The Supreme Wizard of Hogwarts

The most important thing is that the character is really unlikable, the dialogue description is too awkward, and the character's psychological portrayal is too deliberate. It always creates a look that I am an adult and disdain, but I also like to tease little girls.

The author added a lot of elements that are not Harry Potter and it feels weird.

I haven't read Harry Potter, so I'll just speak from the novel itself. The writing style is very smooth But the plot pace is a bit slow. Because I have read a lot of foreign novels in the past, the tone of this book feels somewhere between Chinese and foreign, but the dialogue between the characters seems to be a bit lacking. (personal opinion)

Ah, how should I put it? You really need to practice your writing. Some of the words and sentences were quite embarrassing to me, so I was immediately told to quit.

When it comes to religion, I have no desire to read anymore.

All HP fan protagonists will meet the heroine on the train before school starts

I would like to ask if the author is writing about the Sorcerer Supreme from Marvel? Personally, I think that's better!

Holy Mother of Nc, it makes me sick to see it

The writing and narration are above the standard, and the writing is meticulous. It can be seen that the author is very careful. Although there are still some places where it is not sophisticated and natural enough, the flaws are not hidden. The real problem is that there is a lack of conflict in the opening chapter and even the whole text design, which is too bland and unattractive. Compare the original work, because I have only seen the movie, so I will take the movie as an example. In the beginning, Harry's background, two suspenses - will Voldemort take revenge? What talent does Harry have? Then there is the dilemma of the family, which makes people worry about whether they can escape, the supernatural events in the zoo, which makes people curious, and so on. For another example, if I were to write a Harry fanfic, I might write a story about a scumbag male protagonist who deceives Harry about his feelings and is then hunted down by Voldemort, his father, and Harry who traveled from other world lines - it would all be more interesting. Or the story of a madman boldly using magic to increase productivity, fighting against the conservative magic alliance and real world forces, and creating a new era where the people are the masters of the country (ಡωಡ) Above.

As far as the novel is concerned, I think it's pretty good. However, the setting feels a little inappropriate. Maybe it's because Hogwarts itself is a novel for young children, so it's not easy to write. The writing is great, but sometimes the language may have some awkward spots, so please work hard.