The Emerald of Hogwarts

I feel that the time-travel setting can be completely discarded. The protagonist's various behaviors are no different from those of a 10-year-old child. The souls who have traveled through time are young people. Youth is between 15 and 30 years old. I'll count you in your 20s. You are a 20-year-old mixed with a group of teenagers, as if you have the same mind as them. What kind of deductors are there? At first glance, you feel that the protagonist has the mind of a teenager. What would a normal person do? Normal people contradict the teacher when he asks a question during the first class? Could you please mention your mental age, please?

I feel like McKenna's face suits Ada very well 🤔

I have a suggestion, if the protagonist can't remember the plot, just write that it's too far back and it's blurry, so don't write anything that gets blocked. Both of them ended up not remembering the plot, but the latter was a poisonous point.

Find a loophole that is not a loophole Snape would not target students. Even if he had the same eyes as Lily, he might pay more attention but would not deliberately target them. The reason Snape targets Potter is that he has the same eyes as Lily, but his style is the same as his father's and his surname is Potter, which is a bit like the feeling of hating iron for not being able to become steel (The above is a personal opinion)

I just asked weakly if there are any boys like me watching this, am I still normal? 🙂

Why are female protagonists on male channels?

I also have an opinion to make. The third person of the protagonist, whether it is "he" or "she", should be fixed. The character in the plot is called Ada "she", and the author refers to Ada as "he". It is very confusing for readers to read, unable to sink into the plot at all, and it is very dramatic. As a transformation novel, if the author does not intend to write a plot driven by the conflict caused by the difference between psychological gender and biological gender, then become more thorough, clearly distinguish the gender of the protagonist, unify the third person of the protagonist, and do not write it in a way that is neither male nor female, embarrassing, neither superior nor inferior. ps: Personally, I prefer "her".

The family drama really irritated me to death. The way a big aristocratic family handles conflicts is by shouting and killing. How the protagonist's father falls in love with the protagonist's mother is also written in a very stiff way. The protagonist suddenly gets close to his grandmother whom he has never met before, and the characters are OOC. Without the characters established in the original work, some of the original characters are extremely uncomfortable.

The heroine

I want to see the twins marry the protagonist🙂