Military Commissioner of Southern Tang

It is very well written and I hope the author will keep up the good work. I also hope that the author will not include too many beauties. The quality of a book does not depend on the whim of the moment, but on its perseverance!

What a pity! Most of the writing was very good, but unfortunately, after I decided to unify the world, I wrote too much about the protagonist going off alone. I don't know if I am writing a historical military novel or a travelogue. The priority is too bad. Moreover, the protagonist is portrayed as a person with great ambitions, but he is always arranging love stories, and there are still several female characters. Journey to the West, if Tang Monk fell in love in the land of daughters, would he be able to obtain the true scripture?

Historical hegemony articles, do not develop their own power, describe so many female characters, see women unable to walk, I have tried poison, fellow Taoists, feel free to do so

The last few chapters have been really confusing. It's understandable that you had no choice but to go on a pirate ship to train soldiers and rebel, but when the leader of the bandit was exposed, you just surrendered and followed the angel back to the capital to prosecute... Although the protagonist originally planned to stand on his own, leaving his subordinates in his hometown to develop in secret, and going to be accused himself, well... He was very courageous, but very naive! 1. These subordinates of mine are not 100% loyal, and they each have their own plans, and they don't get along for long. 2. There are no heirs, and only the fiancée is allowed to temporarily act as the leader. Even if the fiancée is very capable, the limitations of history will still make the literati disdain, and the military people will not trust to follow. 3. The hostile forces have not been completely eliminated, and the landlord and gentry group has not been completely eliminated. How can they put themselves in danger? Isn't this a gift for an opportunity? Fourth, the prestige is insufficient, and the career has just started. As soon as I have some hope, I give myself away first... Aren't my subordinates panic? 5. He is indecisive, and his subordinates still retain a subordinate who wants to be his master, and he is still not completely surrendered. His personal ethics are average. If you don't kill him, you will say that it is due to modern thinking. You can tolerate it, but can you control it immediately? You have to wait until he almost does something bad before locking him up. How can you scare your subordinates if you are so undecisive? 6. The confidentiality measures are not in place, and they almost rely on the grateful hearts of the subordinates... 7. This is the most confusing... You said that the protagonist, the leader of the rebellion, took the initiative to go to the capital to confess his crime. Your subordinates are secretly expanding the army. Why do you need to post recruitment notices in Zhou County, the prefecture's capital? You are also planning to steal troops from your arch-enemy, the former governor. Wouldn't the governor tell the emperor that you have expanded your army? The current Emperor of the Southern Tang Dynasty is not the successor Li Yu. Isn't this because he is afraid that the protagonist will not die quickly enough? How can we give you time to expand and train your troops? Even if it is still as the protagonist guessed, Qiu Hou will be asked to kill again, he should be vigilant, right? Doesn't this make the rescue more difficult? Not to mention that the emperor looks down on the small role of the protagonist. If it is really a small role where the confidence comes from, the boss will send it off, the younger brother will guard the family and develop and then rescue the boss... He should have run away when he was exposed! If you save land and lose people, everyone and land will be lost. If you save people and lose land, everyone and land will be saved... In general, these chapters are very Jianghu, and they are like martial arts novels. As far as historical hegemony is concerned, they are very naive, lack rational judgment, and are a bit whimsical.

The writing is okay, but I can't go into details. You said that a person who wanted to be a county magistrate went to his county and became a servant of a wealthy gentleman because of poverty. Who can imagine this? You have no money, but your master has money! Isn't it just a matter of a word if you ask someone who is about to become an official to borrow money from him?

I've read more than twenty chapters, and it's really well written. Although many modern words are used in idioms and descriptions of things, the ancient rhyme is not enough, and there are some minor flaws, but the emotions of the characters are very well portrayed. If that period of history can be truly written later, it will definitely be a masterpiece. It's a pity that I'm so poor that I can only say, "Come on."

In the name of the Five Dynasties and Ten Kingdoms, Chapter Thirty-nine also played the case of family learning and Bao Gong Duan. Crazy, he also brought out martial arts masters to fly over the walls. Speechless

I stayed up all night to read it... Exhaled a breath Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I'm watching!

Why is this book so good and so late on the shelves? The author insists that I will order all of it.

A bit too taken for granted. For example, you are about to take office, but you end up working as a servant... The reason is that you have no money and you want to find out the inside story... This... How should I put it, are you planning to take the Stephen Chow route? This kind of plot really only works in nonsensical comedies. Then the boundaries of historical martial arts are unclear. It's too uncomfortable to write about martial arts in the tone of a historical novel. If you want to include elements of martial arts in history, it is a very high-level challenge. If you don't feel very sure about it, then you will not be able to live with yourself. And, women, women, women, there are women wherever you go. And their personalities are very flat. You're the White Lotus Saint, you're the leader of a copycat village, you're a lady... It's just boring. All vases. No sense of reality at all. There are character templates like this all over the street. There is nothing new at all, so why write about her? This kind of character design is really caused by laziness. If you are lazy in thinking, you don't think about the character design that you came up with in three to five minutes. Why should readers pay for it? Conversation is awkward. This is a question of ability and proficiency. Write more and ponder more, and read the dialogues you write by yourself, really. This dialogue is really a pain for readers who are more sensitive to dialogue language. But are there any advantages? In fact, there are. The author's sense of narrative is actually very good, and he can achieve a deeper immersion in the protagonist's perspective. However, this advantage has not been well reflected, because the protagonist's own initiative is too weak and he has been pushed by the plot. He often looks on from the sidelines and is rescued when something goes wrong. Once you do this, the water will turn into water again. You can try another way of writing, change the protagonist to save others and try again. Based on the author's ability in this area, I think it can produce a better feeling. The protagonist cannot be Tang Monk, the protagonist must be Wukong. He must have the ability to lead the story forward. Back to the character design, every character design in the story is not good, they are all lazy, the standard template is one set higher, and all behaviors and motivations remain at the most superficial level. Like traditional drama, it's all facial makeup. In addition, the turning points are all the so-called "nothing happens without coincidence", and after reading it as a whole, I feel, how should I say, boring and panicked.