very clear in many immortal cultivating novels. A monk can live to be 120 years old even in the Qi training period, but mortals often live to be in their fifties or sixties. Seeing family members and relatives who are together every day and helping each other pass away has a great impact on the immortal cultivators. Especially high-level immortal cultivators, who live hundreds or even thousands of years, go into seclusion once, and travel for tens or even hundreds of years. When they come back, what will they think if their relatives and descendants die? The same is true for mortals. They may be brothers, or they may be playmates since childhood. They are getting old, but the other person is still in their twenties or thirties. What do mortals think? Once they have this desire, one person may not be able to accept the death of his relatives, and may kill people and seize treasures to find various life-extending elixirs. The other person wants to cultivate immortality on his own, but has no spiritual roots, so he will think of all kinds of evil ways. This is the Yin and Yang side of things, nature is fair. Much as much is given, much is lost. The protagonist has always used the name before time travel, which is poisonous, and has not adjusted his mentality for a long time after time travel. He is also poisonous. Later, he fell in love and ran away to take a little girl. The protagonist needs to practice and experience how to take care of children. Taking care of yourself while taking care of yourself on the way to escape is actually harming the child. At the same time, I didn't arrange my home properly when I returned home. Many plots are too idealistic. I don't even think about what a doctor should do after living and dying as many times as possible.

For novels about cultivating immortals, it is best not to have a female protagonist in the early stage, and do not involve bullshit emotions. It is not an urban romance or urban love novel. Goodbye

The author's novel did very poorly. Let me tell you why. First point, the cheat in the secret realm is so powerful that the author can only try his best to suppress the protagonist. This is really disgusting. You can either make the cheat a little smaller, or add some restrictions to the cheat. The result is good, the author made the cheat so awesome. The concentration of spiritual energy far exceeds that of the outside world. There are precious elixirs everywhere in the secret realm, and time is many times faster than the outside world. With such a powerful cheat, it would be unreasonable for the protagonist not to take off on the spot. Under the author's desperate suppression, the protagonist really didn't take off from the same place, but kept walking in place.

Fifth, the author simply doesn't listen to the readers. How many readers have reported that the author's writing was poor, and the author said he would change it, but in the end he didn't change it at all, and the word count was still low. Readers' tolerance is also limited.

Ask the author, if you suppress the protagonist like this, when will the protagonist live forever?

Third, I hate pretending to be a pig and eating the tiger. If you pretend to be a pig for a long time, you will really become a pig. The author will definitely say that the protagonist has no hidden clumsiness, haha, why not use the elixir in the secret realm to refine elixirs. Can't you just take the elixir if you don't know how to make elixirs? Spiritual elixirs are not poisons, they are extremely rare and precious elixirs, no different from heavenly materials and earthly treasures.

The author can tell you the word count, I won't go with it. Withdrawn. Delete the book and leave.

There are more than 200,000 words in a book, but only 3 people reward it, which shows too many problems. Author, your novel is not popular with readers at all, so you should cut it as soon as possible.

I really can't read this book when it's on the shelf, it's too watery

The protagonist of this character is not likable, and your writing is relatively weak. Do you think it has a good result?

Why should the protagonist be obsessed with women?

Eunuch, don't continue writing, it's uncomfortable to watch. The main plot is not pushed forward like this. You are passively letting the protagonist go. You haven't seen it yet. What is the use of this so-called secret realm? Knowing that you can speed up, eat a spiritual fruit, and still feel distressed. This is the inconsistency. You know at a glance that you are a drug addict, but you said you are a doctor at the beginning. What's the use? Does this doctor have no common sense at all? It's all poisonous. I suggest you delete the book. You don't want to soar to the sky, but you can't be so rubbish. According to this plot, the protagonist Zhuji is a disciple of Jindan, but he was kicked out because of a bad thing. Then you will go to Zhuji next. The protagonist will be abolished for some reason, and the Jindan period will also be done, or what kind of technique is it? You have to practice it over and over again. Why don't you have a brain if you are a doctor? Thinking of a kindergarten student, can you make the plot flow smoother? Your plot looks like a saw, repeating it over and over again, stretching your hips. I hope you can clear up the outline before coming back.

In one month, there are no more than 10 monthly tickets. The author has never thought about why the results are so bad? The author certainly didn't think about it. There is a reason for the difference.

The protagonist has been in space for many years, and his bone age is already over thirty years old

Please don't be too holy! I wish you better and better as you write! Come on😊