The Flame of Killing the Immortal Emerges from the Blue Clouds

Not pretty. Below the poisonous point. 1: I wanted to portray a carefree protagonist, but I didn't write it out, and it seemed like I was pretending to be carefree. 2: Sperm on the brain. After seeing Jin Ping'er for a few times, you fell in love with her for no reason? (The author also wrote that the demon sect must be ruthless to survive. Can you block the protagonist's knife?) 3: The protagonist is selfish and can ignore the teacher for the sake of Jin Ping'er. If it weren't for Shuiyue and the leader, would the protagonist have a life? In order to save Jin Ping'er, Old Man Zhou's granddaughter can be rescued using a secret method. Old Man Zhou is considered the protagonist's benefactor. Can the protagonist accept a secret method with such great side effects with peace of mind? It was also a promise afterwards, neither salty nor light. 4: The protagonist is a white-eyed wolf. Old man Zhou, Shui Yue, headmaster, and sect. Everyone is kind to the protagonist, but the protagonist behaves very strangely. Furthermore, the protagonist's attitude towards Old Man Zhou is dissatisfying. Old Man Zhou is a benefactor. Even if the protagonist has a careless personality, he should repay his lifesaver. On the other hand, the protagonist seems to be at ease and can accept Old Man Zhou's granddaughter's secret technique to restore her soul. It doesn't matter that I don't feel guilty afterwards, it's just a promise that's neither salty nor light. The same goes for teachers. Animals that have been raised for a few months have feelings. What kind of inn does the protagonist think of adopting a master who preaches life-saving grace? Anyway, I didn't see any emotion. Are you really willing to ignore Jin Ping'er? The master is just an NPC that issues tasks. 5: The protagonist only complains about others and is a time traveler. He has watched Zhu Xian, so even if he doesn't remember the plot in full, he should have an impression of the important things. This is golden finger. But the protagonist is indifferent, like a salted fish, undecided on big things and constantly on small things. Only hitting the wall without thinking, overdoing things, and hitting the wall will only "why should I change my destiny" and so on. Then stop making progress until you hit the wall with your head. There is no plot advantage at all. It's all about going through the wilderness with your head and iron. 6: The protagonist never grows up. Even if she travels through time and becomes a little girl, her mind will deteriorate due to physical problems. But after living in the division for more than ten years, it's time to mature. I have been through so much. When I look at the protagonist, I really doubt that he is an adult? Are you still a human being? He's just a white-eyed fool who has a blind mind, doesn't care about others, and has no regard for the consequences.

The more I watched it, the more uncomfortable it became. This may be a common problem with female videos. The protagonist did nothing and just followed the plot. At the same time, there was an inexplicable feeling of powerlessness when the tragedy in the original book happened. I was also convinced. Isn't this the fantasy version of being paid 2,000 yuan to worry about China's rich list? 🤔

Damn it, the protagonist of Sanjou Fire, you give me the whole thing without a handle, I can't replace him 😟

If I write Zhu Xian without changing the emotional line, I might as well read the original work.

The biggest failure is the ambiguity with Jin Ping'er. Now the author can't write a book without a heroine. If the protagonist is a male, all the heroines belong to him. If the protagonist transforms into a female, all the women belong to her. Oh my god, can't I be more normal? Isn't it good for Lin Zhuo to be aloof? Doesn't it look good when worn alone? ? ? ?

The front was pretty good, but when I saw Jin Ping'er, I was so confused that I couldn't walk. I was quite disappointed.

When I saw the reckless man, I was a little interested and wanted to see it. When I saw the transformation, I forgot about it. I can't afford to offend him. . .

Why do female channels keep coming to male channels? Want to seduce us otakus? Impossible! If you're single all your life, wouldn't it be nice to have money to read novels and play games?

Most Zhu Xian fans have a common problem. They often end up copying the original work when writing, and then the whole plot will become tasteless.

The protagonist's emotional problems really make me uncomfortable, hahaha, personal feeling

Can Jin Ping'er be allowed to appear less often? Every time she appears, the protagonist has to have a conflict with someone on the right path. And the sentence the protagonist said that without her, the whole world would be dark and colorless is really funny. How long has Jin Ping'er been with her? How long has her master and sister been with her? Could it be that her master and senior sister are not as good as a golden vase? It's ridiculous.

Why did he suddenly become a eunuch... I used to read the latest updates on my way to get off work every day. In the past two weeks, every time I opened the starting point with high hopes, I was disappointed. After the update, come back at me

The protagonist is extremely selfish. He almost repays kindness to Yi Xian, and is also ruthless towards Shuiyue and Qingyun Sect. He has told Shuiyue and Cangsong about Wan Jianyi's situation in a different way. Will Qingyun kill so many people?

It's rare to see a Zhu Xian fan, but the main character is written like an alcoholic and has no love. His neighbor often beats his children after drinking. He cried so hard that the police station came several times.

Come on, there are fewer and fewer people writing Zhu Xian fan fiction.

I don't know which chapter I've written. Will I be able to see you finish writing it in my lifetime?