The Legend of Xuancang

This is the first time Lao Mao writes a book, and there are many shortcomings. Lao Mao will carefully review the suggestions and criticisms from all book friends, and if time permits, they will be corrected one by one. In short, Laomao will work hard, so please be more patient.

Dear book friends, there are more and more characters in this book, and the map is getting bigger and bigger. My mind is almost confused just thinking about the names these days. Now collect the names of various places, people, exercises, plants, monsters, and formations. The quantity required is large! ! Contributions welcome

First of all, this time travel makes no sense. In my previous life, I was a little monk. Nothing high-minded. The skills are weak and the heroine is a servant. Personally, I feel it is not in line with the character of an ancient monk. If it were possible for modern people to marry two servants. After reading the first chapter, I came to watch the water. It's really not as good as the people on Earth traveling through time with something like a dark blue hanging. What a waste of subject matter. I really like this kind of family creation. But you. . Time travel is useless.

After watching it for so long, let me tell you my feelings. It's a good idea, but there are a lot of bugs. For example, the protagonist is too smooth, just the part where he meets two robbers in the Qi Refining stage. I was speechless at that time. The two monks in the late Qi Refining stage have no means at all, and they are stupid. I really don't know how they cultivated to this level. Moreover, many places are unreasonable. There are also problems with the world view design. Moreover, after grabbing the storage bag, I opened it directly. What if there is a trap? After thousands of years of development, there will always be some people with great brains. For example, if you put a poisonous elixir in the elixir that others can't detect, it will always be too smooth. The supporting characters are brainless, and the development of the family and the experience of the protagonist are like a running account. I just tell you this, losing the fun of cultivation itself and the hardships and hardships in the process of building a family. And the planning of everything is a little bit perfectionist, as if he is a person born to build a family, and never makes mistakes. That's all I have to say, but considering that this is the first time for the author to write a book, I will express my thoughts. However, it seems that this book has not been updated for three days. I hope you will stick to it or if the next book is about family building, you can implement "caution" instead of clicking through every family meeting like a running account. If you are not careful about writing contacts, you can read "The Road to the Immortal Master". I hope the author can think about it carefully. I think you can write a good book, come on!

This is the first time I see this kind of opening, it feels very novel, and I can't help but want to read more chapters

It's still pretty good, but it feels a little bit off. It's just a golden elixir and Yuanying monk who feels that when he speaks, he should try not to say "we...", Otherwise it will feel too low. After all, this is still a classical fairy tale 😎

After reading them all, I have just one suggestion. If you don't want to change the family's location, you can use spells to expand the area of ​​the island or connect the surrounding islands. It's okay to raise your spiritual vein level. You can also talk about the adventures of the children and grandchildren and the feedback they give to the family. And the development of talents in all aspects.

If you want to have a family, you have to have more children. Otherwise, what kind of family is it?

After reading it, I think it's pretty good, but it's too smooth. The protagonist's family has an 180% success rate in building a foundation, which is a bit outrageous. In hundreds of years, what area can the family dominate? Please support it by putting it on the shelves.

The character descriptions are not rich enough, and many situations lack description. For example, my previous cultivation experience, I haven't seen foundation building yet, I have simply upgraded, and I have simply learned the exercises. Others are too watery, but you are too dry. This is my personal opinion. Very inappropriate.