Shared Cultivation of Immortality by Mortals

The writing is so bad. It looks like a junior high school composition. I am writing a diary. Mortals dare to write fan stories without understanding it. What is the thousand-year elixir? Can you sell it casually? Hundreds of years have caused golden elixirs to fight for it. In the original work, Uncle Lei didn't show any shame for the centuries-old elixir. The protagonist also sells several thousand-year elixirs in the same place. In the original work, Han Li is so careful when selling elixirs. He is simply seeking death. He sells Dabai. Isn't it good? In this way, the Yuanying monks have long been squatting to kill people and seize treasures. There is also the Ascension Conference Arena. Most of the monks later have talismans, and they can't break the protagonist's defense. Talismans have become cabbage. When did the casual monks become so rich? It is completely inconsistent with the original work. What is written? In the Scarlet Trial, there are not many core disciples of the big sects who have talismans. Are we reading the same book of Mortals?

You can give up. You don't know how to behave and you blame Han Li for being alienated. You can escape from the Qixuan Sect by yourself. 1Won't you warn Mr. Mo to be careful? 2 I won't leave him the remaining exercises and spells of Changchun Gong Han Li is very affectionate and righteous. As long as you do one of these things, the rewards will be super high in the later stage.

They were all used to make wedding clothes for others, and they were severely poisoned.

Goodfellas only has about 20 chapters, and the content is at least several hundred chapters of the original work.

It feels like the author is writing a diary. Many things that could be written in detail have been summarized in one stroke. Then you might as well take out the outline and show it to us.

After reading ten chapters, it's like a running account. There is no sense of substitution at all. Moreover, the pig's feet are so flamboyant that they can display their abilities unscrupulously.

Nice writing, don't write it next time

It's noon on the day of hoeing, and the sweat is dripping from the soil. Who would have thought that every meal on the plate is hard work?

It is impossible for three level eight monsters to appear in the inner sea

I don't know why the author is so obsessed with the unit billion. There are hundreds of millions of gold-eating insects and billions of Xuantian fairy vines. Their power is hundreds of billions of times the power of a real dragon. If the spiritual consciousness exceeds the limit, it will be sealed. Is it okay if the physical body is infinitely strengthened like this? There are levels of power in the mortal world, and unlimited expansion of low-level power does not have much effect. No amount of foundation building can defeat a Nascent Soul. Can the resources of the spiritual world afford 600 billion true dragons?

Saw a few. Just like writing an essay

It's quite interesting. It basically talks about the development of the protagonist. The supporting characters rarely appear. There's nothing sinister about it. It just looks like a detailed summary of a book. But why do we read novels? Isn't it just to see how awesome the protagonist is? If there are too many tricks in the pretentious scenes, it would be boring, but this book is different. There are not so many tricks, which is very good⊙∀⊙! We are looking forward to the situation in the spirit world, but what we are most looking forward to right now is the grafting of Youtian Kunpeng's wings. I hope the author can continue to work hard!

There are really no mortals with golden fingers who have written more than 1,000 chapters.

I don't know if the readers have brought it in, but the author is very good at taking on the role of the protagonist. He slept with a fox, slept with his wife, and put his heart in a storage bag as a spiritual pet. What are you doing here, imprisoned in the basement? Is this book written for you to read? All kinds of obscenities

Good guy, it only took 12 pictures to reach the Sea of ​​Chaotic Stars.

The idea is good, but I didn't write it clearly. It's a bit too messy and the details are not in place.

There is no need to read after Chapter 40. The protagonist has been cultivating immortality for more than a hundred years, and his ability to deal with things is like a child. If you want to possess the purple spirit, just do it directly. The weak and the strong have become Nascent Souls and you still don't understand, bitch.

You can give up. After meeting Zi Ling for the second time and getting pregnant, we still made a deal.

Once you've cultivated yourself, keep working hard and update.

Have some dialogue or something, it's all description

Do you have any recommendations for fellow mortal cultivators?

You are copying, not sharing. Sharing is beneficial to both parties.

After seeing more than 40 pictures, I realized that I wanted to pursue the science and technology path. I wanted to give up a little. I only entered the science and technology stream because I liked the mortal immortal stream. Could it be that this is the science and technology stream wearing the skin of a mortal cultivator?

Edg has won the championship and the author won't update?

Good brother, take a good rest and recover! Once you've accumulated enough inspiration, start another book!

Zi Ling is good (*๓´╰╯`๓)♡

Why don't you start with Zhang Tie Tianzun and grab Han Li's Sky Vase directly? With one strike, Han Li will ascend to immortality and become his ancestor. Just end the chapter

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I feel that it might be better for the author to use artificial intelligence such as Tiangong to assist in writing. Use writing artificial intelligence to sort out the outline and plot events of "The Legend of Mortal Cultivation of Immortality" first, and make a process brain map from the beginning to the end. Then use this flow chart as the theme skeleton and context, add the protagonist's participation in the mortal plot and Han Li's interactive events at various time points on it, open separate plot events for free activities, and use the total score and total cycle method to focus on how the protagonist achieves the final goal, the cause, process and results. First write a narrative text of a running account, and then let AI extract and quote writing techniques from other excellent works to polish it for you.

Three whole chapters, almost no dialogue, just talking to myself