Family Cultivation: I Can Control My Luck

The setting of the story is very good, and the golden finger is a bit too big. The first twenty or thirty chapters are pretty good, but the collapse of the plot in the back is not connected. The biggest turning point is to change the map. It can be said that before going to the countryside, it was a ration novel at the level of a novice writer. After that, there is less and less plot. At the end, it can no longer be understood. Here are some things I would like to say to the author. First of all, I would like to emphasize that only by insisting on writing down can Internet writers have a future possibility. I don't know if the author has written an outline or designed a plot. To be honest, there is no main line from beginning to end. For a new writer, the most important way to create is to be down-to-earth. n years ago, Wandering Toad, the leading writer of Qidian Xianxia novels, can be said to be one of the few fossils who helped Qidian establish paid subscriptions. He once wrote an answer to a writing question on Qidian. Com. I don't remember much of the specific content, but I remember the most important one. He said that for new writers, the most important thing is to be down-to-earth, don't think about innovation, just write the characters and stories well. Internet literature, without the accumulation of millions of words, can't find the rhythm at all. I would like to give the author some advice. Before narrating, you must think clearly about the logic. Another online writer, Ma Boyong, once expressed his creative skills--gold in the desert--when he participated in a variety show. Gold in the desert is a hypothesis used to exercise thinking and logic. How to bring ten tons of gold home reasonably and legally? Ma Boyong said that he also makes fine adjustments according to the laws and regulations every year. He can be very prepared to say that now he is short of gold. A novel without logic is very scary. The world view described by some writers is like a large rural area. The whole world of pig's feet is in the village. You can learn everything from your neighbors. This kind of story is really without layers and is as flat as a piece of paper. When designing the plot, it must be multi-dimensional. This is the highlight. It can expand the audience of readers and facilitate the advancement of the story. Just like Journey to the West, Nine Nine and Eighty Difficulties, are they all about Tang Monk and Sun Wukong? I don't think so. It can almost be said that each difficulty is a small unit, talking about who wants to eat Tang Monk's meat, and who is this. It can be said that the Buddhist scripture learning team only accounts for one-third of the screen. Then again, the main mission must be clear. The main mission of "Journey to the West" is to learn scriptures and fight monsters. The main mission of "Feng Shen Bang" is to confer gods and destroy Zhou. The main mission of "Water Margin" is to gather Yiyi in Liangshan. In the words of a primary school Chinese teacher, what is the central idea? What does the author's description want to express? A chapter of a story has 3,000 words. When written, it must be compared with the previous text. All story lines must be consistent. "A Dream of Red Mansions" can be said to have the best plot. It is said to be like a snake and a gray line, and the veins are thousands of miles away. The Russian writer Chekhov once used the shotgun as an example to describe the characters in novel creation. He said that as long as a shotgun appears on the wall on the theater stage, it must be fired by the third act at the latest. This is a bit like the saying in chess that "the rook must come out in three moves". In fact, it means not to write superfluous characters. Whether it is the description of the scenery or the image of the characters, they all serve the story. It can be said that if an online novel has logic and plot, you can basically eat this bowl. If you sort out a few more characters when paying attention to logic and plot, you will definitely be able to eat enough. Once upon a time, I watched a short video about the cross talk actor Yang Shaohua. His first half of life was a bit bumpy. Because of the problem of mentorship, cross talk actors in the old society did not have a clear master, so they were called Hai Qing, and they were often bullied. Yang Shaohua later met Mr. Ma Sanli, a master of cross talk art in Tianjin. The gentleman asked him to come on stage to praise him. In Yang Shaohua's words, "give me a chance." From then on, Yang Shaohua was able to make a living. Writing online novels is almost the same. If you have the ability to create a good novel, it will be successful, even if your level has not improved since then, or you have copied it yourself. Therefore, you must be patient, polish it slowly, and don't try to be too fast. Sometimes, a man who is slower can be the perfect lover.

The starting background is too big. It's too complicated. I understand that the author wants to have a big scene, which will be beneficial in the future, but I feel that the author can't control the details. Although the subsequent scenes are unfolded little by little, it is also very good; but the chaos at the beginning dissuaded 90% of the people. However, the author can continue to work hard. After this book has been tempered, the next book will be more confident!

Brother, what you wrote is too complicated. The text is all dialogues and names. It is too compact and does not allow for a little entertainment time (write about cats and dogs for fun). It is all about the plot and forces others to memorize it. Without a few deep anchors, it is too low of expectations. You must know that most people now do not have a lot of time and patience to read seriously. Overall, there is nothing wrong with it. It just needs to be a little more understandable, with some modern jokes and old memes, and the writing should be more cheerful!

Um, I don't understand. If you give away more than a thousand spiritual stones casually, do you think everyone is a fool in a garbage hall? A common man is not guilty of carrying a jade. I really don't know what to say. It's a very good book, but it's ruined by this writing.

At the beginning, you can compete with Jindan (*¯ㅿ¯*;) by practicing your Qi? Is that still a big deal?

This book is perfect for a book without a female protagonist, and I would read it if it were a novel without a female protagonist.

The book is pretty good, and the background and cheats are perfect, but the men are supercilious and the women just let it slide. Although I haven't read a few chapters, the posture of the holy body's tool man is too obvious. The author also explained a lot of why he didn't use luck to quickly increase his strength, and then turned around and frantically added luck to the two women. The plot ends at a glance, and the focus of Golden Finger is still on the two women. The characters are not even established yet, but they start to grab attention. This is not just to annoy readers. Why does such a good structure need such a novice plot? If the two girls in the back kick me because the protagonist is lucky and dead, at least they look better.

The idea is pretty good, but... No matter how I read it, I feel like I haven't hit the point, and it's not that exciting.

As long as the message is not deleted, it will be refined. I will read everyone's criticisms, but they are too broad, stereotyped, and have no details to show that I have read the book. I cannot learn from them and can only delete them. The rest, non-malicious complaints will not be deleted. Currently deleted. 1. "What does a pig farmer know about writing a novel?" At first glance, it seemed like a personal attack, strange and misleading, but later I found out that it corresponded to a plot... But it has been deleted. 2. "It's a mess and makes no sense." This kind of statement is like a troll template, and the scope is too large, and I can't modify it even if I want to. Three You have to specify which type of book and which book, I will definitely read it. You have to specify which plot has problems and shows who is a waste. I changed it, but one chapter was said not to be published, and it was criticized as soon as it came up. It is unacceptable.

It's indescribably awkward. This golden finger is so weird that I can't write it happily.

Come on, come on, your writing is okay, I submitted it.

I can see that you want to write this book well, but to be honest, after reading it twice, I always feel that something is wrong with your book. It's very awkward.

It's okay, but it's a little too watery.

Pig farming and deacons make money. This is the flow of patriarchal operations that the readers your book title will attract will like to read. The flow of luck should also act like a pig and eat the tiger. If the writing becomes more and more pretentious, maybe it would be better to change the name and identity.

It's very interesting. I keep following it. It's okay if the updates are slow.

You go ahead and do your best, I'm leaving

Doesn't the protagonist crazily focus on himself? Only by quickly improving your cultivation can you develop better. You keep giving away things and giving away things. It feels like you have raised all the people in the alliance very well, but you have nothing. Your cultivation is still at the second level of the Qi training stage.

However, some fields should be opened in the later stage. After all, fields are the foundation of a family, even a cultivating family, and fields can increase luck.