Cultivation of Immortality Begins with the Shen Family

I caught up with the first part, the pace was so slow, I was thinking about the follow-up, and finally had to wait for the second part. It was so rubbish. Look at the author who finished the part after just one part. I was disappointed and disappointed.

Coming from the rise of the Shen family, I would like to give the author some advice. There are a few things in the author's last book that I feel are not good to read (this is purely a personal opinion, don't criticize if you don't like it): 1. The author sets the highest level of Lingnan's immortality world at the golden elixir, which causes the protagonist's cultivation to advance too quickly compared to the clan leader. In fact, the author can either add a Zifu to the foundation building and golden elixir, or set the highest level at Nascent Soul so that there are more places to write about. (I don't know if others feel it's a bit inconsistent when reading it. About ten Golden Core monks lead a bunch of monks in the foundation building period. It always feels a bit inconsistent when reading it.) 2. The purchasing power of spiritual stones cannot be seen. Basically all the problems that the protagonist needs are obtained by chance, barter or at Qingyun Gate. The purchasing power of spiritual stones is not reflected at all. In the family flow, the most important thing about the interaction between the protagonist and the family is that the family provides part of the spiritual stones and resources, and the spiritual stones are used to purchase the resources that the protagonist needs. 3. The Lingnan Immortal Cultivation World is too small and completely closed, so the protagonist must leave after forming the elixir. If the author does not want to write about the Nascent Soul Stage monks too early, he can also place the location of the protagonist's family on the edge of the Cultivation World, but not separate it from the mainstream Cultivation World. This is more convenient and will not appear obtrusive later on.

Brother Meng, now the exposure resources and subsequent recommendations of new books, regardless of recommendation votes, collections, rewards... Are all linked to the number of paid readers. Therefore, please don't keep it! Without exposure and recommendation, the performance of the book will not be good. Many authors are eunuchs because they have no follow-up recommendations. The editor will advise you to start over. The so-called follow-up reading refers to the number of users who have read the latest chapter within 24 hours. [Of course, the editor-in-chief's default definition of valid follow-up is an account that has been recharged within three months, even if it is a small recharge of coins. ] And you can't just click through it in a few clicks, you have to stay in the latest chapter for more than a minute. Nowadays, it is easy to read books to death. As long as there is an update, brothers must read it within 24 hours, or read to the latest chapter. In fact, if you all communicate in this chapter and read other people's dirty talk, you will have more happiness! Finally, although we have always stressed that we need to pay to pursue education, we do not discriminate against free prostitutes. They have all been through it since they were students, and it is not easy to know. However, there is no charge for the genuine edition of the new book. I still hope that everyone can top up a penny to read it. Please!

The trilogy you mentioned at the time, whether it was an excuse at the time or a real idea, it is better to continue it than to do it all over again. After all, you ended the first part abruptly. Although everyone can understand it, it is also because they thought you would have a follow-up. This time, even if you switch to another Zhang family, Wang family, or Zhao family, the effect will be better than that of the Shen family.

Eunuch again, alas, to be honest, this book is far worse than the one written by the Shen family, it doesn't have the same aura as before. It's not that the family story is bad, it's the author's thinking that's wrong

To be honest, the story about the Shen family is pretty good. The author is trying to write about the Shen family again. He didn't even bother to change the names of the protagonist and the supporting characters. It's very unattractive.

The protagonist advances first and his strength increases. It is normal for him to obtain other advanced treasures and help his family members advance. Is it really okay to portray the protagonist as a Madonna who gives selflessly without asking for anything in return? I really hate such a protagonist, and I hate the author who writes such a Madonna protagonist even more.

You, the author, can't do it either. Just publish two chapters when you start a new book? There is an unwritten rule, no matter what, it has to be laid down in ten chapters.

It's better to continue writing the previous one and write about things other than Lingnan.

Personally, I still like this slow-burn style Golden Finger which is not too exaggerated.

Those who came to watch, except for newcomers, were basically old fans. Everyone gave the author some encouragement and patience. I believe the author will give us a satisfactory work. Work hard for six generations and build a clan for all generations! This is also the essence of this book, it must be a heart-stirring novel!

Brother, stop writing, later. Not really the material for writing novels

When does the author plan to eunuch this time?

Since you have opened a new book, don't use the names of the people in the previous book separately. This will make it easy to compare with the previous one, but this one is not as well written as the previous one.

I finally saw the author releasing a new book. I hope that on the basis of smooth writing and reasonable plot, there will be more surprises and better results. After reading the beginning, let me give you some personal suggestions. First of all, the world structure should be as clear as possible. As a long Xianxia online novel, the world view must be gradually expanded, so it is inevitable to advance the plot by switching maps. There should be a very important connection between the new map and the old map. Anyway, the kind of accidental entry into the new map always seems very abrupt. Even if you don't know anything about the new map, you must at least be mentally prepared. For example, when entering a dangerous situation, you know that there are space passages and the like, you know that there are opportunities to advance, and you take the initiative. Then if you go out, you can come back, so that the family that has developed all the way will not be thrown away all of a sudden. Then, the development of the family will definitely encounter bottlenecks, and it will naturally face various contradictions at different times. For example, if the tone of family development has not yet been established in the initial stage, the selfishness of the family leaders will have a decisive impact on the choice of development path. How does the protagonist or patriarch overcome different opinions and clarify the development path? Secondly, the wealth of the wealthy couple should be particularly prominent in the family flow. As the family grows, the gaps will continue to expand. Then the price system must be reasonable and stable. The resources required by low-level monks and high-level monks are also very different. The role of a bunch of low-level resources for high-level monks may be limited to cultivating younger generations. So a distinction should be made. If you are below Qi training, you can only use low-grade spiritual stones. If you are above foundation building, you can occasionally use medium-grade spiritual stones. Then, for monks above this, the base currency for their transactions should be mid-grade spiritual stones. There is no level difference. The Foundation Establishment Pills cost 50,000, and the Nascent Soul Transformation Spiritual Items cost hundreds or tens of millions. It seems that dozens or hundreds of Foundation Establishment Pills can be exchanged for the Yuanying Soul Transformation Spiritual Items, which is ridiculous. These are the opinions at present. Please forgive me for any inaccuracies. Finally, I wish the author a prosperous career and a happy family in the new year! The new book is hot, and there are more releases one after another! !

How can I put it this way? It's not as good as the previous one. It's even worse.

I personally don't hate family disunity, but I want to make it clear that people are selfish, and there must be differences between people who are close or distant from each other. What I hate the most is the kind of protagonist who gives up his advancement opportunities to other tribesmen. He is such a holy mother.

Why did the last book end when it was so exciting? ! ! Can you turn the finished novel into a serial and continue writing? Discuss it with the editor?