My Girlfriend Is from Konoha Hinata

The writing style and the context of the article are both good, but the development is not compact enough, and it often feels fragmented. If more work is done on the connection, it should become popular.

Don't be so jumpy in your writing. It's generally good. Come on.

Ah, the fireworks

Your outline is very novel, and it doesn't talk about blackening or beautifying Konoha. Just live a good life in the world of Naruto with the thoughts of a normal modern time traveler! Take your time!

World view setting: The old rulers sleep in an unknown place under the sea, and the world is controlled behind the scenes by the old gods headed by the evil god of death, Poseidon. Otsutsuki invaded the earth, and the old gods were defeated by Kaguya who ate the fruit of the sacred tree. Kaguya was sealed on the moon, six paths were laid out, and chakra was created. Ninjas were born, and wars have continued ever since. (Chakra will eventually be swallowed by the Ten-Tails. Giving chakra to humans is a more efficient way of squeezing than simply turning ordinary humans into White Zetsu) Kaguya is preparing to be resurrected, the old god is dying, and Cthulhu summons Akabane Shin. In order to obtain Akabane Shen's pain points, Ke Zong's family members made arrangements one after another. Suddenly, Akabane Shen gained the power of the God of Death and stood on the side of the old god. General Ke, Kaguya, and Shin Akabane represent the rising lineage of the old gods, and there is a three-party game.

I like this book. Each character fits their respective settings at that time and is not so inconsistent in the author's writing. Personally, because of my age, I don't really like to read Naruto's stories from the same period, "I liked them earlier", but this author made me change. This is a good fanfic with its own story. Although it is in the same period, it is not in the same class as Naruto. It's resonant and refreshing. In addition, the protagonist's pretentiousness is accomplished through the narration of other supporting characters and the reader's imagination in an alternative writing method. Not stiff. The struggle of the little character, although I don't particularly like the "plug-in" given by the author, it is a bit contrary to Naruto, and the appearance is unreasonable. But not too much. Acceptable

At first I watched it because the heroine was the cute little Hanabi... Then suddenly... I didn't want to watch anymore👀

At the beginning, I was almost killed by the people in the village. I don't know if I will hate the village later. Dan, I know that if you don't hate and don't want revenge, then what do you think of your life? Do something that a person should do! In the real world, if someone hits me, and I can't beat him, I want to hit him or her in my heart, let alone a world where Naruto has no law and the strong are respected! I hope you won't say sorry and please forgive us later, and then end the matter hastily. Saints should not appear in Hokage. The saint in the novel can easily kill an entire village with a hammer!

To be honest, it's best not to limit what others can say. Some people read novels based on the number of readers and speakers, just like they like to read discussions in the book review section. For example, I I prefer to see how many people are discussing it, because the more people discuss it, the more it means that many people have read this book.

The main character's name, I thought it was Akabane at first

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People are too violent nowadays, and they always like to talk about various things. I feel that being beaten at the beginning is normal. It is just the tip of the iceberg before the chaos in Konoha. It is just that the protagonist is a little unlucky. This kind of thing happens in reality, let alone some time after the war.

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I found that many people seem to have a misunderstanding. The beatings the protagonist received in Chapter 3 were done by Zhan Gu. Those so-called poor children were not caused by Konoha ninjas. He was not persecuted by Konoha, and his growth mechanism was transparent. The protagonist did not choose a ninja school for some reason. It's as ridiculous as if you were beaten by a gangster while walking on the street and you wanted to take revenge on the city.

The first few chapters of this book look like a dark adult, but the rest of the book looks like children playing house.

Indecision, quantum mechanics. If the world has n levels of parallel worlds, they will develop in different directions under the influence of various factors. This is the basis of the fan world. The protagonist suddenly travels through time, and from a macro perspective, he is caught off guard and enters the world of Naruto. At the micro level, the appearance of Akabane Shin's original body was the restless influencing factor. Because of this influence factor, Akabane Shen was affected by the butterfly effect of the protagonist some time before he traveled through time. Hanabi's birth three years early is one of the results of the butterfly effect. The timeline has no impact. It's just that the factor that Akabane Shin traveled through affected the birth time of Hanabi in the parallel world, causing this parallel world to go on a different trajectory. In a sense, the Hyuga family has been entangled with Akabane Shin's fate from the beginning.

Nice looking, update soon. In addition, can the author reveal how the protagonist will make his way in the place where the wall is hanging all over the place in the future 🙂

What the hell is happening today 🤔 It's so sudden, why are there so many updates 😅

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I feel that the author's timeline is correct, except that Hanabi's age is increased by three years. This is attributed to the butterfly effect of the protagonist coming to the world of Naruto. A group of people sorting out time there are really copying the timeline without any thought.

Strange Elephant in the Discussion Forum I have been following "My Girlfriend Comes from Konoha Hinata" and I recently browsed the book review area and found a strange phenomenon. To be honest, it feels weird. When I read the novel, I could clearly understand most of the plot and world view in my mind. The relationship between the characters felt very clear. I felt that the events and characters' behaviors had reasonable explanations. Why do some people always say that they can't understand or accept the simple plot. Then there are all kinds of belittling plots and character arrangements, so don't you think your brain will be burned when you read orthodox detective suspense paper novels? (There is no sense of superiority here) First point, I know that many people like gram novels, but please don't become a geek unintentionally. Because I know that most of you who love to read Keke novels get your Keke knowledge from reading novels and some little knowledge from book friends. I don't even know the names of the alien gods, the Old Ones, mythical creatures, etc., And I don't know much about Lovecraft's novels as the basis. 😊 Just ask if anyone knows Changgna Fang Geng, the "terror on the mountain", "the feeder" and "the god of elephants" But he is simply immersed in the mysterious and strange atmosphere created and the radiance of human explosion and cannot extricate himself. Note, it's not that I despise Grammar novels, I like them too. Of course, you can read it even if you don't understand it, but please don't push Lai Lai with the feeling that you know it well The novel can indeed satisfy our delusions that we can't get in reality, But, can the setting be accepted by the author? The book is written by the author, not you. Don't think that writing a novel is easy. It takes talent to be able to write a novel that people like. Although it is necessary to properly listen to readers' opinions if you want to improve your performance. However, if you blindly adapt to the readers and modify the book to cater to the readers' desires, you will never be able to write a truly good book. If the writing is better, it may become a masterpiece, but that's all. The ceiling is here. Authors all have their own outlines or general ideas. What do you think should work? You can write it and distribute it to your fans. How many people are capable of writing it and dare to post it in the fandom? If you want to simply unleash your usually repressed desires, read Shuangwen. Of course, I am not disparaging Shuangwen. I admit that Shuangwen is also well written, and the rhythm of the story is really enjoyable to read. I think that good novels and novels with some depth will inevitably have twists and turns. If people can accept the story, rather than knife for the sake of making tears (to earn tears), and can let readers immerse themselves in the sadness and regret brought by the plot, it will definitely be an excellent novel You are welcome to discuss or refute me

Big cheers for the author, I've seen some good Naruto fanfics

I don't like it, I feel like the protagonist is very awkward, like... Well, a useless dog.

The update is a bit slow.

There is no beginning or end. Every time I read a section, it finally makes sense, but the next section jumps to another place. It feels like there is a section missing in the middle.

All booked 🙂

Full order plus refinement😏

The writing is too white. . . The plot has no beginning or end, and the sentences are not coherent. . . . .

After waiting for a while, Akabane Shen finally realized that he had indeed gone home. Mahogany computer desk with flashing fluorescent screen. There was a slight fragrance of wood in the room, and everything was incompatible with the ninja world. It was obviously his home, but Akabane Shen couldn't be happy, as if he had lost something. "Huang Liang Yimeng?" Akabane Shen leaned on the computer swivel chair, raised his head and groaned comfortably, then closed his eyes. The scenes he experienced in the world of Naruto appeared in his mind, and all the painful memories hit Akabane Shin like a storm. Suddenly, Akabane Shen opened his eyes. In his eyes, murderous intent could not be suppressed. Everything felt too real, Hanabi... Akabane Shen sighed, then stood up from the chair and walked to the window. With a crash, the window was opened by Akabane Shin. The cool night wind filled his throat, and Akabane Shen suddenly felt better. I just came back in a daze, from behind that weird bronze door. I just don't know if the Lord of the Deep Sea has fallen silent again with his disappearance. Suddenly, a thought came to Akabane Shen's mind. "How about... See if there are any changes in the anime?" But soon, Akabane Shin rejected this idea. The parallel world that he entered was probably Naruto's, and he would not leave his figure in the comics. Suddenly, the longing for Hanabi came to my heart like a tide. However... I can only think about it all, because after all, everything is over. Akabane Shen turned around, looking for a cigarette to smoke. While rummaging around at the computer desk, I accidentally touched the mouse. A pushed local video was accidentally clicked by Akabane, and the female host's clear and standard voice sounded. "Today, two bizarre incidents occurred in Xinyuan District. A man and a woman disappeared in front of the crowd respectively. According to experts..." When the video played the screenshots of the two people, Akabane Shin happened to look up. At first glance, he saw the masked face, and then the face of another masked woman. Even after just a glance, Akabane Shin recognized the two of them. "Cio! Tsunade and Kakashi!" Akabane Shin was stunned, "How could these two guys...,?" Suddenly, Akabane Shin reacted. Kakashi and Tsunade both carried a trace of their souls with them, so they followed him through the bronze gate. "Then Hanabi..." Akabane Shen murmured to himself, then suddenly thought of something, took the phone key and ran out of the door. "The fireworks must also be somewhere in Xinyuan District!" Akabane Shin hurriedly ran out of the corridor, went downstairs and rode his bike towards the street.