The Cultivation Clan That Began on Yutan Mountain

The author's writing is acceptable. However, the protagonist's actions and words are too erratic, which is distracting. It needs some revision. Given that he has lived two lives and is still a cultivator, his personality should be more stable and deliberate. Or perhaps the author's writing style is simply lacking.

I'm a little disappointed with the main character; he's more like a supporting character, much worse than that Yao.

The protagonist has a somewhat toxic personality and acts rather cruelly; someone who experienced severe beatings on Earth transmigrated and still maintains such a childish personality and behavior.

The Zhou family is utterly useless. They're like Ninja Turtles, always putting up with things, even when someone tries to steal their bride. What's the point of keeping this family around?

The author seems to have messed up the writing a bit. It's like the family can buy Golden Core cultivators without any limit; they can just accumulate enough and buy them. Are you kidding me? Not to mention the Zhou family is buying Golden Core cultivators far too frequently!

The beginning was written inexplicably and was somewhat rambling.

It's good, but isn't the kinship within the family too cold-blooded? There's no warmth of family affection whatsoever; it feels even colder than a sect. Family ties are crucial. How can a family filled with contradictions and suspicions possibly last long in the cultivation world?

The protagonist is really toxic. He has cheat codes, so he's always risking his life and taking risks. He's also incredibly reckless; his life is too good for him, so he has to act out. Just bear with him. To be honest, it's a good book. But the protagonist lives two lives, and his behavior is more naive than an 18-year-old's. I really can't stand it.

I still prefer novels with a family + sect structure; novels focusing solely on families lack depth. A family without the protection of a sect will find it difficult to grow and thrive.

Practice your writing skills, or perhaps rewrite it as an urban fantasy novel; those don't require high writing skills.