The Mortal's Story of Song Yu's Cultivation of Immortality

It made me laugh. Either don't write or lick it. I almost succeeded in surrounding and killing Han Li, but failed and picked myself out again. Do the three Yunmeng sects support each other? The fire dragon offended Han Li's ancient sword sect and still wants to run away? No matter what they say, their position is probably on your side. Self-hypnosis, thinking that everything is over, the protagonist goes to force Han Li to trade with Dongfu property, pretending and standing up, looking like a diaosi who repeatedly tests the bottom line but is afraid of overturning. As long as you insist on fucking Han Li or licking him openly, that's fine, but the two ends are the most disgusting. It's so annoying, it's frustrating to watch.

I like these two things very much. I've read a lot of mortal fandoms, and most of them have system glitches or similar artifacts. Many of their effects are similar to those of elixirs that promote ripening. In addition, they either work as nannies for Old Demon Han or as licking dogs. Obviously, there are those who are so powerful.

To be honest, I always feel that the protagonist's mentality and concept have not changed yet. The hugging thing is right, but on some things, the protagonist still has no room to bargain. For example, the protagonist in the Dan-formation stage has no right to refuse the request of Lord Dayan, unless it endangers his own life or ruins his own path. (If Dayan wants Zi Ling, then he will satisfy him. The protagonist has no right to refuse.) Also, although the author said that he thinks that spiritual veins and the aura of heaven and earth are not important, I don't think so. Otherwise, why is it so difficult for people to even produce a god-transforming monk now? Isn't it caused by the lack of spiritual energy in heaven and earth? So Han Li said that it was impossible to go to a sect without Nascent Soul monks, because it was impossible to have good spiritual veins there, and the remote and remote area of ​​Tiannan had long been carved up by all the major forces. In the end, for Han Li, the best choice was to return to the Yun Sect... Huang Maple Valley was the second option, because Linghu was about to die of old age, and he would not be able to have a baby there and be the shopkeeper, and the land in Beiliang Kingdom did not seem to be good.

The author is very thoughtful! Song Yu is suitable for being a heroine, but not for being a protagonist. Everyone who writes heroines does not have very good results!

There was Ben Mei Ning in front of me. To be honest, I don't think much of this type of writing. A man wears a woman's clothes and then writes the original character, aloof, cold, arrogant or tender-hearted, into a tomboy like Long Aotian. I don't want to read a story about beauty and pure femininity. At least you have to be neutral and don't write the male protagonist who changes into a woman's clothes 🪖

In the Three Realms of Humans, Spirits and Immortals, if a monk who has not reached the Dao Ancestor level wants to attack Han Li, there is a high probability that he will be killed by Han Li, the master of the Reincarnation Hall, across the boundary. There is a small chance that he will be killed by Han Li, the Tao Ancestor of Time, across time and space.

Tea Blowing Fairy

Han Li's handling of this aspect was a failure. I feel it's a bit difficult to build a good relationship in the future.

Song Yu

To cultivate immortality in an environment like that of ordinary people, you have to endure hardships that ordinary people cannot endure and endure hardships that ordinary people cannot endure. This is only the foundation of success. It also requires opportunities and the destiny to climb up. Otherwise, you will end up doing nothing. Whether you marry or not is not that important at all. Cultivating immortality is ultimately for immortality, not for the sake of appearance, including downloading dungeons, betraying teammates, and even being a concubine. As long as you can climb up, as long as you can succeed, it is all about vision and opportunity. At least as of the latest chapter, the protagonist's behavior has wasted too many opportunities. Zi Ling is not someone to win over at all. She is essentially a hot potato. For the sake of her personal face and dignity, she will not be Hu Qinglei's concubine. She doesn't even want to support Old Demon Han in the human world, directly missing out on her support...😅 Han Li is too stiff as a target to win over.

Hurry up and update. After signing the contract, it will be released on the shelves. I look forward to seeing the protagonist take control of Han Li in the future.

Fill it with camellia sauce, meow~ Fill it with camellia sauce, thank you, meow~

The writing is pretty good, there are no particularly bad points, and it's considered enough food among mortal fan fiction.

They are all true geniuses in the original worldview. It is not an exaggeration to say that he is the next generation head of Luoyun Sect. Not everyone has a cheat as big as Li Feiyu.

There is a problem with this introduction. Why is it called Han Li, Jiyin Island Han Li? Do people in Tiannan know that Han Li has been to Chaotic Star Sea?

I feel it is better than most 90% of mortal fan fiction, but why is the collection so low? Are there not enough recommended resources? Anyway, come on!

Since you want to seize Han Li's resources, you can take them first, or exchange them, and then set up a trap to force Han Li. Han Li's character basically won't look good on the Luoyun Sect. This is completely forcing Han Li to return to Yellow Maple Valley to form a baby. As long as the baby is successfully formed, you will have one more Nascent Soul enemy. After all, the three Yunmeng sects are in the same spirit, and the Gujian sect defeated Han Li. Do you expect the Luoyun sect to be treated differently? And the character design is also broken. According to the character of Cheng Tiankun in the original work, knowing that the model worker is in the late stage of pseudo-spiritual root formation and is less than 200 years old, his character is not as extreme as that of a demon cultivator. It is estimated that he will be accepted as a disciple instead of setting up a trap to capture him.

Anyone who writes about mortals and does not suppress Han Li will usually be scolded. I don't know when Han Li will be like Tang San and everyone will yell for him to be beaten.

It's so prosperous and beautiful, but so unpredictable. It has not existed in ancient times and has never been seen in the world. It is magnificent and magnificent, and it is indescribable. When he first comes, he is as bright as the sun shining on the beams of the house; when he comes less, he is as bright as the bright moon spreading its light. In an instant, beauty blossomed. Yexi is like a flower, and warm is like a crystal. The five colors go hand in hand and cannot be lost. Looking at it in detail is eye-catching. The rich ornaments include Luo Danqi and rich articles, which are extremely charming and illuminate all directions. The embroidered clothes are shaken and the quilt is covered with clothes. The rice is neither short nor slender, and every step leads to the palace. Suddenly her appearance changed, and she looked as graceful as a dragon flying in the clouds. She wears clothes and wears thin clothes. Mulan Ze, containing Ruofang. If your sex is suitable, you should be by your side. The order is humble and the heart is attuned.

There should be a narration system, modify the narration system, make fun, pranks, mess around, Han Paopao and other natives, plunder resources, mana, realm

The first 50 chapters are okay. It's inexplicable to deliberately hate Han Li. As mentioned before, Han Li's character of vengeance has deprived him of so many resources. It's contradictory. I suggest you write a new one and be the protagonist yourself.

I feel like I still need to give some guidance, otherwise it will feel like it's over when I reach Nascent Soul.

I would like to recommend my book "My Wife Is a Fairy to Mortals". Since I am not a full-time writer, I cannot do daily updates (probably because it is slow to gain popularity and the editor is not very optimistic about it), so I was not able to sign the contract. The reason I continue to write is because I like it and want to share and discuss it with everyone. It doesn't matter if you don't like it. It doesn't matter if you delete the comment if you can't advertise.

Who is going to write a book about Yan Ruyan's cultivation of immortality? Now Zi Ling, Song Yu and Mei Ning are all there.

I don't understand that you have to become a disciple of God Dayan like a licking dog. A remnant soul can't be concocted now, why can't it be captured when the Nascent Soul is in or out? A fixed target that cannot escape. If it doesn't work, just let the two Nascent Souls set up a formation to surround and kill it.