I Have a Divine Immortal Scroll

I am a time traveler, but why are many of my ideas and practices so childish? One moment he is very smart, and the other moment he is very mentally retarded. It is really difficult to understand. The protagonist is very poorly portrayed.

I have written several books about Ninth Destiny. The protagonist is still so naive, or the author himself is so naive, or egoistic, extremely egotistical and stupid. The background is the Zhou Dynasty. Nobles are not guilty of killing civilians and slaves. The protagonist's adoptive father is dead. According to the background of the book, the murderer cannot die at all. , The protagonist had to insist on letting the court kill him, but the court would not kill him if the princes did not rebel. The protagonist just wanted to bring public opinion and let the court kill the murderer. He did not consider the life and death of his younger siblings and adoptive mother at all. He said he wanted revenge, but in fact he was just venting the hatred in his heart, which can be said to be very selfish. The protagonist has such a big gold finger and has cultivated himself to become a myth. He can take revenge as much as he wants, but he has to use leverage. This can be said to be completely regardless of the life and death of his adoptive mother and younger siblings. In fact, he is selfish at his core. Destiny could have been used to confer gods, but these recent books are really hard to describe. One of them actually has Oedipus as the main story line. The more I write, the more immature it becomes. This is simply like it was written by an old author, but rather like it was written by a cynical young man.

I don't want to read it. A normal person will use his brain to think about why someone does not want his child to be a master. He is also the youngest grandmaster. I think it is nt. If you carefully ask the protagonist why he is so eager to become a master, you will find the problem. There are also people who know that someone assassinated their own son, but they still don't ask why. Are you writing this as an idiot?

Why don't you think about changing the protagonist's character? It would be better if all future books have an ordinary character or a selfish character. Don't write about this kind of character who pursued justice and equality in ancient times. This kind of righteous character is difficult to write. Just like some writers who are not good enough, they turn a great story into a false story, which is very disgusting for readers. You have had this character for several books in a row, and you are gradually deteriorating. . In the past, my writing was good, but although it has declined in the later books, you can still maintain this kind of character by relying on your superb writing style... It all fell into the cuckold →_→  This book has so many flaws that your writing style can't suppress it and it just falls apart... (Song Wanquan shouldn't be beaten to death, just pay for the injuries... Or you can paint a black-and-white impermanence and save the soul... Once the plot of a hundred thousand people's life and death is reached, it will collapse, no matter how you write it, it will be wrong.) It is difficult to write a bonus point for this kind of character. You used to be able to avoid deducting points, but later you could rely on your writing to suppress it and deduct less points. Now if you can't suppress it anymore, just change your character. Change to something easy and easy to write. Where your writing is, the sea and the sky will be brightened immediately.

Is it time to change it? If the author is not good at writing, some people may object. Judging from the readers' discussion, each book is declining. The success that started with Shen Gongbao has fallen to the point where he doesn't even have the title of great author. Is it time to reflect on it and whether immersive writing should continue.

I found that the books of Destiny all have the same style, which is that the inheritance is awesome, but they are not strong in the early stage, but what kind of self-esteem? Various strong styles will cause trouble, and they cannot be beaten, and there are not many strategies. Invincible doesn't count, it's frustrating to watch.

Damn it, you deleted my comment, so why should I watch it? I will be a black man for the rest of my life, bye bye. If you still want to return to the peak of Shen Gongbao, you're afraid it's just a dream and you won't repent.

In the mutated Zhou Dynasty, an official name of the imperial examination system was added, and the protagonist was given a so-called grandmaster father who is constantly being plotted by others... The key point is to extremely lower IQ.

The following just represents my personal opinion. If you don't like it, don't criticize it. It's up to you. I have a say. The subject matter and ideas of Yijiumei's books are very good. But why is it just not lovable? I always feel that there is something wrong with the main plot. I don't feel like it. I definitely don't know what I want to do Several books by Jiumei Shen Gongbao: The main plot is that Miaoxiu wants to destroy the world and then accumulate the power of disaster to prove the truth and go back to see his girlfriend Yipin: The protagonist initially wanted to be like Hengqu The goal of the four sentences was very smooth at first, but since I dreamed back to the Yanhuang period, I feel that the original main line has been lost. Taishang: Licking the dog Yang can really piss people off. I feel that this book is completely Taking dog licking as the main plot, I once started to wonder if Jiu Mei had ntr attributes. As for the fourth book, I didn't read it because the remaining poison of Tai Shang was not cleared up. Immortal Picture: After reading it for so long, I changed it to licking dogs and cats Pie But I really don't understand why the protagonist wants to be awesome and why he has to work hard. I feel that there is a lack of a clear goal To summarize 1. When reading Jiumei's books, I always feel that it is not the protagonist. Pursue the occurrence of the main plot, but all the protagonist's decisions are squeezed and suppressed by the environment in the book. It feels like the author is restricted by the established world view, and the consideration of the environment is too cumbersome (every time the protagonist is awesome) I started to think about someone who was better than him and then continued to do it). As a result, I couldn't completely enjoy the place I wrote, and I felt like I was neither up to nor down 2. Because I was always pushed by the established plot. There is no clear main line in the book (there is a saying that Taishang's main line is really clear). Shen Gongbao is okay. The main line is that the protagonist is the villain and destroys the world. But in the middle and late stages of the first grade, it starts to feel that the protagonist is considering the suppression of the environment. He started to be pushed by the environment. Although this is indeed the case in real life, after all, what readers of online articles are looking for is to have fun. You can have fun with your brains, but you can't let it go half way. Lifting pants To give an example, let's talk about the watchman. Even the ancient Bai Wen Dou Po has a very clear main line that runs from front to back. The watchman is through continuous exploration. Uncovering the mission of becoming a god of war and sealing other gods, Doupo also has the ultimate goal of marrying Xiao Xun'er. But looking back from the late stage of the first rank, I can't find a clear main line in Jiumei's books, such as this book of immortals. The first common people in the future, then the resurrection of the eight treasures, etc., Etc. These are all story lines, but the most important thing is that I can't find it 3. If you lick a dog, you will die. How many people are the nine sisters who have lost their fans in Taishang? It should be clear 4. The characters do not stand up. The characters described by Jiumei almost do not have very distinctive characteristics. It feels that they are only there to promote the plot. This is a problem of writing power. Or is it just to beat people? For example, Yang Qianhuan, Wei Yuan, etc. These characters all have their own characteristics. They are not just to promote the plot 4. In short, it is to clarify the main line and make it more thorough and uncomfortable. To lick the dog, let the protagonist have his own thoughts, let the character stand up, rather than move with the environment. Internet articles do not need historical materialism. Readers just want to be happy. Maybe what I said is not right, but I I just hope that after Jiumei opens a small account, she can settle down, think carefully about her next writing ideas, and clarify the problem. After all, the subject matter is really good, but why are the results not good? Come on, author.

This book is not good, the protagonist is very embarrassing, it feels like a little primary school student has grown up in time travel, and his concepts, thinking and logic are all flawed.