The Supreme Wizard of Hogwarts

The main problem is that the character's personality is really unlikable, the dialogue is too awkward, and the character's inner thoughts are too contrived. He always acts like he's a disdainful adult, but he also likes to tease little girls.

The author added many elements that weren't from Harry Potter, which felt out of place.

I haven't read Harry Potter, so I'll just talk about the novel itself. The writing style is very smooth. But isn't the pacing of the plot a little slow? Having read quite a few foreign novels before, this book's style feels somewhere between Chinese and foreign, but the dialogue seems to be lacking. (Personal opinion)

Well, to be honest, you really need to work on your writing. Some of your words and sentences are quite awkward to read, and they've practically turned me off.

Once religion is involved, I completely lose the desire to continue watching.

In all Harry Potter fanfiction, the main characters will meet the female protagonist on the train to school.

I'd like to ask if the author is writing about a Marvel-style Sorcerer Supreme? I personally feel that kind is better!

Nc, the Holy Mother, makes me sick.

The writing style and narrative are both above average, with meticulous detail, showing the author's dedication. Although some parts are not quite as skillful or natural, the flaws do not detract from the overall excellence. The real problem is that the opening and even the entire text lack conflict; it's too bland and unappealing. Let's compare it to the original book.

As far as the novel is concerned, I think it's pretty good. However, I feel that the setting is a bit off. Perhaps it's because Hogwarts is a children's novel and it's not easy to write. It's very well written, but sometimes the language might be a bit awkward. Keep up the good work!