The King's Road Starting from Rocks Retreat

To be honest, the author wrote well. It's just that the choice of fruits and abilities is not in line with people's hearts. Either don't write about the fruit that wants to take the form of a blue dragon in the first place, it would be awkward if you write it without showing it to the protagonist. Moreover, when the natural fruit ability is awakened, it will also change the environment. Even the yellow monkey said that the phantom beast species are rarer than the natural ones Furthermore, the green dragon form fruit can control water. You must know that our Chinese form dragon can control water, which is an instinctive talent. There is no need for any water spirit fruit at all. It really lowers expectations a lot

You might as well eat phantom beast species. Kaido can be substituted. But your homemade fruit is really a bit of a stretch.

It is obvious that Kaido can take Kaido's route and add water control ability to Kaido's original foundation. The Pirates also add some to the original foundation, such as the one with the Fusion Fruit, Eneru, and the one with the Golden Fruit, plus the vampire fruit ability of the ancient town in the game promotion, to create the Four Beasts Pirates and the like. It is so obviously developed that by the plot year, it will be the absolute strongest pirate group, which is comfortable to watch.

Take some advice, it's not too late to change now, this timeline is okay, this fruit is real Lou, there is no desire for people to watch it.

Using giants as protagonists inherently lacks a sense of empathy. If they are not of my race, their hearts will be different.

The moment I saw that it was not the Green Dragon Fruit, I lost all sense of expectation. I don't know how many people came here because of this fruit. The author really likes challenges and doesn't like to follow the readers. 88

When I first watched World of the Strong, the Golden Lion was very energetic when he recruited Roger. He was stronger than Roger in terms of strength and seniority. The results now tell me that the Golden Lion is a pawn of Roger's defeated general 😵. Later, he had the nerve to recruit Roger and ask for the shadow area in Roger's heart.

The level of promotion of Qidian novels is getting lower and lower

I thought I was eating Kaido's fruit, but it turned out to be an original water spirit fruit, and I was forced to explain scientifically that it was not afraid of ice, so I said goodbye.

The subject matter is very good, but the level setting and the awakening of some kind of god-killer... Are very awkward. It feels like fantasy and not like pirates at all. I hope I can integrate next time.

I personally feel that the poor performance is not because of the author's bad writing. I can also judge the author's writing style and plot structure. It's just why it makes people feel a little awkward to watch. Later I found out. Take the average Hai fans as an example. Everyone has been watching the series from beginning to end for many years. The author probably skipped it, picked it up, or didn't watch some of the episodes in memory. Therefore, many characters and the rationality of the plot have to be said. Not to mention anything else, at the beginning, the early Whitebeard Fruit time, and whether Rocks' fruit should be eaten, the author himself told the book friends in his reply, (Chapter 8, Rocks Fruit Paragraph Commentary) that it means that Darkbeard belongs to Blackbeard, and Rocks has no fruit ability. This kind of statement has to be complained. . . . .

About the crew There are many original characters, and it's not just the Straw Hats. Think of Sky Island Vaipa, Kimito Akin, MR1, Funkray, MR3, and all the characters who appeared in the special episodes of the theatrical version. There are so many outstanding and charming people under each Shichibukai, enough for you to write about. There is no need to create completely unfamiliar characters when choosing a crew. You can check out the author of The Richest Pirates. All the original crew members have the best performance in the starting point pirates.

Author, it's still too late to make changes now

Author, I hope you can let the protagonist eat the much cuter devil fruit. That ocean fruit is not very good

To be honest, this pirate fanfic is well written

Personally, I feel that the author's power settings are very good and more in line with One Piece

What devil fruit does the author's main character eat?

The writing is good, but the fruit doesn't have much of a feel. The frozen fruit won't completely defeat you, it's not interesting anymore. Everything else is good, even if you make the old-fashioned thunder fruit, the result will be good.

Chapter 12 The water element fruit persuades people to quit