The Beginning of Magic

I saw the first time I arrived at the tribe. Generally speaking, it is still much better than the large number of novice novels in the starting point. There is no plot that is too silly, and there is no poisonous point that is too explosive. It is a Western fantasy work worth reading. So far, there are several areas that I think can be improved: 1. The setting of the appearance of magic elements. I think there are some logical loopholes in this basic setting. The most fundamental contradiction is that science is developing locally, but the protagonist believes that "magic is the future." But according to the reasons for the emergence of magic elements mentioned in the article, it will be difficult for magicians to go to the sea of ​​stars in the future. The reason is that the speed of magic diffusion is smaller than the speed of meteorite flight, so it is difficult for magic to fill all areas of a galaxy, let alone the entire universe. What science explores is physical rules that are universally applicable. Compared with magic that is controlled by magic elements, it currently seems to be significantly more promising. The improvements that can be thought of are "because magic can quickly increase combat power and productivity in the short term, so develop magic first, and use magic later to accelerate scientific development" or "research the essence of magic until you can use a substance more microscopic than magic to explain the rules of magic's operation, and be able to use it to get rid of dependence on magic itself", or "magic is widely present in the entire universe, but the change in the spiritual power of creatures here begins with the arrival of meteorites." 2. The protagonist's reaction to some characters is a bit inconsistent, such as the "gratitude" to the princess after the assassination in the musical. In order to avenge her "private revenge", the princess pulled hundreds of people including the protagonist to support her, and the protagonist still had to be grateful to her, which was weird. 3. Too many characters. This is my feeling after reading it so far. With the author's "abandoned naming", the feeling becomes even more obvious. Many of the protagonist's apprentices have names, and their origins and background stories are also written, but so far I haven't found out how many of them play a role in the story. I don't know if it will play any role in the story later on, but the density of appearances and the lack of concise and rich descriptions make me think it's a bit laborious to read carefully. It can be seen that the author has set small backgrounds for many characters, which really helps to flesh out the characters. I just want to say that there is no need to output too much of their backgrounds at once for some non-main characters. Even the main characters can be done slowly and little by little. 4. The name is useless, maybe the author wants to come up with some names that seem to have a feeling. I think common names such as Pete, Charlotte, Raj, Joshua, Yuri, Justin, Zach, Cruise, Joe, Leon, David, Cindy, Christian, Catherine, Shirley, Deanna, Arison, Brett, Ella, etc. Can be used. Search some European and American influential celebrity lists, and copy them.

How can a civilized magic system that has existed for hundreds or thousands of years only have a few spells? It is too thin, right? Where is the mage? It is an evocation turret. Basically, there are no gain reduction spells, control, and protection systems. There is only a shield, not to mention other summons, changes, etc. At the beginning, I saw the floating city of Neserui. I thought it was a dnd system, but the more I read, the more disappointed I became. I am not afraid of the slow writing. After all, it is a fantasy world and the content of your power system is so thin. What is the advantage of a mature system over a backward system? What is more important is the maturity and diversity of spells. In the end, this is not as good as the achievements of the indigenous people for decades. Don't talk about the low level and single spells in the early stage. In DND, an apprentice can know at least seven or eight tricks. I don't know what the author thinks. To be honest, the name of the spell is very embarrassing. Is it unique?

I discovered this novel yesterday and stayed up all night to catch up to Chapter 291. I feel that the protagonist joining the government department has no use for his personal strength. Whether it is medicine or magic equipment, it is only useful to the protagonist's economic status, and he has to sacrifice his life The protagonist does not need these at all. , It did not help him personally learn magic. The protagonist learned magic step by step, and it was much easier to wait until he exceeded the strength of a level 9 knight, and then established a magic school. Now the protagonist is not dead because of the protagonist's halo, and the enemies he faces are all those that he can defeat because he has just upgraded.

Alas, you have a little bit of officialdom, a little bit of farming, and a little bit of war. You have a little bit of everything, but you are not interested in anything. You can still read it in the book wilderness.

First of all, let me say that I quite like this book. After all, it is rare to find a book that suits my appetite during the book shortage. I have completed the order on February 28, and I plan to save up for the future. Opinion: I think the author is a little too entangled with the word "reasonable". This should have been a huge advantage, but now it restricts the author's performance, giving people a feeling that the amount of magic is very small, which greatly affects the perception. Personally, I feel that the author does not need to be too obsessed with creating things out of thin air. He can expand the use of spellcasting materials or similar things (such as poisonous creatures, vine seeds, magical plants that are conducive to the growth of germs, etc.) To avoid the risks of creating out of thin air, while filling in the number of low-level magic. There is no need to highlight the professional opposition between wizards and magicians in this regard. Personally, I feel that the negative emotions generated by readers due to the small amount of magic will be much greater than this. In addition, whether it is based on Netheril or not, whether it is technology or magic, I personally think that for a materialistic interstellar civilization, if the core industrial population, basic scientific research population or even military population it relies on are the same group of people (only magicians here), then the education and average knowledge level of this group of people will be beyond imagination (beyond the imagination of modern people), but there are only a few magics in the article... Which is very embarrassing. Also, the magic that the protagonist learns has too obvious destructive or military uses, and is too biased towards the school of reinvention. After all, DND is an old worldview, and there are too many things in it that can be used whether borrowed or not. The prophecy and control schools can pass because of the rationality requirements. The necromancy school (life science? Ares is one point ahead), the change school (the origin of magic is set in the article, but it is learned from Warcraft), the summoning (or is it called summoning?) School (cosmic sociology?), And the protection school can all be expanded while ensuring rationality. Finally, I think that for a civilization, technology (magic) must be used for daily life and industrial production more than for military purposes. Enriching low-level magic is almost inevitable in the next chapter. The above only represents my personal opinion, welcome to discuss. One of the reasons why I like this book very much is that the background setting is very deep and I can justify myself from all angles. I can even contradict my own statement. For example: The protagonist is weak and unable to move long distances. The library in the dream is located in a remote suburban county (I won't say how big a floating city is). It is mainly cultivated for military purposes, or the protagonist has learned it but failed to use it; Magic is more powerful than a wizard. At the end of the day, Noah is caught between 1.5 Superpowers. Choosing destructiveness is more conducive to showing advantages; War promotes the development of science and technology (magic), and the transformation of advanced technology into civilians is the historical trend... My own opinion is too miserable.

After seeing the latest chapters, I would like to express my own opinion. I agree with the protagonist joining the kingdom to build his own strength. After all, it is difficult for the protagonist to completely surpass the power of wizards without advanced machines and background. In such a situation, it is good to be able to live with the country. At least there are benefits to the collection and control of many resources, as well as the localization of the magic system. There is no problem with the idea. The biggest problem now is that there are not enough cool points or they are not clear enough. To be more specific, the organization written by the author after spending a lot of effort cannot play a decisive role in the subsequent plot. Everything is based on the personal power of the protagonist to support the cool points. The protagonist's power can only serve as assistants and assistants to help the protagonist with his research. This situation between the hot-blooded upgrade stream and the farming stream is unclear or the description is not very clear, which makes some readers dissatisfied. The second point is that the strength of the magic system is not clear enough. Although the author explains it very clearly (it is twenty years behind the development, the protagonist himself is not a genius), I can understand it for the sake of rationality and not simply for the sake of fun, but I personally hope that the protagonist can invent anti-counterfeiting technology in the subsequent plot. In the end, in the ensuing war, a dozen official magicians were no match for a sixth-level knight and a hundred third-level knights. Although it was because there were no war spells, the restriction on the protagonist was not so restrictive. War was not one person's business, but since the protagonist knew that a war was about to begin, he could use advance means to enhance the strength of his men or relax the restrictions on war spells, or there were other means, even if they were a little dirty. After all, how can a small country defend itself against the strongest country on the continent without cheating (like the book's decisive weapon or epoch-making technology (ಡωಡ)). The vanguard army of 100,000 people is about to collapse, and the royal regular army has not yet arrived, so it's still a stretch. If it relies on the protagonist's personal power, then it would be useless to build a force before, and people would be suspicious of him. I hope the subsequent plot will be better.

The writing is very delicate. It is a rare author who writes very carefully. The writing is also good, but the shortcoming is that it is too detailed. There are a few chapters with too much description in places that are not very important, which inevitably makes it a bit long-winded. Even if there is foreshadowing in it, it still seems long-winded. I hope this kind of plot can be overturned quickly. This book is still very attractive, good luck to the author!

Come on, I recommend it to you over there. I came over to check it out. It's really good.

The writing is really good, I believe the author will shine sooner or later

I think it's pretty good. It's better than similar novels with thousands of monthly votes. Come on

Finally saw the latest update, great book, wonderful! Grand historical background, magic war! Very awesome! Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

This book is good, the author's writing skills are quite good, and it is quite refreshing at today's starting point. I just finished reading them all. To be honest, I haven't read a new book in a long time that can be so attractive. The beginning is an old routine, with a western fantasy background in a different world. It is not a civilian start, but at least a middle-class son can have a sense of immersion. After all, the author likes to add historical background, and the description is very good. It looks a bit like playing a game. A reasonable plot of pretending to be a slap in the face, the IQ and EQ of the protagonist and villain are online, and the author's tool is not just a supporting role, only the name appears once and a half and the number of words is perfunctory. Rather, he is a real tool, serving the protagonist and advancing the plot, appearing unobtrusively and unfolding slowly. Perhaps sword and magic has become a niche subject today, but this book is definitely a high-quality, refreshing work.

The pace is relatively slow and the characters are well drawn. I like it very much! I hope the author pays attention to the proportion of description. It will be good₍₍ ᕕ⍢ᕗ⁾⁾

Free Prostitution Ends, the writing is quite good. It's hard to find novels that suit my taste on the recommendations. However, I feel a little tired of aesthetics at the end. I always feel that the pig's feet are not strong enough and I am deliberately suppressing them, but it's still acceptable.

Thank you for giving me such a world, very immersive

The writing is very good, and the story is eloquently told. The core plot rhythm is okay, and it has the potential to be a great god. I wonder why it ranks more than 1,000 in the monthly ticket, and it is in the top 20 fantasy level. Of course, there are also some minor problems. For example, in some places, a lot of verbosity is used to explain that the protagonist's ideas are reasonable, but in fact, even if the idea is reasonable, it is not as strong as the author said, and it is too deliberate. Another example is that some friends, events, etc. That the protagonist meets are too sudden and too fast. It feels like they suddenly appear in two or three chapters when someone, teammates, and new forces are needed. It is too hasty, and their appearance is not very reasonable. Another problem is that the opposition between wizards and magic is still not well portrayed, and it could be more touching. But what I said is very difficult to deal with. Once it is done, it will be in the top ten of the rankings. Of course, I think this book is now on the level of hitting the top ten, just because the pace may be a little slower for beginners, and the opening of Golden Finger is not that straightforward, so it is not very popular with beginners.

I like good books, please keep up the good work!

I like good books, please keep up the good work!

This book is really good. I haven't been able to find a book that satisfies me in the past half month. I finally found this one, but it's a pity that I finished it -_-

This is a slow-paced book, and it is also a relatively rare subject in Western fantasy. The origin of magic is very refreshing to start from scratch compared to the refreshing improvement of strength under the already established complete magic system. The advantage of this kind of opening coupled with the slow pace is that the content is solid, the background and setting are very detailed, and there is a deep connection before and after the story The shortcomings are also obvious, common problems in Western fantasy There are also titles in this book. It's easy to get confused when characters have more than one name. Especially in the Western naming convention, characters are introduced by their first names and families are introduced by surnames. First names are common and surnames are not common, which can easily confuse people In addition, this novel is very enjoyable to read, provided that you don't read the title. The title is really outrageous. It's the first time I've seen someone titled War (下下下) and (深圳) after reading online novels for so long.

It's rare to see a well-written book and I just babble a few more words. Recently, there is really a shortage of books, and there are very few books that can read more than three chapters... It's rare to see a book with such a serious attitude and not low level. A few words of praise. Pick some bones later. Advantages: The world view is relatively solid, the details are rich enough, the overall progress is relatively stable and will not make people worry about writing, and there are no extremely stupid and unreasonable three views that are extremely incomprehensible. Friends, it's not easy to come across a book like this... There are only a few of them every year... So don't let it go if you come across it... There are also what I think are shortcomings. For example, although the background is grand, it currently feels a bit dry. It's just that the frame is big, but the flesh and blood is not full. But to expand a little further, I would like to propose a solution that I think is a solution, that is, we can start from the perspectives of decorative style, art school, and object materials from different periods to create a sense of historical depth. It does not necessarily have to be a "historical story." It can be seen that the author is somewhat self-conscious, but I feel that he may not have dug very deeply. So far, we have seen the historical background, many prehistoric stories, and many details with rich causes and consequences. The author has consciously made distinctions between the food, clothing, housing, and transportation of people of different status, but the wording is similar to that of nobles who are more exquisite, and civilians who are relatively simple. This feeling of wording. In fact, it can be distinguished by style. For example, a wealthy aristocrat may prefer a style that is simple overall, but uses high-end materials and is full of complicated small details, which are reflected in cuffs, collar pins and the like. Special materials and particularly advocating patterns can bring a strong sense of strangeness and understanding to people. For example, for a society that advocates physical strength and spiritual practice first, people may particularly favor some totem patterns that represent physical strength, or there may be some fashions that are different from our society, and they may particularly favor a certain style. This may become clothing patterns, murals, architectural or decorative styles, or even spatial design. Speaking of this, I think of the person with the tattoo. In fact, the author dealt with it in this way in many places. There are causes and consequences, but the specific core object only gives a vague description, which cannot make people form an exact impression - what kind of tattoo is it, where is it on the face, is it a picture or a word, etc., As readers, we don't know. This matter is complicated to explain, but it falls within the text. If you want to solve it, it will not increase the number of words. But are you saying that these things are necessary? It is indeed not the case. Moreover, for online articles, readers may still find it cumbersome if you write it this way. Maybe quite a few people will not like to read it. Personally speaking, I still like to read things like that, and they are more enjoyable to read. Anyway, it's up to the author to weigh it. I actually quite accept this level at the moment. There are actually very few books of this level. I gave an example elsewhere, the current example of the heroine. I don't know if this is a character that the author wants to develop in the long run. But in online articles, generally speaking, when it comes to love, it will basically not break up... Otherwise readers will easily criticize her and abandon her... Then just treat her as the heroine. Regarding the heroine, I have a problem, that is, the author seems to have no feelings for her, and he probably wants to cultivate her slowly. However, there is a problem here, that is, you have to really cultivate it. Now it feels like I just found someone randomly without any emotion. Do you like it? What level of favorability? This is also very vague. Generally speaking, if a man has feelings for a woman, it is not necessarily as serious as "love", but he has a good impression, likes her, or even wants to sleep with her. He will also pay extra attention to the girl's makeup, clothing, expressions, demeanor, and other things. The author needs to let the readers see the things that the protagonist pays attention to, so that they can understand the protagonist's attitude towards her. At present, I rarely write about these things, and when I do, they mostly use adjectives. Compared with other descriptions such as the environment, the protagonist pays less attention to people, especially the heroine. In fact, it's a little bit unreasonable. When describing a character, in addition to telling his own story, the protagonist's attention to the character, his overall feelings about the person, and his feelings about a certain behavior will all affect the reader's judgment. What the protagonist "sees" is not just about the heroine, but I feel like it could be more about most of the other characters. Here I am just taking my heroine who is by no means outstanding as an example. But, having said that, this is really not a big problem. People generally don't need you to write to this level when reading online articles. I don't mean that you can't do a good job. Well, it's easy to talk too much after staying up late. Say no more. Whether it is right or wrong is up to the author himself, and he does not need to be interfered with by anyone. If this book is written like this, it will definitely become popular.

The writing is good, but the plot design and characterization are very poor. There is no outline for the characters, and the girlfriend just throws them away without any warning. There are loopholes in the plot of the protagonist. The butler's son can completely replace the female mercenary in the plot, and the female cashier does not need to break up with her by exposing her secrets. The protagonist's IQ is erratic and many of his actions are taken for granted. These problems are all caused by the author's improper handling of the plot, and it can even be said that there are too many poisonous points. The writing does make up for the problems, but the plot logic still needs to be strengthened a lot.

When the protagonist levels up, he can basically beat the ninth-level knight, right? ? Are you still interested in running these political things? The mage profession, which combines personal power and power, has suddenly become a farming stream.... In the early days, you did politics to serve yourself, but now? ? Now that you are the Minister of Magic of a country, do you still have the heart to be a messenger? So what if the production of magic potion drops? The most important thing is to make your own breakthrough... Now it is not the Mage Association serving you, but you are serving the Mage Association...

I have to say that at first I thought it was an orderly evil protagonist like the Kosma Empire, but I didn't expect that the further I looked at it, the more I felt that the protagonist was leaning towards orderly neutrality or even orderly good, such as spending 70,000 to buy a manor. Since the protagonist has vaguely guessed that the woman is the leader of everything, if it were me, I would use mine. The official identity found definite evidence, and then used it as a handle to lower the price. I think if it were me, I would lower the price by at least half, which is the market price of 35,000 gold pounds. This money is enough for that woman to live well enough. If she chooses to accept it, everyone will be happy. If this woman chooses to be greedy, she will have no choice but to die. This is my idea, which can not only save the protagonist some money, but also allow the woman to vent her dissatisfaction of being charged a price increase for helping her. In the back of the princess, the stupid female princess used herself as bait and ran to the theater. At this time, the protagonist, like Jiang Liaozhi, did not remind his sister and friends, but allowed it to develop, and then almost got punished. If I were the protagonist, I would put it in the future That princess had her whole family cut off. The reason is very simple. Family is the bottom line. Her behavior threatened the safety of her family and almost caused the death of the protagonist. All this was because of her stupidity, and her guards even wanted to hold the protagonist accountable for this. I can't bear it! Her whole family must be killed!

I found it on the new book list before, and it was a good read. But after signing the contract, I couldn't find it on various lists. For newcomers and new books, you have to think of ways to promote it, such as which great master you go to chat with, make friends, kneel down, ask for introductions, give you a tip at the end of a chapter, old bookworms will work, etc. Although it is a slow start, follow your own outline, but there should also be some fun and small conflicts. For example, Chapter 44.45, Is this part what we want to read and care about? Do we need to write 2 chapters? You may have plans for this character in the future, but you can introduce it later. But at this stage, don't be too far away from the pig's trotters. Write more about the progress of the pig's trotters. The progress process is mapped to the actual progress results. You don't have to describe these results directly, but we must see that the patience of readers cannot help but be tested, especially new books.

I'm almost fully booked, but I suddenly found out there's an event where you can buy the entire book for 999 points…

From the very beginning when you had only written a few chapters, I started recommending it with a unanimous vote of 12. I have always thought it was good for a newcomer to write like this. My monthly votes are basically distributed to a few books that have been subscribed, and yours is at least 1 vote per month. This is the only book that I have pre-ordered, but I can't find it in the top of the monthly ticket rankings. The other pre-ordered books can be found in at least the top 50, which shows that I am optimistic about you. But since the battle to conquer the Phoenix was just passed by me, I stopped posting recommendations and distributed them to other newcomers, because at that time I realized that I had to finish writing. Oh, I'm very sorry, really sorry. In fact, the spaces should be finished as soon as they are opened. For example, it would be better to have another story at that time than to end it hastily like this. If I can't write it down, I still need to round it out.

There's too much about politics and power, and too little about magic.

I feel like it's a little off center. I'm here to see magic. The result is a book covered in officialdom

A few conjectures on the major post-war developments (water post) The following content only represents personal views, discussion is welcome After the war is over, the mutual defense and trade agreements have been signed, the content after this book must be the major post-war developments, including but not limited to factional development and personal development. 1. In terms of personal development, the protagonist's promotion to a magician will almost certainly attract a wave of subscriptions, but accelerating promotion will face two problems: (1) The ninth-level knight who is the target of the magician has not been able to get a positive description before, and the profile description has not fully reflected the "" in the background The oppressive feeling of "stepping into the realm of God", but a positive description of the magic field is necessary. If you simply learn a few more magics, it will definitely not be that interesting. It is necessary to write it in a way that is consistent with the "realm of gods" and add some exclusive effects (I just don't know whether this effect is academic or combat-related). (2) At present, the upper limit of the wizard system is only up to the great wizard [excluding Merlin and the possible Grand Tutor of the Imperial Academy (sorry for playing too much Warhammer in the past two days)]. The protagonist will be two levels ahead if he rises further. To avoid Long Aotian, he can only write about the common progress of the entire caster field. I don't know if the author can stand it. 2. In terms of faction development As the protagonist, the basic base of Noah Magician will definitely be the core of the future. The author of the outline of this kind of thing has probably been written a long time ago, so I won't go blind and just write down a few conjectures to share with everyone. The Kingdom of Noah carried out large-scale population migration during the war, but the author did not write about whether there was war mobilization. If so, now that the war is over, there will definitely be a large number of veterans. We can create something like the "GI Bill of Rights" in the United States during World War II, absorb soldiers into the magic academy, digest the labor force, ensure social stability, and pave the way for the possible existence of a full-scale magician army in the future. Kill three birds with one stone. It's really fun to save up and read it, and you can also use up the discount coupons 🤓 Finally, I wish this book will get better and better.