Hogwarts: the Rise of Malfoy

It is undeniable that this novel can be said to be the most faithful to the original work. From all aspects of the details, it can be seen that the author's understanding of the original work is basically as different as that of most HP fan authors. He is familiar with many settings that have not been shown on the screen and in the novel. It can be said to be a walking HP database. Unfortunately, I didn't finish reading the follow-up part. I saw the beginning of the Triwizard Hegemony and couldn't stick with it. After hesitating for a long time, I still wanted to write this book review to the author in time and to let new readers know what I think the shortcomings of this book are. 1. The presentation format is too simple I personally think that the author is a very good reader but may not be a good writer. I fully understand the content of HP, but in the novel, these settings are only written in the form of popular science. For example, when writing about a magical creature, a large section of settings will be added. This kind of science popularization method is especially common in the early stage. Half of a chapter is written about settings, and the actual story does not make much progress. My personal suggestion is to design a separate interaction with the protagonist for this magical creature or through the character's mouth. Describe an interesting story to show the characteristics of this magical creature from the side, which can both popularize the science of the setting and increase the interest. After all, this is a novel and not the setting of the original work 2. The description of the story is too sparse As for the stories before the Triwizard Tournament that I have seen, most of the descriptions focus on what the protagonist did to enhance his strength, but there is rarely a specific plot description. The completion of strengthening means that several months have passed, and there is no connection between the plot nor the inner activities of the characters. It feels that the readers are not experiencing this charming fantasy world from the perspective of the protagonist, but looking at the entire campus from a bird's-eye perspective. Once the strengthening is completed, the protagonist starts to press the accelerator button. As a result, the protagonist has obviously become stronger, but there is no feeling of excitement because the plot does not give too much positive feedback. According to feedback, the number of fighting scenes is also pitiful. After becoming stronger, there is no corresponding opponent to fight, which makes the readers confused about the ecological position of the protagonist's actual combat performance in this world. This problem broke out when the protagonist was sneak attacked by the senior sister. Obviously, I have been writing about how strong the protagonist has become, thinking that even if he is attacked by surprise, he will not be able to succeed. However, he did not make a move for a long time and was stolen by someone. The success of the attack has caused many readers to fall into confusion 3. The lack of emotional lines Although there are many female protagonists, there are not many actual interactions. The female characters are in a dispensable state. The most described is Hermione, but she has to part ways with the protagonist. Although the author also made it clear from the voiceover that Hermione will change his mind, due to the lack of character description and psychological description, it is really difficult for me to have a sense of substitution. I feel that before I was still very angry at first, but I regretted it later, and there were dozens of chapters in between. There was no continuity and it was difficult to mobilize my emotions In fact, I was very happy to see that the author was so familiar with the setting at the beginning, so I only read about ten chapters before ordering them all. What I hope is that the author can use his own writing and knowledge to vividly show a desirable magical world that has never been shown on the big screen or in novels. This is also The reason why I like to read HP in the first place is because the magical world written by Rowling is vivid and exciting, but the actual presentation of the author is very different from what I expected. There are few descriptions of magical creatures, scenery, and characters, but there are large sections of settings. It feels like looking at specimens. Maybe the author will perform better after the Triwizard Tournament, but I really can't persist. I hope the author can write better and better.

So stupid, so stupid! Does this protagonist make any sense? Does the addition of this character have any impact on the development of the original events? It seems like it's just that the original trio experienced less "adventures"? Let's call it an adventure. Others have no effect on interpersonal relationships and the development of events. It makes no difference whether this character exists or not. Without him, it is better to read the original work directly His actions and thoughts are completely separated from his identity and position, as well as his goals His idea is to achieve equal treatment without discrimination, but his identity is among the top group in the entire British magical world, a family with vested interests. If you want to achieve his idea, you must harm your own interests. Are you some kind of ideal "saint"? Going back to his goal, he wanted to change his family's traditional concepts and reverse the abysmal ending of the original work. So now let's see what he did? Emmmmm I haven't seen any action so far, whether it's sideways or subtle, nothing at all The protagonist just has an extra family name, taking advantage of the convenience and wealth brought by this identity, and other changes are not reflected at all. It is said that it is to respect the original work and ensure that it conforms to the original setting, but the way you have written it now, you might as well make up a non-existent family name and do these behaviors now in the identity of a non-existent family. Although I do not agree with some of the views, I think it is not a problem at all [Written in Volume 2, Chapter 16]

It's very well written. The author has the content and details of the original work at his fingertips. The plot is smooth and reasonable, and the second setting is bold and grand. What's rare is that he has enough writing power to control it well. It's a pity that he didn't go to Sanjiang, but he should be able to write it at this level (after all, he has endured it all, haha). A few personal suggestions~ 1. There are many setting introductions at the beginning, and it can be seen that the author's understanding of the original work has almost risen to an academic level. But in fact, online readers only care about the plot and don't like to read about the setting (especially the setting has many chapters). So I can start with Chapter 1 Settings and say that the setting does not affect reading. You are welcome to jump to the text. 2. The female protagonists in the article are not the core characters and are not familiar to readers. The author can put the picture on the cover of the character, not just the character's avatar, or the easter egg chapter after the first appearance of the chapter. If you put it in a post, it may sink in, and some people don't have the habit of reading comments. 3. Most of the secondary settings in the article are quite good. After all, the original work is essentially a fairy tale. If you know Voldemort's trump card, it is really not a boss. New conflicts are very necessary. However, the second setting should not conflict greatly with the original setting. For example, the second setting of Lucius and Decorah is a bit too much. If the Malfoy family's trump cards were so good, the original book would not have the same ending. Malfoy's unicorn wand is not suitable for black magic. What other props are there to detect the next head of the family? Isn't it passed down from generation to generation 😂 In addition, the scene of the brothers fighting, whether the result is a breakup or a reconciliation, is not flattering. In fact, if there is enough conflict, it can be downplayed. The above, I wish you a great fire (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡

This book is the most exciting Harry Potter fanfic I have ever read on Qidian. Some details are very interesting, such as the author's explanation of the curse, some popular science and discussions about the background of the original work from time to time, and the college's common curriculum is really amazing. I have never thought about this issue before. This is a very interesting fanfic written by an author who likes Harry Potter and has a careful knowledge of popular science.

To be honest, I was put off after looking at the settings. It's obvious that the author put a lot of thought into writing this book. The translation is also very attentive. However, it doesn't matter if the name of the curse is changed, but if the name of a person is changed, it will be completely different. Everyone is used to Albus Dumbledore. If you think the translation is not good, change it. So what kind of readers do you want, author? Are you a reader of the English version of Harry Potter like the author? The second is to set the magic level. This is very meaningless. People are divided into smart and stupid. Wizards are divided into high and low bloodlines. They all have different starting points, so how can they be classified into the same category? Let's put it this way. The wand chooses the wizard, and the wand has different attributes. Those who are good at black magic, those who are good at transfiguration, etc. The directions you are good at are different, and the directions you can achieve are also different. For example, level 8 fitter and level 8 piano, are they equivalent? Wizards can't just be Aurors after leaving school. In fact, I really hate this kind of Western fantasy that incorporates fantasy levels into it. It feels really meaningless. Show your level. You are 10 levels higher than me. I will definitely not be able to beat you, so I am your grandson. The protagonist's level is 15 levels lower than mine, so he definitely can't beat me, so I capture his woman, hurt his family, and kill his friends. But I never thought that the protagonist could fight beyond level 16. That's all, I think every author has his own idea. Just making a suggestion.

I'm torn apart. You've written it well before. You're really speechless when you write a heroine to death. It's true that your fandom isn't in the style of a fairy tale. A heroine was snatched away directly. I read the comments and said that it's been a few months. If you understand it so well, it's almost dead. After all, you're not a fairy tale style fan. You are really poisonous. What you wrote in the past is really good. Then this paragraph made me tear apart. I can only say sorry and let it happen 😰

After reading dozens of chapters, it can be said that this protagonist is very contradictory. He wants to win over non-pure-blood wizards, but has a bad relationship with the Iron Triangle Order of the Phoenix. Then he runs counter to the pure-blood family, including his own family. His own philosophy cannot even change his own family. He can be said to be isolated. Except for a few girls who are ambiguously on his side, everyone else is either an enemy or neutral... It can be said to be a great failure...

I don't object to the novel's protagonist having a harem, but it's hard for me to imagine a group of children who have just finished elementary school hugging each other and eager to start a harem. This age should also be the stage of cultivating relationships. . .

What should I say? I haven't finished reading it yet. There are only 2 or 30 chapters left until I saw the latest update, but I really can't watch anymore. The book is very interesting, but I really can't stand the plot. Is the author a bit abusive? Betrayed by a good friend earlier, the protagonist can do nothing but endure it. I can understand that, and I can understand why he and Hermione later parted ways. But not long after Mei was kidnapped, there were incidents one after another where her younger brother was suspected of seizing the body, and there were inexplicably a few more immortal enemies who might be more troublesome than Voldemort. I couldn't understand this. One Voldemort is enough to give the protagonist a headache. Is the author afraid that the pressure on the protagonist is not enough, so he specifically gives him a few more opponents? Novel writing does have a way of suppressing the desire first, but you can't suppress it all the time. Initially, I felt a little unhappy when Mei was kidnapped, but I could still watch it, but the subsequent events made it really hard for me to watch anymore, especially since it felt like the author was suppressing the protagonist's strength. The Harry Potter novel has only read the first Philosopher's Stone, and I also believe that most readers have their impression of Harry Potter through the movie. In the movie Deathly Hallows, Harry was finally able to confront Voldemort. Harry must have just graduated at that time. And look at the protagonist now. The author described him as being very smart, innovative with magic, and having all kinds of adventures. However, in the end, the author showed that the protagonist is only at the level of an Auror. I don't understand whether it's because the movie is too exaggerated, or because the original novel doesn't have the scene where Harry and Voldemort confront each other. All in all, I can't stand it for the time being. I will come back after a while when the author has finished writing and say goodbye.

To be honest, those who read the title and introduction of this novel will generally think that this novel has the following characteristics, but the reality is often different. 1. The protagonist has leadership qualities. In fact, the protagonist is very average when talking about his own ideas and ideals in front of others. At the end of the first-year dinner, he told others that college points are false glory, which made the audience dazzled (original description). As a result, no matter in the first half of the first grade or in the subsequent grades, the protagonist still gains respect because of the college points and persuades others not to fight, resulting in losing points. It is very outrageous and hypocritical. At the same time, when describing the protagonist, he would use childish behaviors such as "feeling stunned", "hurriedly saying something when seeing others embarrassed", and "scratching his head". The protagonist also often mocked Ron for being a brat. As a result, the protagonist's behavior is no different from that of a brat. 2. Multiple female protagonists. It does have multiple heroines, but the emotional scenes are extremely awkward. Every heroine falls in love with the protagonist upon seeing it, which is very unexpected. The key author also said that he was not a stallion but forced emotional drama in an attempt to exaggerate emotions. The result was a bit self-defeating and very embarrassing. In the fourth grade (the previous description is probably only one or two), Murray's sudden affectionate confession made the readers very confused. At the same time, another very objectionable point is that the protagonist is completely indifferent after being arrested in front of Mei Xia. He knows that there are clues in the pure-blood family (some families have undercover agents) and the professor (the protagonist has the ability to see unique magic traces on their bodies). In the end, there is no investigation. After seeing that the Shafitt ancestral home was cast with the loyalty curse, he gave up and felt that there was no hope, and then continued to fall in love and continue studying. Of course, Mei also plays a huge role, that is, in the fourth grade, when the protagonist released the Occlumency Curse and resisted the Imperius Curse, he took it out and whipped the corpse. He lamented that he was in so much pain and sadness. Although I know that Moody is related to the person who captured you, I still go to school and continue to fall in love with my girlfriends. How dare I test Moody? It is too dangerous. Of course, this is nothing. The protagonist can still be regarded as a selfish and hypocritical person. After all, it doesn't matter if he has many girlfriends but one less. But the most disgusting part of this article comes. After Mei was taken away (the protagonist has guessed that they are interested in her blood), the author wrote a plot shortly after that. 3. Cool text in the introduction. The protagonist can still be considered a cool novel in the first and second grade, but gradually becomes depressed later on. The author created several powerful hostile forces (each with the same or even greater strength and power than Voldemort), and also focused on the protagonist and his girlfriends (Greengrass and May). It turns out that the purpose of having multiple female protagonists is to attract hatred to the protagonist, and the key protagonist is still compacting The fourth-year protagonist has been targeted by at least three hostile forces (young wizard - senior wizard - adult wizard - junior Auror). This does not even include the upcoming resurrection of Voldemort. Each of them has the strength and power to crush the protagonist. I don't know what the author is. What is the significance of the author introducing so many hostile forces at once? It is completely original. It is completely contrary to the ease of the previous part. Voldemort is enough for the author's protagonist, and as a result, so many forces are created, especially the Ghost Society and the Knights. They are everywhere in the world. They are powerful, and they use two generations of Dark Lords as their spearmen. I don't know the rationality of this organization. Is their philosophy pure-blood supremacy or wizard supremacy? What else do they want with such a powerful force? There is also a weird plot like taking action against the protagonist in the hope of changing his memory to become their leader. And what is the rationality for so many organizations appearing in this era? Here we have to mention the concept that the author has always emphasized, "Revenge is a cold dish." As a result, in the author's writing, it is actually difficult to take revenge if you don't have the strength. Later, some subordinates will take revenge immediately when they have the opportunity. Doesn't that mean they don't have the strength to take revenge? If they really have the strength, they will take revenge immediately. They don't see that revenge is a cold dish, only the main point is seen. Jiao is incapable of being furious and stubborn. To put it bluntly, he is not strong enough, otherwise he would have retaliated earlier and waited for the opportunity. It is okay to wait for the opportunity to revenge after a period of time, but if the protagonist insists on saying it is a cold dish, it feels a bit like bragging. He makes it seem like he can take revenge immediately. It is just because the cold dish is delicious when eaten last, so he does not take revenge immediately. The senior sister took action against the protagonist, but nothing happened. After a long time, she gained strength and when the time came, she took revenge on another related family and killed all the children of the family (all bad guys? Of course, this is not a big problem, the key is to treat the incident differently later). As a result, when dealing with Shacklebolt, she still emphasized to the werewolf not to hurt an innocent Muggle, otherwise it would be miserable, and then there was Rolle behind him. The children of the family are also lost to the protagonist. The co-protagonist hates wizards so much. He is good to Muggles and must never accidentally hurt a Muggle. To wizards, he must kill them all without leaving any trouble. The latter is fine, but contacting the former makes the protagonist feel too separated. He is a pure-blood wizard and advocates peaceful coexistence. Also, after Astoria was attacked, she waited for Astoria to forget before taking revenge. Before the critical moment, the protagonist told her that he would take revenge in the future and then it took a long time. It was really outrageous. The protagonist's behavior would only make others think that he was afraid of something and did not dare to retaliate. He did nothing when he was attacked. When he was attacked after a long time, he did it secretly and did not dare to announce it. This alone was enough to make the protagonist's reputation in Slytherin drop a lot. Going back to the attack on the senior schoolmate, the Ghost Society, a powerful organization all over the world, took action and then disappeared, just to cater to the author's cold-blooded ideas. After all, if he took action again, the protagonist would have to fight to the death, otherwise it would be too frustrating. The protagonist's revenge had to be delayed until later, so during this period, the Ghost Society could no longer take action against the protagonist, otherwise it would not be delayed. Also, in a magical world where great power belongs to oneself, and the protagonist has established a power, what benefits does the power bring to the growth of the protagonist? This is a very important point. Otherwise, the protagonist can just practice magic directly. As long as it is strong, power will naturally exist and can naturally protect the people it wants to protect. If there is no top power and only a bunch of ordinary wizards come together, can this power really last forever? In the author's writing, there are multiple possessors With the power of top wizards, what other convincing assets does the protagonist have? Apart from his girlfriends, following the protagonist will mean becoming enemies with those forces. After all, the protagonist has been targeted, and since there are so many top powers, it is really hard to imagine that there will be a large number of pure-blood families who know nothing about it. If they knew, they would often join one party or show favor to one party because of certain relationships. After all, these forces have existed for hundreds of years. 4. The protagonist is cruel or good at black magic. As mentioned before, the protagonist is very ruthless towards wizards, that is, revenge usually takes a long time, and he is very kind to Muggles. At the same time, the protagonist does not like black magic. The protagonist also loves his family very much, including Draco, who was hostile to him in fourth grade. Faced with the blow to his brother's reputation, the protagonist chooses to silently resolve it. He only found out that his brother had a black aura and then stopped doing anything. He neither asked his parents nor asked his brother or had a showdown. It was really a strange situation. He doesn't have any temper at all, at least he has to react to the blow. He still doesn't communicate about such an obvious blow, and he doesn't know what the serious illness is. He doesn't try to solve it even though he knows there is a problem, and just watches. Of course, this is understandable. Just like Mei being taken away, you can't afford to offend anyone with black energy. Of course, the rigorous setting and restoration of the original work in this work is the biggest highlight of the book.

Female characters

Hermione

Objectively speaking, the author is serious about writing this novel, so go for it.

I am the hostess, who is dissatisfied?

I don't know if it's my own fault, or if the author's writing style is not as good as I think it is. This book is so bland, the plot is lukewarm, and the whole process feels like a running account. The plot has not changed much from the original text. The protagonist might as well just switch to another college to achieve equality among purebloods, which is thankless. The main reason is that the author can't write the feeling that the protagonist can handle both sides with ease. On the contrary, it was clearly stated in the reviews and book reviews that it was intended to be a cool novel, but the result was that it was abusive to the protagonist. After praising the protagonist for so long, the result was that there were no highlights and only crotch lift. Maybe the author's writing is not good enough? Anyway, I didn't see where I was pretending. I subscribed to a chapter specifically for the purpose of commenting. I only saw the content before it was put on the shelf. If I read the comments on Goblet of Fire later, I can probably guess the result. Although the others are not good enough, the author still has his own unique understanding of logic and plot, which is still good. These comments are not meant to be against the author, but to hope that the author can learn from the experience and improve his writing skills.

It looked good from the beginning. First, he was tricked by people from his own organization, and then the protagonist didn't take any concrete actions, but it was okay. Hermione's plot suddenly came out, and she tolerated it, and it still made sense. Mei was taken away at the beginning of Goblet of Fire and suddenly lost interest in subscribing... Let's take care of it for a while. ps: Many of the enemies created by fans are the ones that have been passed down for n years. They are not the strongest, but they are about the same as the final boss of the original work. There are more than one or two of them. The protagonist keeps describing how powerful he is but feels aggrieved. This kind of enemy easily makes me give up 😵

There has been no update for so long. Are you telling me that you haven't entered the palace? 😆I paid to subscribe because I believed you, but this is the result? I've been waiting for you for a month, but I still haven't heard back. It's so disappointing.

The beginning is good, there were too many boring plots before it was released, but I can still watch it, and the protagonist is not too frustrated. In the end, this is the best one to watch. Although the later ones are original, they are really unattractive I read several family books before going to school, but I got a lot of things, just like I didn't get them. The black magic book has no effect, the magic stone has not been studied, and the alchemy study has a useless robe and gadgets What makes me most speechless is that there are more bosses than one after another, and there are many masterminds behind the scenes. The protagonist's friends, even if they are pure blood, have no strength, and the pure blood enemies are all hiding in the dark, making it look like they are very powerful... Political enemies, enemies, those with different interests, There are enemies everywhere even before you grow up. Pure-blooded Death Eaters hate the protagonist, but pure-bloods hate the protagonist even more. The protagonist still doesn't seem to be in a hurry I also imitated the protagonist. I looked at the table of contents and couldn't stand it anymore. Bye.

I drew it myself using AI software

It's been more than a month since I was discharged from the hospital and there's still no update? You said there are no eunuchs?

Has it been taken off the shelves for a long time? I read this a few years ago, and I personally think it is an exquisite piece of shit... The details are as detailed as the daily life of the British, but the plot is an old-fashioned embarrassment.

Why don't so many people read such a good article? Too highbrow? But I, a HP student, watched it with gusto.

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It's been 4 years, author, and you're still writing

The Alchemist

Stop being low-key, it's so frustrating

The author actually came out of the palace At first I thought he was writing about eunuchs

Add more updates! It's so beautiful, I'm watching it from the beginning! Very logical!

I don't know how long I have had her, but my daughter is over 1 year old. . After reading through it today, it feels like it's almost over? Vote to help the author finish successfully

Can you let the protagonist's God-calling guard come out for a walk? He doesn't have a sense of presence, he is obviously very handsome