Tales of a Tokyo Onmyoji

After reading dozens of chapters of psychological descriptions, I'm like, "Is this a novel? This is just the author indulging in self-indulgence..."

This book is a reboot, a reboot, a reboot! I'm saying it three times because it's important. I've written about the work, posted individual chapters, and included the author's note. This book is a reboot! Don't ask why many things are the same as the previous book; it's a revised version anyway. I'm posting it here again so you can see it, right?

Excessive riddles actually diminish the reading experience of the novel. Take the Shuten-dōji section, for example; the protagonist is essentially passive throughout, while the others are engaged in nonsensical, riddle-like behavior. Although Shuten-dōji dies in the end, it fails to provide the reader with any satisfaction. The reader ends up wondering, "What did I even read?"

The author laid a lot of groundwork for the protagonist's transformation, but it has to be said that the groundwork was poorly done, somewhat abrupt, and more self-indulgent than plot-driven. It's not that the author can't express certain things, but these things shouldn't transcend the plot; you're writing a novel, not just expressing emotions! This is a novel; the plot is paramount.

The author put a lot of effort into the writing, but perhaps I'm not suited to this kind of "riddler" style combined with various ambiguous writing techniques. I found it difficult to read, and I increasingly lost the desire to continue. But I still hope the author keeps going.

Author, are you depicting a subjective, idealistic worldview? The behavior of the characters in this book doesn't seem like a logical evolution, but rather more like the behavior of ancient esoteric Buddhists, their actions resembling ritualistic imitations. Your story displays a belief in morality, yet it also holds a relative worldview, which is... Confusing. Author, once you finish the story, you'll have to write a mystery-solving section to explain it properly.

Keep it up! But at the same time, I hope the author isn't too influenced by the readers. Writing is a profession that requires patience and the ability to endure loneliness. Some authors achieve great success later in life, unless, of course, you're thinking of starving to death right now.

How should I put it? It makes me feel so awkward.

Keep it up, my dear writer!

The author is really persistent!