Starting from a Mortal Cultivating Immortality, Traveling Through the Heavens

Grab a bottle? There is no causal setting again? This kind of thing is so unreasonable. The moment he took the bottle, a giant palm came from the river of time and space, and made Lin Fan and the author into meat patties. The whole play ended.

Not bad, it's actually the beginning of the story of a mortal cultivating immortality

After reading dozens of chapters, I feel that the protagonist in the author's works always has a game mentality. The immortal cultivator calls a low-level warrior senior, calls himself a subordinate with a weak person, and gets involved with Guo Jing and Huang Rong. Moreover, the development of the plot is hard to follow. It is very dramatic. Some modern Internet vocabulary always pops up, which makes people collapse.

It's a production line. There's no movement of its own in the whole book, and I don't know what it's about. It's just a hammer on this thing! Write whatever comes to mind. The worst thing is that the sense of involvement is too bad

The protagonist of this licking dog is really rubbish. He gave away both his skills and women. You just cut yourself off and became the female protagonist and formed a Taoist couple with Han Li. What a rubbish novel. You are the worst person to die among mortals.

You, the author, really don't know how to write a spy story about pretenders in Zhutianliu, which is mainly about mortals cultivating immortals.

I hate reading bottle-grabbing novels the most among fans of Mortals Cultivation to Immortality. If nothing else, it just means that the author doesn't want to use his brain to think about the plot. Often the protagonist of the original article is replaced by his own protagonist, and the plot remains basically unchanged.

The bottle ability is so good that the golden fingers of current female fans can even hammer the bottle. I've traveled through time and still can't set my own thighs, what do I want to do day by day?

Where is the Purple Spirit Fairy 😍 She is the most beautiful woman in the Sea of ​​Stars

So brave. Author, have you ever watched Mortal? Time Daozu has been watching Old Mo Han. How did the protagonist survive until now?

Really, I couldn't stand the first chapter.

This is one of the most lj mortal fanfics I have ever seen. The writing style is similar to a novice's composition, the plot is almost straight-forward, and the characters are so pale that they don't look like flesh-and-blood people. There are typos everywhere, and modern words always pop up from the mouths of other characters, and English is the best!

Licking the dog, is it necessary to lick Han Li like that?

Does Tianlinggen want to go to the Blood Trial? No more plot to write? The cultivation speed of Tianling Root is the same as that of Han Li's Four Spiritual Roots? Cheat devices are as slow as foundation building.

This pig's trotter's IQ is not even up to the average level

I suggest the author to look next door. I am cultivating immortality scientifically in the mortal world. There are too many low-priced worlds that are useless at all. It is better to write about mortals or other novels about time travel. There is really no need in the movie world. Also, don't write about the real world. No one reads that stuff.

Zifu Xianyuan I have watched Nostalgia before

To be honest, this author is suitable for writing a fan of Stephen Chow's movies, and the style matches. I am a mortal cultivator who comes here to write rigorous writings, thinking he is very humorous. Use your mouth to inhale spiritual energy, inhale it into your lungs and transform it into your meridians. This setting is "very interesting"! So the maximum training speed depends on how big your mouth is, right? Ha ha. What is written on the back is nothing.